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Words (Triolet)

 

 

 


Words on paper are easier to say
No more wandering thoughts of bliss
As the heart speaks better that way
Words on paper are easier to say

 

The quill takes to paper as its way
Sealing in each emotion, not to miss
Words on paper are easier to say
No more wandering thoughts of bliss

 

 

 


I am very fortunate to have a great bunch of “kids” under my wing.  Anna Grace and I worked together on this Triolet.  I gave her the first line and the basics on the format of the Triolet and she blasted out a wondrous piece.  I am very proud of her.  Through slight modifications, this is the final outcome.  We hope you enjoy it.

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Written January 18th, 2005

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  • meena krish
    February 22, 2007
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    This is a lovely triolet beautifully penned; and yes words on paper are easier to say. It is so much easier to write one's thoughts and feelings down for it simply flows. Words not spoken too just inks its way into the open..an excellent piece.
    Take care.


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    May 18, 2006
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    WOW! This seems to come from the hands of a master poet! I completely agree that words on paper are much easier to say than spoken ones. I for one find it easier to write than to have to say something. Thanks to the internet, telephone sms and other means of writing, life is easier I find that today when people receive a hand-written letter they are overjoyed but its not the same feeling when they receive a phone call from the same person. Words are very powerful and create destiny when thoughts turn into them. I believe that deeply. The rhyme scheme is very nice here and all the other requirements of the triolet form also are followed very well.
    A great job Anna!

    love,
    Charishma

  • silent-screamer
    November 9, 2005
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    i have a nice feeling now

    I enjoy tributes to the written word. My heart misses the words spoken in love to someone special.


  • abernaith
    August 23, 2005
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    I delight in reading this. It is something that tickles my writer's toes. I especially like how the third lines pairs so comfortably with the fourth--that was great! Bravo! I have, though, some reservations about the seventh line, I think it's to do with how it sounds slightly off-key in rhythm for me. I wouldn't want to impose on your poem, and I do understand that you may have some personal thing in mind in having put the line that way, but I would still want to give you my suggested phrase: "Sealing in each emotion an ink-stained kiss". It might sound off to you, however, so it is absolutely alright if you decide not to take note of my suggestion.


  • Cara Rose
    June 17, 2005
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    Another different type of poetry for me.. You both have done an excellent job.. and your words here, well they are so truthful. Nicely done... neat.


  • Shameless1 silver member
    January 20, 2005
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    Ah this is really good and recently being introduced to what a triolet is myself I can say you've done really well with it. I like this alot because I've often in time of doubt written a letter instead of made a phone call or had a converstation with some. Just because it is alot easier to get what your feeling out on paper than it is to say it. Written text shows no human emotion or hesitation. It just simply give the reader a message. Whether that be good or bad it does so without being influnced my a persons neverousness or anticipation of whats to come. Very well written piece and keep it up. I have since written several in this form and love it. You have a great teacher. Good job both of you and good luck in the contest.

  • DevilsWrongHand
    January 19, 2005
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    nice job

    This is cool. I want you to help me write on of these do-dads-thingys too, if you don't mind. This is another great write and tell dustybones they did a nice job!
    XOXO
    ~laura


  • Pierre Richards
    January 19, 2005
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    excellent!

    As I said in the Fire, I will have to learn this one...
    Lovely words spoken here.
    So many things can be seen in this; a thought of writing a letter to a loved one, thinking of a break up letter, sending either good or bad news to someone you care for, and many other thoughts come across with this.
    Well done!


  • pattyann4500
    January 18, 2005
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    John, dear, you absolutely have reason to be proud of Anna. This is a wonderful work. You work well together! Hugs, Patricia


  • neptune386
    January 18, 2005
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    you both did a great job. i really have trouble expressing, even with all of the beautiful words we have, how well you write. and you do wonders when combining with others as well. great job.

    alyssa


  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 18, 2005
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    This is a beautiful triolet Sweet Cheeks. I remember when you were first learning this form yourself and Susan so graciously helped you. I am glad you have it perfected and have chosen to pass along the joy of this form to one of your adopted poets. Thank you both for entering the contest. Good luck!
    ♥ Kimberly

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