You are the love of my life
and you were always there for me.
waking up to you every morning,
was like waking to the sound
of the beautiful sea.
when I held you close to my heart
I had no worries or fear.
It is like you dissolved within me
and everything became clear.
Remember when we first met?
I lost my love, and I was in my darkest days?
But then you came and found me
and you have changed all those ways.
All you did was whisper sweet nothings to me
unlocking my sadness, while you set my mind free.
You sparkled every time I gazed my eyes upon you.
I always said if I ever lost you I wouldn't know what to do.
But as time went by, I did lose you
and now I am going out of my mind.
If only I could turn back the clock
if only I could somehow rewind.
I now live behind these bars
never to see your beautiful face
of dazzling stars.
I just wanted to let you know
how much I miss you
I wish you were here to ease my pain
Oh how I love you
and miss you
My beloved,
cocaine.
A contest entry
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I was thinking uh ow not another love poem and then the ending wow.it was just the sort of unexpected twist that I like.Totally awesome -
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awwwww allxthatxIxam Thank you so much! I am truly honored by your comment!
This piece is very personal, and there was a time in my life that wasn't good because of drugs. It is very personal to me! So I really appreciate you commenting on it.
That to me means alot. Thank you once again
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you know me!!!
I aim to.....confuse
Yea this one is sort of personal, but not entirely.
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I am not sure how this poem eluded me but I stumbled across it... this was amazing and i like the fact that you put that awesome twist in the end leaving the reader to sit there with their jaw dropped open as they have found out that they were fooled into thinking you were writing about a lost love (woman) they still had lost a love the love of cocaine that is... great job!
S~
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ty IronButterfly
Its about a man who is somewhat in love, fatuated, but something he is not supposed to have. but he speaks as if this thing is his love. I wanted to give it a twist somehow. when you said something sad, love or personal, I thought this is sad, and its about love(addcition), and its definitely personal. hmmm let me try entering this. i know its a bit off from alot of heartache poems about real love lol but I thought to give it a shot , ty for reading and I'm glad somebody liked it. although i could understand alot of people might get turned away because of the subject .
TY IB!!!
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Wow, that was, just, wow. The end totally caught me off gaurd and blew my socks off. Geez. Here I am reading and going along thinking, awww, what a sweet story, than I thought I was gonna cry, cuz I can definatly relate to losing something you love dearly, and then I get to the end and bang, completely different from what I was expecting. I love that about it though. I'll admit that when I said 'forbidden love' this didn't even come close to crossing my mind. But it was an excellent take on it! Great job and good luck! ~IB~
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lol!! I found that very funny! I loved the twist at the end!!! lol. One of the best i've seen so far! lol
I really thought you were talking about a loved 1!! lol
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wow that was a surprize ending. great job
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Ay carumba...I keep finding myself starting a poem with the intention of one topic then as the write moves along, I get a whole new idea for what could make it even more creative and original..you saved the twist for the last stanza in the last line and the last word..that made me say whoa out loud I like to be surprised! Amazing write
-Lis
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like it? you know whats funny? It was a love poem at first , but in the middle of it i was like hmmmm, let me put a different mode into this and gave it a twist at the end. when they reach that cocaine they would be like wow, holy cow its somebody talkin about the drug cocaine not a person. I thought it would be clever to do it that way, I am glad you like it thank you very much!!!!!!!
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Good poem. It caught and held my attention which is hard to do since i have add. Interesting twist too.
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yes chum, that was my main objection, When i was writing it i thought why not make it a twist, to throw them off, so i added another element to it and it came out nicely. I wanted to have it as the person who is talking about this love was a person but in fact it was about drugs, (cocaine)
I hope you liked it, and thank you very much for leaving a comment and applauding
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u tricked me! as you did with everyone else who've already read this poem....this is soo cool.
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lol, Ok I tricked the reader see? This is what I wanted to do exactly. This is aobut one man who is talking about a loved one which is in fact his drug addiction. He displays his feelings as if the cocaine was his girlfriend or love. I wanted to add that twist.
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geez..this is good but i was expecting u to be talking about a woman..lol..great writing keep it up -
lol yea what inspired that poem "the love of my life" was watching a movie about drug addicts and homeless people and on top of that a song from metallica called "master of puppets". Nump? nope never heard of it, so you just taught me something!! I'll never be a nump head thank god!!! lol thank you very much raneika
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very interesting how you fool me as I was reading I thought you was talking about a loveone at the end you wrote cocaine and I was shock this was a very good poem how you got me and I think other people that read this will agree from Raneika p.s don't ever do nump(crack) the new name for crack in case you have'nt heard...
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