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ELIZABETH BOWEN
The demon lover
"Oh, where have you been, my long, long love,
this seven years and more?"
"Oh, I've come to seek my former vows
Ye granted me before."

"Oh, do not speak of your former vows,
For they will breed sad strife;
Oh, do not speak of your former vows,
For I have become a wife."

He turned him right and round about,,
And the tear blinded his ee:
"I would never have trodden on this ground
If it had not been for thee."

"If I was to leave my husband dear,
And my two babes also,
Oh, what have you to take me to,
If with you I should go?"

"I have seven ships upon the sea---
The eighth brought me to land---
With four-and-twenty bold mariners,
And music on every hand."

She has taken up her two little babes,
Kissed them on cheek and chin:
"Oh, fare ye well, my own two babes,
For I'll never see you again."

She set her foot upon the ship---
No mariners could she behold;
But the sails were of the teffeta,
And the masts of the beaten gold.

She had not sailed a league, a league,
A league but barely three,
When dismal grew his countenance,
And drumlie grew his ee.

They had not sailed a league, a league,
A league but barely three,
Until she espied his cloven foot,
And she wept right bitterly.

"Oh, hold your tongue of your weeping," said he,
"Of your weeping now let me be;
I will show you how the lilies grow
On the banks of Italy."

"Oh, what hills are yon, yon pleasant hills,
That the sun shines sweetly on?"
"Oh, yon are the hills of heaven," he said,,
"Where you will never win."

"Oh, whaten a mountain is yon," she said,
"So dreary with frost and snow?"
"Oh, yon is the mountain of hell," he cried,
"Where you and I will go."

He struck the top-mast with his hand,
The fore-mast with his knee;
And he broke that gallant ship in twain,
And sank her in the sea.



LONELY PEOPLE, by AMERICA

This is for all the lonely people
Thinking that life has passed them by
Don't give up until you drink from the silver cup
And ride that highway in the sky

This is for all the single people
Thinking that love has left them dry
Don't give up until you drink from the silver cup
You never know until you try

Well, I'm on my way
Yes, I'm back to stay
Well, I'm on my way back home (Hit it)

This is for all the lonely people
Thinking that life has passed them by
Don't give up until you drink from the silver cup
And never take you down or never give you up
You never know until you try





I am currently in an angst loop, i am trying to get over it. i won a poetry contest in 8th grade, on a contest i entered as a joke (ha ha ha, guess the joke was on me?) in 5th grade i started wrote a poem about 9-11. my mom at that point went behind my back and sent it to my sisters publisher who said i was too young, and to hunt her down when i was old enough. when i was old enough she had shut down so sad.
anyway, so i am looking for some serious critiques from other poets, i gave a couple poems to my teacher who could only reply with. "Powerful and full" "You have a strong clear voice" "wonderful, careful of passive voice" "powerful" "nice back and forth motion" "strong point of view" and "painful?" ~ that one was just complete angst, nothing more than that, whining and angst. I put alot of thought into my writing. but sometimes it seems like people cant follow it. how can i make this writing better? i really want it to be perfect, because my goal is to get it published hopefully by the end of highschool. as much as my teachers comments are nice, and i feel good when i read that on my writing, it doesnt make it better, it makes it sound like it cant get better and that isnt true. i entered two contests today hoping you guys will comment and tell me what you think. I left alot of the above categories blank because i dont really want you guys to know who i am. just know i am a frustrated teen wishing for advice and not finding any. i write poems and sometimes song lyrics, i am currently working on a melody for one of my songs, my writing is second nature now, but i want it more than nature, i want it to be really good. so please comment! be rough so i can get better. but i dont want to find "this sucks" that doesnt help me, please some constructive critiques on things like lines that make no sense to you.

im a 17 year old girl and i would like people to remember that even at our age, we think we know what love is. we have pressures that other people dont remember. im a cutter, i dont know why, and i am trying to quit, its a dirty habbit and anyone who cuts knows we dont do it just to hurt ourselves but some of us dont know why we do, do it. im bi, i think girls are hott, and i enjoy looking around, i dont cheat but that doesnt mean i dont enjoy 'art' like any guy would. ive been lied to and cheated on, im sick of it, if someone doesnt like the person they shouldnt play around, grow up, you cant have both cookies, especially not at once. yuck. im sick, i dont know what with but im covered in bites on a patch in my chest, ive had trouble breathing for like... a year now, with stress attacks, im annorexic, and im willing to admit its disgusting. and i am also proud, im proud of the country my big brother finds worthy of fighting for, and im proud to see my little sister, saying "i wanna be just like you" life is dark, but moments can brighten it by worlds.

Ive gone through alot trying to grow up over the past several months, and i would never get through it if i didnt have my friends from the CB backing me up 110% so a special thanks to my pals Random Master, Blueyez, Nephlim, Morbid Maney, and XxContinualSlinkyxX



i found this quote in the CB and i think it is amazing so i had to share
"searchforparadise: the sun is rising,the dartkness fades away,the light glistens upon my face,on this newborn day.the stars die out,the sky turns blue,i make a wish upon a star,i wish to be with you."


i am also head of recruitment of the MOTF Air corp according to emo



YAY I HAVE AN AP FAMILY (i kno guys i havnt updated names or nething.. plz dnt get mad about a illy name listing! if i missed u give me an IM and i will add u, i just dnt keep up well)

Daughter- Princess Wolf Haze(erin)
sisters- battlexcryxjenni, Pup of the Wolf, mq90x9p, x02LIVEisCHRISTx0,Lifes Failure, Jazzy girl, taniselvan, Alianne Llewellyn
Brothers- Drakoi, Hellbound shadow,
Brother in law- Avarus L. Katier
mommy- Andrea-In-Love, -Ana-, Ashtaen Lady Shadow, wulf eyes, Your Secret Angel, Rhiannon Llewellyn Raven
aunts- Princessofdarkness1, Amy-g, -mira-
dad- princeofdarkness420 (on jenni's side) Dragon Heart (from rains side) Darc Raven
uncle- Griswold
Grampa, havnt met him - liquid nova, Sidewinder
I'm not sure wat he is-TwilightZoneE
princesses husband, havnt met him- gothicchaos462
Cousins- acex75, PriestessofDeath, Uopatrainer, flowersofserenity
and pups daughter (my niece)- Demonic Crow

MY FOXIE SISTER- IAmCheeseyPoof
and my foxies
Fireball~red
Jelly Bean~pink
Bullet~silver

and of course check out another of my best friends, sometimesdarkscares, and Shadow Rule

"i have three voices in my head and all of them say i need mental help" ~ Adam