This blood flows through my veins
And hugs my spirit tighter to me
Thoughts stick to me like glue
Wondering if this is true....
{Refrain}
Living on command
Passing out on the couch
Listening to metal
Gonna bust down these walls
Craving mineral water
Fantasy
Isn't free
Should have been
Something I wanted
Lighting strikes
Battlefield
Casting our shadows on the world
As the blood flows from my veins
I'll take you in my arms again
Squeezing onto you memory, forever
You'll linger for a minute, then disappear
Living on Demand
{Refrain}
Could it be?
Is it real?
What is happening?
Why can't I feel?
As the ice water envelopes my body
My sense dead
I'll leave my imprint
The boring story
Of a troubled mind
Diseased and fractured
I'll move on
And as my blood flows from these veins
The scar I've cut, will disappear
Leaving only their bloody memory
We fell behind
Puddle of blood
Massing at my feet
Pick me up
So I don't scream
Scared and reckless
I've lost my will...
To carry on
Hold me up as I slump in your arms
The feeling of you close around me
Makes me feel so close to you
And it makes changes
{Refrain x2}
Author notes
Written January 19th, 2005
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thanks for the words.
I appreciate you reading my work as well. thank you.
-kate -
Great
Kate~
This was totally brilliant, seriously. So much power and emotion in your words. That's the beauty of poetry, the heart and emotion put into it. It's a great release. Excellent word usage, and very well written. Awsome peace honestly, i really enjoyed this.
Best Wishes~
~Vikki Leigh~ -
My name is Kate, but in Poland people call me Kasia. (Call me Kate...
) Thanks for the nice comment. It made me happyfull!! :]
Kate -
Is your name Kasia or Kate? I be confused. Anyway, I LOVE LOVE LOVE your song. It has the imagery of Evanescence -- but it still sounds like thoughts going through your head {much like Linkin Park}. Absolutely AMAZING! I wanna hear it to music.
Very relatable, I might add. <33
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Okay Elizabeth-
No worries, don't translate it literally!! I'm not cutting and I won't ever, aside from the occasional, becoming more frequent phucking cheap razor cuts, I'm all in one piece !! I took some of your advice. I took off the (Hey! (Oh!) parts, but I left the stanza. I don't know, it is really good for me, it kind of brings out the whole immaturity of the poem, exactly like you said.... but it is the point of it, to kind of show how lives intermesh.
You really think this is the best thing I've ever written?? WOW!! THANKS!! You don't know how much it means to me, really. I appreciate you now....
Love
Kate
P.S. I've always appreciated you, just so you don't think wrongly of my words! -
Should I take your words literally or are they some sort of metaphorical realization that I'm supposed to figure out? I hope that it's not the earlier.
I think this is the best thing you've ever written. I'm not joking. Maybe, it's good that your muse left you for a while and gave you a chance to refresh your brain. My only complaint with this would be the (Hey!) (Oh!) part. I don't really like the idea of that whole stanza. I think it immatures the poem and takes away from its original, deep and emotional meaning.
But other than that, no criticisims. I hope all is well. I love you and miss you.
Elizabeth
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