Walk with me ,yes , here by my side. Come and hold my hand.
Does it feel good? I have waited for so long to have you
like this in my arms. Let me touch you now. Let me sense
your heart beat. Slow and fast at the same time. I wanna know
how it feels to make you mine, one more time.
Remember this? Yes, our first kiss ,ooh... those lips of yours.
Eternal bliss to caress your mouth. To feel you all the way in
and never out. Take me now, don't be shy. Come don't wait until the
moon decides to run away into the night.
I want to get lost in your eyes. I want to seduce your tender
skin. Look ! It's raining. Do you remember when we used to
make love under the rain? Hold me, hold me now. I can feel
your pulse racing. I guess I still feel the same way today.
Touch me here... mum, yes! My thighs get so warm when you're
near. What... you want me? I want you too. Let's go in and play
the game of two. I get the bottom and the top is for you. I adore
it, when you fill me up. Light as a feather, um mm! yes! Hard,
fast don't ever let me go. There, there, there, yeah!
It was great! I forgot how good it felt. Next time you fight
with her, give me a call again. Remember that I am yours,
even if she said; yes. No one will know you like I do , even if
I am the second best.
Author notes
Not of a personal expirience but inspired by a person I know.
Written January 18th, 2005
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You will never be a second dish chick. You will always be the best and greatest woman I could meet. Could you send me your number again? The stupid system lost it before I could write it down.
I miss you angel... so much. I still think of you everyday and long for your touch. Please... let me know.
~Pedro~
Edited on Jan 29, 3:02 because 'typo'. -
Interesting stuff. I don't think that I could ever settle for being 'second best' though. Good write.
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Very nice and descriptive without being too overly obvious. This flowed nicely throughout and the imagery was exquisite. Very pleasing to the literary palette!
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You need a bit of punctuation, man I never thought I'd tell someone that I hat punctuation. Unfortunately because you have a large grouping of words this needs it!
All that stuff aside, it's more of a story or journal entry. I would take out some of the words and format this a bit more.
You are very descriptive if a bit overly so. I did like this I just think you could make it better! -
Very nice peom!
Wooooe! That was good and the discription were so vivid that when I got to the last few line it was like a mixture of arousel and intrige all at once like what the hell just happened followed by woooow that was a great read with a nice twist. Please critic a poem.
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