They wonder why
I sit here and cry?
They ask me what's wrong
but they don't hear me long.
It's more of a greeting
like Hi how are you?
They don't want to know if you're OK
Or even what you do...
I was with a man for three months and three weeks
I gave him my all and now we barely speak
Sometimes we do, but he is in pain
I am too, it was MY heart he gained.
He met another and thinks he loves her...
Part of me wishes
That it were my face he kisses.
Maybe he was lonely and just needed a touch
Did he ever think I needed it too? I needed it so much?
He is broken, He's in torment
He just needs some peace
I want it to be over, I want it to cease.
Part of me thinks that he pushed me away
To protect me from him, that's what he would say.
I grasp on to hope and pray he heals soon
Trying to cleanse his open wounds.
He just wanted someone to hold him just right
Someone to lay next to and love him all night.
I'm too far away in distance by land
To look into his eyes, to softly touch his hand.
But I love him, I love him, I love him you see
Love so much more real than it could ever be.
And because I'm not there and because I can't touch
He pushes me away, he pushes so much.
And now I lay broken because I know he really loved me
and He tries to protect me and move on and be free.
Does he really love her? Or is he still in love with me?
How does real love die so suddenly?
I don't think it does. I think he still loves me
I think what we had scared him so much
And he was afraid to open up and tell me his love.
He is unhappy with who he is
so He pushes me away
But i just want to be there for him
Until my dying day.
I wish he could see
he had real love with me...
Because I'm broken
with these words left unspoken.
Author notes
I wrote this for Michael thinking he loved me the whole time we were together...I found out today he played me and he said he didnt love me as much as i thought he did, well why say you'll adopt my kid when we get married if you don't love me as much as I thought you do huh? That one still puzzles me
Written January 17th, 2005
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this is amazing!!! so emotional and so full of compassion. keep it up -
You know, this whole poem was great but when I got to the bottom I was like WOW! with these words left unspoken WOW! The emotion in this was SO STRONG! You are a great writer. I should have read this sooner because I know I've seen the background before. lol
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Oh sweety im so sorry for you. guys are jerks we should know not to play their games the only hurt us i always have an open ear and a free shoulder
stay strong and fuck guys u need a man!!
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this was amazing... i loved it..great job... great job... it was so good... love stac
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Wow.
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I drew the background myself, so thanks
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too much love, but then again I'm a darkone..
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Wow, the poem is beautiful, yet quite sad. I love the background of this. I haven't read such a good poem in a long time. keep up the good writes!
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WOW I love this background I didnt read the poem
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brilliantly wrote dear friend dont change a t
wow, I'm sorry to hear that your so down
The poem held such emotion, it' kinda just pulled you into the beauty and pain of the words.
It's a beautiful write, yet so sad, and really it has left me quite speechless, the drawing you have done for the Bg as well is very good, it goes with the poem well, i can really relate to this which I think is why to me it's so heart wrenching, it brought tears to my eyes, and I havent read a write thats done that in a long time, beautiful job hun.
Don't loose faith, and keep ur head up, things will turn around again eventually, you just gotta be strong.
keep up the great writes, ttyl
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nice...
your poem is so heart griping. i absolutly LOVE it. your background goes so well with the subject of the poem. cries just a little fromthe hart ach in poem -
i love the background, its very good, i wish i could see the full affect of it with out words covering it.. nice work hon.
Kristen
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I agree with diseased mind, this is quite unique, even if it didnt flow so well at times, its still a good write, your message is heartfelt. Im sorry all this happened to you. I liked this and will keep checking back. Keep up the good work
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I'm so sorry about what happened. It's good that you haven't turned into some vindictive bitch or something. this sort of positive view of the situation makes your poem very unique and good to read. the emotion is very clear in this also. the rhyme, though a little inconsistent, was still done well. great job on this and I hope things get better for you.
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This was sad, pure, and interesting.
Good write and read.
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This was so beautiful! It was so true and just pure. I love the ending, especially the last line. I liked how sometimes you repeated thoughts, but without using the same words. That was creative. Wonderful write. Keep on Keeping on.
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A beautiful write... you did a really good job putting your emotions into this one... I think you did a great job of getting you point across and you chose just the right words... I know just what this feels like... If you ever need someone to talk to... I'm here... there will always be someone there for you... even when it seems you're all alone, you're not... trust me... Keep up the good work!!!! and NEVER stop writing!!!!
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I really enjoyed it you put your emotions down so well. Keep smiling
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actually i didn't think this was really bad...I actually liked it ~ i think you did a really good job of portraying your emotions and getting your point across. you can definatly feel the emotion and pain behind this...and thats the whole point of even writing right? so keep it up...I hope you feel better and if you need anyone to talk to...im around. always - loveslastkiss
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This was very sad. If he loves you like he should he will figure things out and be back. I dunno how he could go from what you had to where he is and what he's doing now. I know how much you love him. I hope things work out for you. I hope you get the love you deserve. Your friend always, Jason
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It'll be OK
An excellent expression of genuine emotion heartfelt and sorrowful. Written with truth and wonder and feeling. It is not only revealing but thought provoking and I feel that it poses a question that is not easily forgotten and tugs at my mind even now. How does real love die so suddenly? Followed Imeeadiatly by "I don't think". I feal that this is the underlying main statement of this piece. Sure it says a whole lot more but in the end it really feels like a big Unsure Uncertain, WHY? Filled with disbelief, desire and hope. As well as the harsh bleak reality of it all.
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