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So Much Snow. (tanka)


so much snow
even the mountain fades
in the distance
will I see your footprints
before Spring?














Andrew Hide
18~01~2005

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Written January 18th, 2005

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  • Sau
    January 29, 2005
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    an ice cube of words
    ideas float
    far beyond the essence
    I cannot capture it
    in my comments.
    Edited on Jan 29, 11:37 because ''.


  • Empathy-eyes
    January 21, 2005
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    Excellent

    A breath-taking tanka, full of powerful and beautiful visualisations. I really enjoyed the read, for it both attained a hint of multi-layered meaning and insightful questioning. Thank you for sharing this.

    Kate
    Edited on Jan 21, 10:56 because ''.


  • Sandygram silver member
    January 19, 2005
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    Amazing Tanka

    This was a beautiful tanka Andrew. Wonderful imagary. Thank you so much for sharing. Take care, Sandy

  • soulless1
    January 19, 2005
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    great job its great


  • I am hollywood
    January 19, 2005
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    Powerful Beautiful image, great job.

    Roxy


  • Eruvande Almare
    January 19, 2005
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    good

    I really liked this, so soft and beautiful. It reminds me of a lover's cry for lost love. Very powerful and enticing.


  • Kitesen
    January 19, 2005
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    Hey Adrew depents on if you are related to the Yetti.
    But if your mind is as clear as the snow image you painted you can expect anything (or should it be everything). Anyhow a fine picture whith fine emotion.
    Edited on Jan 19, 3:51 because ''.


  • Maatkara gold member
    January 19, 2005
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    Wonderful image and feeling in this, Andrew! I love the question, since heavy snowfall obliterates footprints so quickly...

    ~G


  • Shiga
    January 18, 2005
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    nice job! It's got that short but ammusing quality to it. The question at the end left that air of mystery leaving teh reader with a great ending! This poem is extremly successfull! It's always nice to read a tanka becuase I find there aren't that many around! It was a nice treat! May all your poems be as successfull as this in the future !

    -April


  • cutiepie gold member
    January 18, 2005
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    Excellent

    I enjoyed this very much... It remings me of the gentle flow of a Haiku... Excellent

  • wbluerose02
    January 18, 2005
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    awesome write

    good write here. I liked how you had me us my imagination here to put myself right there. thank you for sharing this write with my family and I. waiting to read so much more of your fine write here. excellent poem. awesome job


  • JenP
    January 18, 2005
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    I really liked this, it was really sweet. You created beautiful visions of soft, white snow. Ah, I miss it. Nice one

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