she whispers to me
gentle cherry chocolate prose
sweet scented language passing by
and lingering on my lips
( almost as if i could swallow her words )
i dine exquisitely on her voice
Author notes
Written January 18th, 2005
A contest entry
- Eloquence in Brevity by RatherImaginative.
1400 points, ended July 31, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This sounds so much like a prelude to a kiss. The imagery is amazing, and paints the most wonderful pictures in my head. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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Adorable.
This is an adorable read.
I enjoyed it immensely.
Best of luck in the contest.
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I love choclate, wish I had some now, anyways, your poem has nice imagery....keep writing...
Living
~^~Tiya~^~
Edited on Sep 03, 4:57 p.m. because ''. -
wow,that was terrific except now i want chocolate or romance or both.the sentiment is very romantically inspiring.it's a very rich write.my best to you in the contest.
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This is great, very sensual and lovely. Thanks for entering my contest
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Well that gave me the shivers!
I'm not sure if the last line has the impact that maybe you were looking for but hey - who am I to judge?!
She must be a very talented speaker!
Louise x -
Me gusta mucho
You are so tasteful and creative! I love your technique and sheer eloquence in everything that I have read from you so far. Love the last line in this one....BRILLIANT -Lea -
YAY
Ha, I love poetry about food. Oh the metaphor...
* contemplates *
Nicely done in such a short space. I admire that as mine always seem to be so long. Its nice to see you writing about another writer. Oftentimes, writers dont know how much they are appreciated.
Nicely done!
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AMAZING POEM
This was a beautiful write. The imagary was fantastic for only a few line. Keep writing these wonderful poems. Thank you so much for sharing your talents. Take care, Sandy
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The wording was amazing. The images were superb. And you're magnifiscent. I can taste this poem, and evoking taste is perhaps the hardest thing to do in poetry. :-) Best of luck in the contest!
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Beautiful words. if only everyone's thoughts could be written so freely... You turned something so simple into something amazing. Best of luck to you, too!
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8/10
Great work, very pleasing, makes me smile and feel nice inside
It is nice to see some positive poetry and to create such images with 7 lines is quite impressive.
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YUMMMMMMY!
Oooh.... Dessert.... I'm so hungrrrryyyy right now, I could eat your poem! I did, however, just consume half a chocolate caramel bar(to my taste buds and belly pleasure, and my tush's despair), so I would think I would be less.... hungry.
Anyway, excellent discriptions-- sent a little shiver down me spine, it did. Good luck in the contest!
for Emily
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Well done
Umm Ummmm.....delicious! Great job...... short and sweetly to the point, wonderfully done. Thanks so much for sharing. Good luck.... -
Wow, that was a good one. I liked it. Keep up the good work. Also thanks so much for following the rules in this contest... Well, most of them you did. Take care and good luck...
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That's so... simple, yet gorgeous. I wish I could express as much in only 6 lines.
Wow. I could almost taste that chocolate cherry flavor... and it was delicious
I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
~Christy
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