Into the future He looked with deep stare,
Right now in my mind, I can see Him there.
His thoughts to the future sins of mankind
As blood ran to His eyes He became blind.
For He was beat with a shard bearing strap
As He overcame and conquered sin's trap.
They beat on His back, His sides and His chest,
His legs and His arms: Yes, this was love's quest.
His body so beaten, down to the bone
But still on His face, love openly shown.
Blows of that whip made His body shudder
Yet never a word did this man utter.
Thoughts of humanity; our sins to come
Though He has been tortured, I sit here numb.
For I see Him hanging there on His Cross,
Mangled and bloody, He's weak from blood loss.
His shoulders, out of joint, cannot support
His body's weight but still the guards retort;
Hold yourself up straight, You filthy, low king!
For You are royalty, You nasty thing!
His head is turned back, I sit here and see
His beard's been pulled out, His eyes fixed on me.
The love on His face is clearly now seen
I can't help but hear the crowd's loud scream.
They shout and they spit on Him hanging there
But all the while His life He'll not spare
For each of them, and for others to come
He'll cover their sins. I still sit here numb.
It's then that I realize, this was for me
And for each one that will openly see
That His blood was shed for our forgiveness
We've only to believe in His goodness.
With one thing to do, I call on His name
I realize that it's so simple and plain.
I've only to believe in what He gave,
It's then that from my sins I will be saved.
Melissa Sanders 06-07-04
Author notes
Jesus... the sweetest name on earth and in heaven... oh what horrible things He went through so that we might know God!
Written June 7th, 2004
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Lovely
This poem gave me goosebumps as well! Do not let other people bring you down for what they say. This is such a powerful poem and written emotion of the way you feel of what Jesus di for us.This is so very well written and I am amazed at how much talent you have. I like this poem a lot, becuase many people have many different beliefs in religion, and what not, and each person should be able to express it, whenever they want, and however they want. Great job, well written, and again, do not fret on what other people say, this is a good poem! -
why do you trash this poem one day and then praise it the next day? I don't understand... anyway, have a lovely evening or day which ever it is for you. ~Melissa♥
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good job! I really like it! I this is a really good use of imagery. whoah... Even though I'm Jewish, it is still a very great poem. Keep up the good work!
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Wow, this poem is truly wonderul. You have a great use of imagery - it gave me goosebumps. Great Job.
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i really enjoyed this. god bless
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I realy like this poem very well written great job
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I admit that I am not the most dutiful Christian, frequently forgetting feastdays of various saints, the beginning and end of Lent, and such. However, I am constantly awed at the love and power it must have taken Jesus to actually die for all of us.
Even if I was not a Christian, I would have to say that your poem is powerfully written and expresses His pain and love most elegantly. I tip my hat to you, this is an excellent poem. -
excellent and beyond
I am fresh out of points for applauses but one to giveam not a Christian, but I must commend your VERY powerful write on a subject so close to your heart. This was masterfully written ans with so much emotion. I can't think of enough words to see except..God Bless and Namaste! Linda -
whoa!!! this is absolutely amazing. the portrayal of the importance of Jesus and God came across extremely strongly and the imagery was beautiful. It is a good job that peoples comments don't bother you, because the things that he put are quite offensive. well done, keep writing
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Awesome powerful amazing images
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I really enjoyed this poem...dont worry about what other people say, if this is how you felt about what Jesus did then you expressed it well. I hope to see more poems from you. Stay strong, write strong, love strong.
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Thank you SO much for your encouragement. I don't allow people's comments to upset me because I expect some will not like my poetry or my message.... so it's really ok. Thank you for the award!!! I feel absolutely honored!!!!! God bless you! ~Melissa♥
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Ghengis, I appreciate your comments on my poem Bruised. Thank you for taking the time to read it. I don't expect every one to agree with what I say and I don't expect every one to like it, so it's ok that you don't. I still appreciate that you took the time to be honest and to comment. Thanks! ~Melissa♥
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Wow. I'm speechless.
Reading this reminded me of the movie, The Passion of the Christ. I don't like how people have commented negatively on this, because I definitely think that it deserves much better than that. I personally think that it flowed nicely and that the length was fine, despite what others have said. Beautiful write all around. Great message also. God Bless.
Caitlin ♥
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Oh, wow.
May God Bless you for this beautiful contribution to him. It always seems that the poems about Jesus's Love are the best, because they mean so much. I cannot beleive it, how well God inspires all the poet.
Terrific job, truly. I love it very much.
And congratulations, you have one the Fifth Ninque-Aiwe Award for Outstanding Poetry.
~Moi~
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Very well done keep it up and god bless!
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very well written
I have to say "bobthebuilder," what you said was pretty severe. Saying that you hate the poem isn't very nice, even if you don't particularly like it. And really...do you have so little a life that you have to comment on this poem 3 times? Once every hour? Really now.
As for the poem, it's not half bad. It's gorily portrayed, but it serves a good point. In my opinion, the story of Jesus is somewhat a cliche. Not to offend you, so please don't take it that way. People use it all the time to...ummm...how to say this...make people feel guilty. Again, all this is just my opinion.
Any way, your poem is very well written and you should definately keep writing about stuff in which you have passion, like this. And please don't let comments like "bobthebuilder's" stop your passion. -
awesome poem
i cannot believe this has any applauses at all. this is utterly garbage. i hate it. but only because it's yours. -
this sux yor ass! and u suk! itz way too long!
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itz waaaaaaaaaaay too long!
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Awful
Well done, you clearly got the godbotherer vote, in spite of the fact that your poem is superficial and trite.
Now first I am not a christian but this isn't why I don't like this poem.
The form of execution described was used by the Romans quite widely. Partly it was barbaric and partly in those times it provided great spectacle to those who wished to demean and humiliate those they hated.
Now in your poem you give a great listing of the actions but it is all rather superficial. There is no feeling. You've equated weight of words with worthiness.
This poem isn't worthy and how it came to the top of anyones poll is amazing to me.
Let us repeat a stanza.
His shoulders, out of joint, cannot support
His body's weight but still the guards retort;
Just reread that a few times. It's written as though the person concerned (whether he is Jesus or Spartacus) is a cardboard cut-out. I hope never to see anyone crucified but if I do, I kow that this shallow attempt doesn't describe the pain in a sewing accident let alone such gory torture.
Hold yourself up straight, You filthy, low king!
For You are royalty, You nasty thing!
The second half of the stanza rings just as wooden. Do you really believe that this is the kind of epithet or taunt that the guards would use.
You did neither poetry nor christianity a service here.
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Looking at the applauses that got it's easy to see why Bush was re-elected. That's beside the point however, that poem was very good, while there could be a few tiny edits that would make it flow a little better, I think you did a really good job here. I'm not religious, but i'm not an atheist either, good job, comment on my most recent song lyrics Through The Glass, and tell me what you think
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This is, like, the best poem I have EVER read! I L-O-V-E it! You are not afraid to show your faith in the Lord, unlike some people that I know. It made me so emotional I cried, seriously. I hope that this poem can take you somewhere someday. I really do.
NEVER LOSE FAITH!
Ravyn
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I think If indeed Jesus was the son of God (which is still not an established fact), he would be ashamed now that people so readily go to church and go on big religious right campaigns against Marilyn Manson for some reason and yet neglect the issues of world poverty and the amount of deaths that spawn from this. For example did you know that the catholic church statistically has the power to rid the world of poverty three times over. Do you see them doing anything about it? Well I know this poem is about Jesus, but I don't think people should so readily follow churches as they very often twist the word of christ and rather stupidly take the bible as established fact. Anyway there's my opinion on the church and religion, I guess what Jesus said was ok, but then why can't morals span from more than such things as Jesus's teachings. It seems to be Christian in this world is to be good, yet other religions or atheists are treated as not having the same moral code.
Anyway who can really say Jesus was the son of God and that he sacrificed his soul for everyone? It can never be proven, well atleast until we die, and that doesn't much help the rest of us corporeal entities. Not bad poem though, however much I disagree with it. -
All I can say is awesome....
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I love this poem... It's awesome... I'm not really that religious and never thought a more religious poem could move so much.This was written fabously
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Hmmm can we say seek therapy goaltender? ANYWAYS,this was a GREAT poem and just what I needed around the Easter holiday.Ole boy must be off his meds and the only one who can help him is psych,so just ignore him it was a fantastic poem and very well written.I enjoyed it very much! Well done and keep it up!!! -
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Heather, bless your heart. The pain must be unbearale for you. I konw how I will feel when I loose my mom, I can only imagine the hurt I will feel, but then just to imagine it I am sure doesn't compare. Your mom left her torch burning for you! Find that torch and hold it high for others to see! She left you light in your darkness to comfort you, I so hope that you find it. Bathe in the light she left dear. Your comment touched me more than I can voice and I am so very sorry for your loss. God bless you! ~Melissa♥
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omg this is absolutly great it must have taken forever but however long it took it was amazing i mean i feel that my mom will see him soon if she hasnt already-see my mom, best freind, just passed away the ninth of march and it crushed me beyond belief and i know that shes in a better place now and if it wasnt for jesus going throuhg all the suffering she would not be able to live on...i love this keep up the great work...lotz of love ~heather
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great poem, glad to see something dedicated to Jesus, esspecially something so well thought out!
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GREAT!!!
This poem made me cry when I read it. This was one of the best poems I have ever read, not only because of the great rhyme, and the way you put it into words, but because it came from your heart. Keep up the great writing. This definetely deserved an applause!! -
wonderful touching
this was one of the poems that brought tears to my eyes... you have a wonderful talent and i think you did a wonderful job on this.. it makes me wanna read more of your poems!! thank you for putting faith back into my life!! -
When you get a comment like goaltender's, it just shows you're on the right track, sis. Personally, I'm honored to know you, having to get a small bit of persecution, along with the prophets of old. Good thing you're not gonna get burned, at least as of yet.
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Thank you very much for your comment Goaltender. We each have a right to believe as we wish... and I respect your rights to free speech. Again, thank you for your comment. ~Melissa♥
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...totally disagree with that goaltender guy.
Holy freaking crap this poem has a lot of applauds...goaltender, that was shitty of you, this was a great poem, just because ur a butthead and cant understand it doesnt mean you have to down it like that...any how, I liked the poem, and best of luck with future writes. MuchLoveAlways, s1l3ntscr34ms -
Extreamly Awsome
I really injoyed reading your poem. It sounds extreamly awsome!!Keep up the good work!!
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you fagg, you probably are some crazy evangalist that posted this to spread the faith after you saw that horrible excuse for a movie called the passion. Why dont you spread your religion somewhere else you asshole, being an evanglist and making "deciples of all nations" is really just being an asshole, because you are telling someone that everything and anything they have learned is wrong and they have to do it your way or else they're going to hell, fuck you..... -
Yes, that's what happened to Jesus and you put it in a way that I could see what was happening when I was reading along. Great work.
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this is beautiful, you can feel your dedication and faith pouring out of every word...I wish more of humanity could feel the love and pain in this poem, as if i was sitting there in person, nice work..God Bless
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I'm in awe.So many poems of the cross I've come to read tonight and each one was so cliche'.(not a put down on anyone) Wow,your poem was unique and heartfelt with every line that was written.You deserve every applause given on this one!! Thank you for remembering Jesus and His sacrifice. That's amazing.I love that you so creatively wrote such an amazing poem of the cross. You're so talented!! Keep it up definately,this was great.
I'm absolutely stunned by this piece.You've done a wonderful job!
Love always
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This is above and beyond!! This is so very inspirational and insightful. I love how you have worked salvation into this! I could just go on and on about what I like about this, but I will just give you my applause and admiration! God Bless You and may your poem open a lot of eyes. Hugs, Penny
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cool poem i like the description it has such a flow and it has great emotion it is really good
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I applaud you a thousand times over for writing such a masterful piece as this as a tribute to our Lord Jesus Christ! great job... !!!!
S~
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Oh, i found this so beautiful and so inspirational. A very good poem on a subject that wouldn't be easy to write about.
A lovely work, very very nice.
Enjoyed this,
~ Wendy
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Thank you so much for posting this poem. it was a rare treat as religious poems are. It made me stop and reflect on myself and my life and look at my faults and it made me stop for a few minutes and pray. Thank you for posting such a beautiful poem I absolutely loved it. You've done an excellent job- Thanks and keep it up. I applaud your work!
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WOW! I LOVE this poem! There is no other poem i have read that expresses Jesus' love for us quite like this! Beautifully done! -
Moving
Although I'm not Christian or Catholic, and I hope you don't mind- I shared this with a friend who is so I could help get input upon it. And he adored it.
It was moving as Solaris said, upon other things. Your emotion was deeply felt (although at one point you could have used quotes for what they said to Jesus...but that's no true matter).
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very good!!!!
this is a very good poem and it makes me think.
i mean, im not all that religious but i do believe in God and Jesus and i really dont like what they did to Jesus, and this poem helped me see another side to the story! thank you and this was a very very great write!
take care!!
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Righto...well I left the Christian faith a long time ago and while I don't see myself returning, this was unbelievably moving...it really touched the empath in me, and I have no criticism for this whatsoever. Your emotion was so strong in this poem that I felt as if I was staring at this man myself...and while I don't necessarily follow the religion, this is still something that stirred me as I thought about any human at any time going through something like this...and now I'm being repetitive so I'll just applaud wildly and shut up.
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very good job. your descriptions are great.
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Wow. This poem was awesome! God is an awesome God! This poem almost brought tears to my eyes. I want to cry everytime I hear how Jesus gave his life for us. My mind can't even comprehend how someone could die for us, and spill His blood so we can have everlasting life in Heaven. Wow. I loved this poem very much. Keep up the awesome writing!
God bless you,
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Wow you are a fantastic writer. Praise Jesus that you have given Him the glory in this wonderful poem. Bless you sister. I am so impressed with this wonderful poem the way you described everything so clearly. It was only by chance that I clicked on this and I am so pleased that I did. This is truly a powerful poem filled with imagery. It is clear to see how much you love Jesus. God Bless you sister.
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I am not usually one for religious poems, but I think this one really showed the emotions well. The pain and anguish were deeply felt and I think it really speaks to your devotion. Nice job with the details.
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I'm not Christian at all, but that was a very moving poem. Congratulations on the good work, it was very inspiring as well.
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This is one of the best poems i've ever read!U GO GIRL!
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beautiful although im not very religious
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Awesome Melissa! It's so true, and was written so long ago, wow. I'm glad I read this, good words of encouragement. I read your "be a good father" poem too, I loved the message and I hope I get the chance someday. --Steve
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Nope not moved by that movie... well.. as far as this poem goes... I love Him, He's my Savior AND my Lord!
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I really enjoied this!!! I wish that I could touch lilves like you have touched mine. Although I love God, you have just pulled me out of the dark and showed me the ligt by reminging me of how He suffered fpr all of us so horribly. I( really *loved* how you had the verses to back it up. Nicly written, and *you* are a blessing to us all!
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And here I was thinking you were just one of those who was moved by THE PASSION OF CHRIST. The scriptures at the bottom made the read more credible to me (my idiosyncrasy - smile) I enjoyed it in that it inspired me to address a subject I've long neglected. Thank you. -
Yup, I am familiar with that passage. It's a good one. Jesus is indeed THE Christ I belive and I am NOT ashamed of Him!!! Thanks so much for your comment!! God bless you! ~Melissa
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are you familiar with Mark 8:22-38? He bled and died to give us everlasting life. You captured that pure act of love in such deep imagery and word usage. wonderful. I was blown away upon reading it..especially the third stanza. wonderful wonderful write and God Bless!
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WOW I don't think there are words to begain to describe how well you wrote this It's amazing great job....It blew me away I love you poem..
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Musical Anomaly, first of all I LOVE your name!!!
Secondly, thank you very much for taking the time to comment on this! It's honestly appreciated. You gave some pretty good advice... I accept it graciously!
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Striking! Absolutely striking, is this write, sis!
What is funny is that I read this after I posted mine, called "Messiah". It's based on the same verses from Isaiah that you refer to in your comments. Must be the season, eh?
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Hmm... The rhythm in this seemed fairly forced in places, or it felt as though you had made words fit into the rhythm by compromising the meaning or sense of the words, eg "Into the future He looked with deep stare". In the line "Mangled and bloody, He's weak from blood loss", the word "loss" didn't seem to fit- in the phrase blood loss, I would put the stress on the blood syllable. Also, people have commented on the imagery but I actually thought there was a considerable lack of imagery. I think this would feel easier to picture if there was a bit more figurative language in there. I would also suggest you experiment with different words- "I realize that it's so simple and plain."- those words are fairly commonplace. Experiment a bit! Sorry if this comment has seemed patronising, I'm no expert- just my thoughts! Keep writing
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Wow, this is great! Im kinda stunned, i really dont know what to say cuz it wont explain how wounderfully this is written. GREAT JOB! I hope to read more of your writting! 5 STARS ALL THE WAY***** -Piney
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you did such a great job showing what Jesus had to go through and all the while you did it with a great flow and with great emotion. I really like the ending, i just liked the whole thing!!! keep it up and once again great write!!!
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wow, this was a very well-written poem. i enjoyed reading this alot. it was awesome to read something so well done about the Lord, that it made me think alot. this was a very powerful poem, so awesome, and so true as well. dude, i loved it! nice, job and keep up the great work always!
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AWESOME!EXCELLENT!!FABULOUS!!! I feel the emotion and pain in every word.Very powerful and full of love and hope because of His love and hope for us.You painted a wonderful picture with words in this touching poem. God Bless,Patty
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This gave me goose bumps. You portrayed it all so beautifully. A wonderful tribute to our awesome Lord. I think this is a great witness to many readers out here too. Thanks for posting and sharing.
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AWESOME!
WOW! This is SO AWESOME, powerful, and true!!!!! I'm speechless. Just to think He did it all for u and me, is painful yet magnificent! Nobody deserves this kind of LOVE but it's freely given to ALL mankind!! All I can say is WOW!!!! U have a GREAT talent. Thank u SO MUCH for sharing!! This really touched my heart. Keep writing!!
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this was awesome....
Yvonne
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i'm not a relgious person(not going to say anything on that aspect then)so...looking beyond that part...it was wonderfully written, and your imagry is great. keep up the great writing!
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this poem is awesome. i just went to living stations of the cross last night so it speaks to me even more. i never realized how much jesus went through one the cross for us up until recently. it is kind of scary seeing as he did all that for someone he did not even know but ya. Great poem. i will try and read some of your others. GB and GGHL. ~~~Bec~~~
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Excellent
With all of the applause need I put in my two cents. Well here, you may have them. -
His shoulders, out of joint, cannot support
His body's weight but still the guards retort;
Hold yourself up straight, You filthy, low king!
For You are royalty, You nasty thing!
Wow! that was written beautifully. It was an excellent write. Thanks for sharing. Good job poet! Your write had great flow. Keep it up.
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Wonderful job. Good work on the ryhming also. This write had tons of emotion flowing through it, and boy did I feel it! Nice job! -Jessica
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Wow! besides being a beautifully written poem, i love the sense of passion that you get across. I was also really impressed that u were able to portray the amount of sacrafice while at the same time never losing the undertone of Jesus' amazing love for us
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i've read this before. but i enjoyed it, this time round too. nicely penned. a great flow to it. nice message to it as well. enjoyed the read.
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Wow Melissa!! All I can say is that you've captured it very well here!! Your imagery and your word usage just struck a vein deep in my heart. It is so sad to think about what we did to Him when He was beaten for us. I thank you for not only writing this, but for also promoting this. I love the fact that no one disrespects you that much.. For this was truly a magnificent write!! God Bless you my friend!!
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Very unique topic for this write, i liked it. I also liked how you described every event happening with such power... absolutely great write- thanx for sharing
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Very nicely done, tipically poems with religious content make me scoff and turn away, but i was compelled to finish this one. bravo
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whoa lol I don't think I have seen so many applauses on a poem for a long time but this one really deserves it so I guess I should add another one...huh? Incredible depth to this piece and the words that you use to decribe everything are just powerful. "His body so beaten, down to the bone
But still on His face, love openly shown.
Blows of that belt made His body shudder
Yet never a word did Jesus utter." I LOVE THIS. WOW...and the verses add just sooooo much! Keep up th egood work and write your heart out -
I felt the rhyme was very repetitive in the beginning of this piece, but there's much about it that is very nicely done. I find it appalling that so many people who profess to believe in what Jesus Christ taught still preach hatred, intolerance, and violence. When will we hear a message that was clearly and powerfully given into our keeping nearly 2,000 years ago? One must hope we will figure it out one day.
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I think you did a nice job. Our beliefs are different, but your poem was lovely nonetheless. It is full of power.
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My goodness! This absolutely captured me throughout the entire write. It was phenominal. I love the emotion and the strength of the words. Absolutely phenominal.
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am not a very religious person but this poem is writen very will and is full of emotion!!!
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omg. this is amazzing. it made me cry so much. Love this poem.
;D ; congrats on all those applauses =0 ! Well; keep writing . p.s this is my faverite poem on all poetry. (shh!).
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I'd love to appluad but I fear it'll be lost. My favorite scripture is Isaiah 53: 3-6. You wrote one so I won't take the time to write it all out but I love your depiction of it. People now love Him but that was not always so. He once was and still is despised and rejected of men. *shrugs* Each to his own until the end when judgement day shall reign. Thanks for sharing this piece. The flow and imagrey is amazing. Greate write doesn't do this piece justice.
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wow great work!
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A very powerful piece you've penned here and by the looks of it, it has been well received This is wonderful and congrats on all those applauses
~Lyrical
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A wonderful piece of work, deeply inspiring and emotional. We all believe that he gave himself to help us in this here world.
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