Into the future He looked with deep stare,
Right now in my mind, I can see Him there.
His thoughts to the future sins of mankind
As blood ran to His eyes He became blind.
For He was beat with a shard bearing strap
As He overcame and conquered sin's trap.
They beat on His back, His sides and His chest,
His legs and His arms: Yes, this was love's quest.
His body so beaten, down to the bone
But still on His face, love openly shown.
Blows of that whip made His body shudder
Yet never a word did this man utter.
Thoughts of humanity; our sins to come
Though He has been tortured, I sit here numb.
For I see Him hanging there on His Cross,
Mangled and bloody, He's weak from blood loss.
His shoulders, out of joint, cannot support
His body's weight but still the guards retort;
Hold yourself up straight, You filthy, low king!
For You are royalty, You nasty thing!
His head is turned back, I sit here and see
His beard's been pulled out, His eyes fixed on me.
The love on His face is clearly now seen
I can't help but hear the crowd's loud scream.
They shout and they spit on Him hanging there
But all the while His life He'll not spare
For each of them, and for others to come
He'll cover their sins. I still sit here numb.
It's then that I realize, this was for me
And for each one that will openly see
That His blood was shed for our forgiveness
We've only to believe in His goodness.
With one thing to do, I call on His name
I realize that it's so simple and plain.
I've only to believe in what He gave,
It's then that from my sins I will be saved.
Melissa Sanders 06-07-04
Author notes
Jesus... the sweetest name on earth and in heaven... oh what horrible things He went through so that we might know God!
Written June 7th, 2004
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This is awesome. There was a contest recently that this would have took the gold in. It's closed now but just saying. This is an awesome write and tribute to Jesus. Well done!!
~Lyrical
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Wow this was really good. IT was very emotional. The flow was awesome!! GREAT WRITE!!!! keep writing, Rachal OMG you have so many applauds, how do you get that many, maybe because the write is so good, but im jealiuos. I wish I could have that many applauds.
anyways, This is an awesome write!
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spiritual and soul-cleansing
It is nice that at times, some poets can touch the 'souls benumbed by sins galore!'with spiritual, christian pieces that remind the uniqueness and mystery of the death of the only, begotten son of God, the Father, on the Holy Cross- just for the sake of the eternal, boundless love for mankind and to free him from Eternal Damnation.This is a powerful write that makes you share the terrible scenes of torture that Jesus underwent although He was a pure soul and in fulfilment of the Holy Scriptures and His Father's command.Hope, more such writes cleanse the world of Poetry which is in sheer chaos and in doldrums!With the aim of literary perfection, poets these days forget about the usefulness of Poetry in changing their lives for the better and healing wounded hearts and bruised minds.Good spiritual poetry also helps souls to tread the ROAD TO HEAVEN! -
just wanted to say sorry! I clicked on this one and it was in the featured so that means it costs you points! and I had already clicked and commented on it...but I still like it!
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That was a great poem... that's all I can say. I was blown away by this masterpiece. Good job, and keep up the good work! You should be a professional, and if you are then... well, yay.
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Klinkie, advice noted and taken. Thank you so much for pointing these errors out!
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UnforgivenAngel, no offense taken! Thank you so very much for your kind comments!
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STANDING OVATION
what cann i say that hasnt been said? God has obviously blessed this poem to minister to people...
it rhymed, flowed, connected, reminded.. and then the scripture was an amazing touch-
keep on being a light...
i will put you into my favorites!!!!
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wow, this poem is so good and so nice! the rhyming and beat is really good and the diciton you used made it really powerful. It really impacted me and got me thinking about Jesus and his meaning. I was thinking wow! this poem is really good I wonder if other people think so and then I see about 500 applause things and I thought...oh...wow heh heh so really good job! your writing is beautiful! -
mm, this is such a good piece. i love your rhyme, its flawless. good job, sweetie. two errors that i saw, though...cannot is one word, like i have it written. i swear, trust me on this one. also, in the stanza four up from the bottom, "His beards been..." there should be an apostrophe in beards. like so: beard's. other than that, terrific piece, hon. ::hugs::
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Wow. I'll admit I'm not much of one for religious poetry (or religious anything for that matter), especially Christian stuff, but I thought this was awesome. You are a very talented writer. So talented, in fact, that you had me envisioning this and feeling your emotions toward your Lord. Beautiful write. I hope I didn't offend anyone by admitting my stance on the topic, but I really do mean it with sincerity that it was an awesome poem!
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Excellent
A very deep and emotive write you have penned here. Religious poems or those with religious over-tones are generally not my cup of tea, but as I clicked I feel honour bound to comment.
The rhyming is excellent as is the flow. You layed out the content in an orderly manner and it was a joy to read this.
Thank you
Sammy
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Very Cool
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Wow . What can I say .Excellently penned .
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oh my gosh i cried when i read this....this was awesome... it was beautiful. wow..... silence has overtaken me. this was awesome...i'm not even that religious but i saw passions of the christ and i read the first few lines of this and i knew it was about jesus...i cant believe he had to endure that kind of pain. no one, even the son of god, should have had to endure that.wow...oh my goodness that was sooooooo good... great great fantastic write... KIU.....definitley about to read more of yours.....love ya, Ebi
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this is beautiful...i mean the words are brutal and graphic and terrible...but that anyone would do this for us...the utter agony, you have captured it so well...
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wow....simply perfection ..loved reading it and thanks for gracing us with your words of beauty and passion
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I think it's too religous for me.. Thanks for sharing though.
Write on, stay strong
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This was very good. I enjoyed it greatly - keep it up!
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Very relidgious, i felt what u were trying top get across to the "audience" lol
Stay in touch, comment my poems I swear and promise to comment some of yours 
Kepp up the great writing,
-H.trueblues
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Good spiritual retelling of the story, although I am not religious myself you draw a very clear picture of the crufiction and the personal emotional and religious connection with Christ.
The meter and rhyme was good, except the last few versus (when you go from the story to evangelizing), which seem a little forced. (forgiveness- goodness, the last line with hid).
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you are a marvelous writer. writing in iambs and writing such a great poem about christ. you have written something i have not been able to do. good job. keep on writing. love you, micheal. friendofsinners
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AWESOME!!!
WHOA. This truely ROCKS. And you are right, it truely is that simple... OH man, I love this, Molassis!!!! It literally sent shivers down my spine and tears down my check. I am a Christian, and I think we all forget sometimes how much pain He went through just so we could be free. The perfect one, died for us, the imperfect. Whoa. I really love this!! AWESOME AWESOME JOB!!!! -
This is very good...I'm not religious, but I liked the writing style.
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I'm not a Christian man, but even so I think this was a fairly good poem. Nice job.
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Hmmm... very interesting. It made me think not on the religious aspect or personage here.... but rather upon man's ability to be cruel, to inflict damage against anothers body - to treat another human being as if they were just another object... Humanity does this every day - and this continues constantly. The ultimate question is, what do we do? and when will it end? But perhaps most startling, as a species we must ask, why do we do this to ourselves???
Excellent piece of writing.
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Outstanding!!!!
Wow...this is a truly amazing poem. I do not feel anyone..and I mean anyone could have done a more amazing job of painting a picture so vividly of what Jesus has done for us and taking our sin from us by the way of the cross.
I am so moved and blessed to have found this poem..and to have found a friend in you. May God continue to bless you...with your wonderful writing talents.
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Excellent
Awesoem! Not only is it the best thing I have read in a long time for its sheer style and flow. The subject matter that is almost unprecedented on this site. Very Beautifull. Truley a work worthy of praise.
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it's interesting that you used imagery of a belt-beating, which i think more modern than Christ's time, but it took the reader to a place they couldn't help but relate, i really got the feeling of slavery and the abominable beatings that occured, you pick a surprising backdrop of dainty flowers for the page which i'm sure symbolize the love that Christ had for us when he died upon the cross. thanks for sharing.
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I am definately not an orthodox christian, though I hold their ideas in esteem- I think God is a good idea inside the heads of everyone else, even as a distraction from the wider scheme of things. The write itself was a powerful one, and the images created reminded us of what a man with good ideas can do for us. Well done, and even though you havent turned me into a born again christian, this was a good write.
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This poem had very good emotion and very excellent feelings displayed. What you are trying to say comes out very clearly. Not my favorite poem, but it was a good technique and design. You have done an excellent job.
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Oh my gosh, this is utterly amazing...I find it hard to even type anything on this darn keyboard because I'm speechless. I'm a Christian, too, so this touched me so deeply. I can see him in my mind's eye, hanging on the cross while the multitudes spit and laughed at him...And it pains me to think that people actually did that to the Savior of the world, who died for our sins. I'm glad to see that so many other people were touched by this beautiful poem. Thank you so much for sharing, I'll have to bookmark it! I applaud you!!
Elizabeth
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We meet again! It has been a while, no? Have I mentioned yet that I adore your work. You have such a passion for your religion that I am in awe. I do wish people would look upon others with love and not look for their religion. Again, an incredible piece. I may not be Christian, but I know that whenever your work is involved, that I'm bound to be enthralled by you and your tremendous talent. Well done...though that is quite the understatement.
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This is a wounderful poem! I love how when I first read it at the begining I was interested in seeing who it was about and as I got to the middle I figured it out! Keep up the good work!
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"For whosever shall call upon the name of the Lord shall be saved."
It's amazing that it is that simple. The love of the lord is soooo good. keep strong-
~tyler -
Wow, I see that I am not alone in that this is incredibly beautiful, painful and truthful. This is a wonderful write and you did a great job of not holding anything back. It is wonderful to see that so many other appreciate this as well. Nice job on this. You will get my applause the same as so many others before me. Great job!
~Lyrical
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splendid
A poem on the Crucifixion of Jesus Christ and the ways in which he was ill-treated by his captors! But actually reminding us that Christ's sufferings and blood-shed was for the redemption of all mankind from sure punishment of hell for their mortal sins.It is true that Christ died for all mankind's sins,past, present and future- so that all sinners have a chance of going to heaven despite their heavy sinful burdens!excellent write on the passion of Christ and His death on the Holy Cross! -
I got a little put off by the quotes from the bible at the end, which I noticed while skimming the first time through, and yet, even that wasn't enough to take away from the input of the poem. I'm not religious, frankly, I hate religion, and yet, I'll take a realistic spin on your words. We all have too look to someone. While you look to Jesus, I'll look to my cousin or my boyfriend to hide my wrongs. You say it so beautifully, it makes you realize it doesn't matter that we look to different places.
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I can't say I'm a christian, but I am a firm believer in (most of) their ideals. This poem strikes a universal chord with any who understand the story of Christ, however, and I believe that it holds an important example of both the good and evil potentials of humanity. I have written a similar themed poem called 'Shatterproof', and would really appreciate any comments you might have to make on it. Please keep writing
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I think its amazing that you can put Gods love into words like that. Its wonderful, I really enjoyed it.
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i'm not usually one for 'religious' types of poetry. While i am highly spiritual i feel that North American religion only touches on what we really need to appreciate about our '**god'. But i do have to say that this poem was extremely well written. i cringed at the abuse, and felt light hearted at the ability to love thru adversity.
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Nice. I am a Christian I suppose you could say, but from what I gather, you wouldn't see me as "conventional." But still this piece was very powerful, and I commend you for that. Good job.
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Beautiful
Wow, was that ever worth my time. I saw how long it was and thought "I don't have time for this" but it's truly been a sweet rose on the side of a bleek road. (I'm at school). God bless you my fellow brother. -
I am going to need to give this one another read. I was interrupted by my children! But I will be back to take another look.
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Molassis-
Wow.. This piece was very touching.. Powerful.. It gave me chills. Great job, thank you for sharing this with us.
Write on, stay strong.
Kami -
This was a perfected peice, not one thing was wrong with it, all rhymes, depiction, this is down the the very last word a truely romantic version of the passion, im in love with your writing skill, please keep writing.
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omg GREAT poem!
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This is really powerful and expressive - not sure im a big fan - its long and some of the wording doesn't flow so well - but in general, it's an intense poem, your message is solid - so good work , even if i don't like it
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This is beautiful, Melissa, right down to the detail of what our Lord suffered on our behalf. And, He suffered greatly for our "past sins," fully expecting us to "go and sin no more." That is, IF we choose to follow in His footsteps.
I pray this wonderful poem reaches out to touch even just one; for in bringing just "one to the Lord, and you will be called great in heaven!" So many believe that the fruits are the vast numbers one person or entity might bring to the Lord; yet, scripture is so clear that the fruits are that of our righteous behaviour, not the number of people we might convert.
Well done, dear one! Very well done!
Love and hugs, BonnieQ
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Great write! This truly is a very powerful poem. What more can I say besides praise the Lord! Thanks for writing this and have a great day! Love and Peace!
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so amazing you put what Christ did for us into words so wonderfully i can't say much else besides how amazingly wonderful that was. keep on writting about God's love and God Bless You!
A. Psyco
p.s. i loved that you added this " Romans 3:23; 6:23 and 10:13 For all have sinned and come short of the glory of God. For the wages of sin is death; but the gift of God is eternal life though Jesus Christ our Lord. For whosever shall call upon the name of the Lord shall be saved.
It's honestly that simple!"
that's so awesome
God Bless
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ok i hav no idea wot to say that hasnt already been sed! i love this piece - its absolutely gorgeous!!
amazing!
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inspiration at its best. You write beautifully and with much passion for your beliefs. Something no one can take from you. Nicely done.
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Stunning piece, well written... inspirational... I'm really lost for words here.
You're obviously a talented writer - be sure to keep using that talent.
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i thourly ejoyed the verse at the end, i havent actually sat down and read the bible in years.
i am not a religouw person but i will queston no ones faith.
and i wish you much luck with yours and your wriitng.
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im very religious but this defintly shows a vivid image of what christ had to go threw for us and i feel that you've done it in the less confrontional way! keep it up love ya ~chelle~
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I'm not a real religious person...but you've sdone an excellent job of portraying Christ's sacrifice and love for us, and you've done it in a unique and non confrontational way. You've got talent, keep it up.
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Wow! You painted a very vivid picture. I can understand so well how you affected so many and gained so much applause. This is very well written and I must admit this has been one of the best writes I've read during my short time here at AP. Nice write, Thanks for sharing and god bless.
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wow this was good. It held my attention and wow...that IS a whole lot of applauds there
. I liked the flow and the imagery you used, it was brilliant. You have done a great job with this piece.
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yes...well written...i watched the movie passion of the christ..and its sad, but thats when i really opened my eyes to it..im not a christian by no means...nor religious in any way...still..i can see what He's did and has done...my biggest fault is being human....like so many others...i dont know..well done though..enjoyed the read
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What can I say..well written doesn't seem enough...the poem kinda says it all.
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Touching
That is amazing. How do I put this? I got chills and this really just hit me and made me realize how important Chris was! You write beautifully, this deserves everyone's applause! GREAT!
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good poetry, excellent flow to your poem. i do not think it is as simple as that, but hey what do i know lol hope all is well with you
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OMGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!! this is by far the best write that i have ever read...(no offence to others) but the immagery....everything...OMGOSH!!!!!! if its ok with you...can i copy and paste this poem on to my main page so that EVERYONE CAN READ IT!!! i will put that its by you....but would you mind?...i honestly love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ALways
~NiCki
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so well written, a wonderful way to tell the message of salvation.
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Wow...this is awesome work...You did an amazing job in the details and the image portrays itself clearly...I'm loving it. As a christian I greatly appreciate this piece.
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I must say this is real some piece of work here well met chim you seem to have your self quite a crowd as well well done I say well done
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Mankind is one word is it not? Otherwise it is good. Gory.
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Reminded much of "The Passion of the Christ" only you did it with vivid words that not only captured the truth of the scripture but also made it very personal. Saying "this was for me" is the same thought that played in my head as I watched "The Passion."
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brilliant
wow, thats a lot of applaud buddies..haha.
this is such a deep and beautiful poem. it has so much depth within each line. its so powerful, and, im just speechless. i have no clue what to say other than overflowing compliments and positive comments..wow, this is excellent!
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a simple cross where many errant roads come together and find one direction that leads to the promised and the eternal forevermore. Even the nails screamed when they were pulled out and away from his precious flesh, and the bloodsoaked wood was
a healing balm to all who help disssemble it, and they never forgot the magic of it's touch and warmth long after he was ressurected and ascended to his father....Artis
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I hate to admitt it but as good as this is to me as a "story".. im just not a god kinda girl... its definately getting in my way as far as relating to this piece of writing and i hate that about myself..
As Far as the actual "write"goes... great job!! its only for me on a "personal" level that i cant connect with it. But i guess that sort of thing happens all the time when you read something, i suppose the fact i have commented on this rather than just deviate to another poem says more about the poem than i can actually put into words
**learns something about herself**
Good Stuff!!
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Tragic and true
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Nice poem! I love it! I especailly like how you put the verse at the end of the poem. Thsi poem was written well and it flowed nicely, the message is awsome and is so rearly seen. Keep up the good work! This was really good to read and I enjoyed doing so. I know its not really polite, but could you read my poem The hope of the world? I think from reading yours that you would liek it, other wise I wouldn't sugjest it. This was again really good. Keep upt eh good work, god bless you and keep you.
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awesome sad beautiful write.
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Absolutely beautifully said...we sure pale to HIM, but you did a wonderful job of expressing your love for Jesus....mb -
amazing
as a none christian who finds it difficult to read the bible and get meaning out of the passages, this poem is amazing to read you got so much imagery from a few lines out of the bible and put it into something that genuinly interests a none christian.i mean, thats just amazing. your poems or so moving every read makes me want to pick up a bible and find out what inspired you. powerful and precious. a gr8 write hugs ~tazmin~ -
very powerful poem and it sends the message no matter what. Even if someone wasn't a believer, they would be after reading this! Great job! Beautifully worded and the imagery is mind blowing.
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this is a wonderful write!very well written!i enjoyed readin it...its soo emotional!it has ispired me a lot!u did a good work here!thanks for sharing!
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Wonderful
hey sweetie,
Very well written.. It just flowed.. It was lovely.. great job sweetie.. keep up the great writing..
With love
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GREAT!
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I was in shock when I read this. Great work!!! I could feel sooo much power coming from this write. You wrote it very well. It is inspiring and just fantastic~*smile*! -
This is a superb write, and fantastic reading.
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Good write you are effective with your words and opininative with the way you feel, and that's something i really respect, you are just very talented with writing it's something you shouldn't give up....this is well done....lemon.
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Inspirational
Hi Melissa,
This was wonderfully written my friend. Each word an inspiration each phrase a truth each stanza masterpiece. This has inspired and uolifted me more than you know. Thank you for sharing this my friend.
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excellently written ~ despite my lackof religion I still enjoyed this for what it is ~ a highly competent and image filled poem expressing depth of feeling
elaine
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God rocks, you rock, and your poetry rocks!
Hey :-) I know I've already commented on this poem, but it's so awesome, I wanted to read it again. it really is wonderful. Whenever I read it I just think about what my Savior has done for me, and it's just so incredible. Thanks so much for sharing this!
Take care, and God bless!
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Wow. This poem was very well-written, with a beautiful flow. The message was well brought upon by your words. I, myself, am not very religious. In fact, I am an atheist in some sense, but this poem was still rather good. I can tell that you have an extreme amount of faith held within your heart, and I find that to be amazing. Even though I may not have much faith in 'God' and 'Jesus', I applaud those who do. I find it rather inspiring to see someone have such faith in something, whether I find it to be real or not. This was a very good poem. You have extreme talent. Keep that pen to paper. You'll go far. -
This is a wonderful write. I really enjoyed reading it and to be honest I almost started cryig while I was reading it. This is so sad. It was very well written. Thank you for posting it. You did a wonderful job writting it, keep up the great work. KP
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really great write i enjoyed reading it thanks for posting it!
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im not much of a religious person
but your poetic skills and passion for what happened are really amazing. it was lovely...
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Touching
Wow, this poem brought back such vivid images from "the Passion of the Christ"! You described it in a way that is very real and avoided the clíche-ness that so many writers fall into. Great job, I loved it and was touched. Beautiful thought to add the gospel message in there too--it really is that simple, isn't it? God bless!
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Molassis~
Hey! I thought that this is a really good poem. It was nicely written and it had a good flow to it as well. I think it's sad as well. Keep writing and thank you for sharing it with all of us here.
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very good
wonderfull write i cant say anything more then what you written !other them amazing simply amazing !
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THAT IS SO SAD BUT I REALLY LIKE IT ALL THE SAME!! IT WAS VERY INSPIRING AND INEEDED THAT !!WONDERFUL JOB IREALLY LIKED IT !!!
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Wow this is really sad, its always good to read something inspiring.
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I thought this was a really sad piece..if I were more religious, chances are I would have cried..but I've read about this so many times it doesn't really affect me anymore. Towards the beginning the rhyme seemed forced, but then I reread it and it all fit together nicely with a good flow. Great job with this, I would applaud it but I don't have any left for today
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