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Curtain

Drops the sticks
Pulls the curtain tight
No one can see inside
Can only
Watch
Wonder
Worry
Curtains hide you from the outside world
Block out the pain
Opaque curtains
Watching from the inside
Watching from the outside
Contains the
fear
and the
pain
The world will never know.
Will never tell.

Author notes

This is for a very good friend who wasn't acting like themselves.
Written January 15th, 2005

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  • tsarina
    July 30, 2005
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    beautiful, powerful

    Hi Marina!

    How are you? you haven't been writing poetry lately, so you can ask me any time for ideas,or you can base your poetry on actual events in your lifetime. I love this segment of the poem:

    Can only
    Watch
    Wonder
    Worry
    Curtains hide you from the outside world
    Block out the pain
    Opaque curtains

    I love how you did a few words and then the next line, and no commas. i think that poetry is extremely powerful.

    Your sister,

    pink yoda


  • riasme
    March 12, 2005
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    wonderfully written

    Hi Marina!
    You did a wonderful job on this poem! You chose the subject wisely. I aldo like the background.
    Your little-by-about-five-years-and-i-dont-know-how-many-months-sister-who-loves-you-so-much,
    Lise

    PS what does Opaque mean?


  • gone bye-bye
    February 19, 2005
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    This is extremely beatuiful at points, and it just....oh, i never was any good at explaining. you did good, i tell you that. and those last lines - powerful. just ...that.

  • Senshaij
    January 27, 2005
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    Awesome write Mari! I really like it... definately emotion felt in this one...

    'The world will never know.
    Will never tell. '

    SO true... so true... love it! Keep up the good work!!!! and NEVER stop writing!!!!