R egal flowers
Of many coloured shades
S cent of heaven
E very blossom brings
S weet beauty of Spring
Author notes
[click rose for song: La Vie en Rose ]
Acrostic tanka known as oriku
Companion piece to 'Rosa Mystica'(oriku)allpoetry.com/poem/999354
Written January 16th, 2005
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Spring is so very nice. A wonderful Acrostic tanka
I like how you used all of the forms together. In some ways I can look at this and view us as the blossoms and bringing the beauty of spring. There can be lots of takes in this one piece here other then what people actually see.
I love baby breath. I would love to see you write something about my favorite flower
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beautiful poem
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you roses with the beauty and the scent filled me in the morning...
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Meditation
We must take time to perceive the beauty of roses, then we perceive heaven as well. Beautiful thoughts, Gen.
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I loved this short and sweet tribute to roses, it was awe inspiring. I loved the flow and the fact that it spelled roses at the end, that was really good. This beautiful poem is one that will probably stick with me for a while. Thanx for sharing yoru work, it was much appreciated.
Tiphanie -
this is a beautiful poem, and the picture brings it even more to life, and im very glad i allowed prewrites, if only so i could read this poem. sadly, it isn't quite what i am looking for, but thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading this. its beautiful
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A beautiful presentation here! Great picture that I could just put myself right into and I liked the way the acrostic looked as well as what the message was. A good write
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Thank you, Tom!
Hehe! I recommend 'em, but I don't take 'em (not a 'class' taking type 
) My acrostic tanka turned out to be a known Japanese form called 'oriku'...and I thought I was just experimenting. 
~G
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amid all the flowers the rose stands
Always my friend you speak in a quality that pleases the senses of the mind , as well you have defined the depth of nature's extreme soul.I embrace the flowers on a colourful field of spirit scented with the breeze .Love your tanka 'G' you have penned it with sweetness of patience ~in my eyes .Andrew has a great class indeed .Bows to the expert's pen ~ Skinwalker -
yeah i was ill informed about haiku as well it has something to do with converting the japaneese equivelent of syllables into syllables and being less is a newer interpretation thanks though
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Who did you learn that from? That is the maximum number of syllables acceptable, but not the ideal. (No one can learn these Japanese forms in a day, either). You should check out AndrewHide's tanka here, he teaches classes in tanka on Allpoetry too.
~G
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I first learned about tanka today i thought it was supposed to be 5-7-5-7-7
could you please check mine out its titlte sea song and tell me if i did it right -
Thank you! Glad you appreciated it. I have two other oriku, 'Lotus' (my first) and 'Rosa Mystica'.
~G
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I have not come across the Oriku before when reading poetry, it is a nice surprise. Acrostic/Tanka. I will have to think on this some with future writings, thank you for that. As to the poem itself, very beautiful. Nothing beats smiling and smiling when inhaling the life of beauty is a bonus.
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PS I am extremely (did I tell you e x t r e m e l y) jelous of your talent
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This poem shows how beautiful YOU are. So sweet...and I agree with Margaret about the pciture- gorgeous.
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Terrific work!
Gennelle, I like this one even better, the beauty of these flowers breathes a sweet scent in your words.
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yes gen i much prefer this one..like how the colour changes too
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Thank you Mari! Yes, they are so much better growing...
~G
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This is a wonderful companion to the first poem! The colors and the scents are very much alive on your words. The poems made me feel like buying some roses, but again, I prefer to have them in my garden than to keep only for few days in a vase.
This is just lovely Ge!
Kisses and love,
Mari
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