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A Twilight Paradox

A Twilight Paradox

   

Don’t punish
Or criticize too severely

Or discard

The following follies that disintegrate

Your respectfully fine perceptions of
The seniors who surround us

As their images are injured and killed

In these underground passages:

   

They lie in absentminded

Deterioration- charming,

But the large fissures and gaps that appear

Spook us with their enormous size-

Alas, they are too golden to feel the grief…

   

Where they were once rugged and turbulent

They are now fractured and sedate.

   

They live in lethargic, inebriated,

Docile, expiring worlds,

Dwelling in the common beginnings of

Pomposity and decorum

In a gilded waning splendor

Claimed by right of antiquity,

Acquiring exquisite tastes and holdings
In a vast squandering

In their dimming days…

   

It is now that a new-found appetite for the lucrative

Afflicts them.

They may occasionally confess to it

In long-winded displays

Of receding absurdities...

   

You deserve a shorter explanation.

   

The real truth merits unmitigated anger from their former selves

Who trod the paths so carefully

Only to now witness

Their total abandonment

And utter ruin

In their farcical procession of pious larceny,

While finding scapegoats in the rabble around them who are

Pillaging the inner sanctums
Of their w
anton opulence

That is so perturbing yet alluring.

   

Such is the reward for a lifetime of prices paid

To egotism that prevails and rules

Even into their progressive numbness and sluggish courage.

   

Feeble yet bombastic,

Wretched elder citizens of public depravity

Muddling through the booty,

Sticking a hand in the large meaningless cavity of life

And pulling out an oath, a covenant,

A pact with the devil

For one last stately feast of debauchery and cravenness

Before dirt is shoveled over their portly oddness

And buries them once and for all

With their grotesque fabrications

That were brought on by the first age spots

In their twilight paradox.

   

What’s this?

My first age spot?

Ah, I am ready to die.

Let the music begin!   

   

   

wbiro

 

   

   

Author notes

About people you know... like ourselves!
Here the paradox is that our 'village elders' are supposed to be wise and revered, and yet we sometimes find those who decline in less than respectable ways...
Written January 19th, 2005

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  • wbiro gold member
    January 19, 2005
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    I haven't given you a happy little applaude guy in a while...
    Yes, you may go out with dignity, or with petty debauchery like my folk here!


  • B2oH
    January 19, 2005
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    Och. Aye. I'm not clear on what filthy lucre these seniors want...but I say, let's form a posse and chase them back to the Golden Years Estates and lock the gate, eh? More for us later.

    I also get the sense of a bit of poking a finger into that aging flesh that is trying so desperately to regain a former glory through surgery, drugs and god-knows-what-else. Shall I go quietly into that all consuming night? I hope, with dignity and a sedate grace that belies my gnawing fears.

    I like this one. Thought provoking.

  • wbiro gold member
    January 19, 2005
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    Ah, thanks for your perception- I discovered that the reader might not know it was about us in our waning years, and that I should fix it... no... yes... no... yes... well, you get an applause for pointing it out!

  • is
    January 19, 2005
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    wow. that was quite intense. your view on the people you are portraying is so passionate and severe. the words used really brought about a sense of judgement that was quite new to me.i wasnt quite sure as to what generalised people these words were aimed at, yet maybe the aim of your piece could have been to provoke the reader into making their own choice on the matter... anyways i was quite impressed. thankyou for that. i very much enjoyed
    Edited on Jan 19, 6:38 because ''.