Crying on the inside
Tears run through my veins
I'm a different person
I'll never be the same
I'll try to heal my scars
And not open up new wounds
I want to try to laugh
But it's simply just too soon
He hurts me, I hurt me
It's just a stupid game
The abuse he put me through
I curse his foul name
Now every time I cry
Blood streams down my face
But when they see me daily
All doubt I must erase
My smiles are none but fake as my heart still aches
And bleeds tear after tear
I must be strong, I must not break
I cannot show my fear
I have found through all this pain
That there's truth in these words:
Strength is truly no more
Than how well you hide the hurt
Author notes
I'm actually quite surprised that everybody liked this so much, but I'm thankful for it too. There's one kind of like this, http://allpoetry.com/poem/4307469 and again, it's about not wanting to release tears, or show weakness, and yeah. Thank you guy for all the comments, keep them coming please!
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That's very good. Full of strength but beware of holding your feelings in cause when the bottle is full it'll overflow into places you don't want it to. True strength isn't hiding your feelings, it's excepting them and making changes for the better life. You desearve love and your worth more.
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There is vulnerability and strangth all rolled into one in this piece.
The ending, the last four lines, they touched me so deeply.
Nice job
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This is awesome your feelings and emotions show very well in this poem! I loved it!
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This is great...the time you took and the emotions you are feeling shows. It is a great write. I especially enjoyed the ending. Strength can seem like a very complicated quality, but you have summed it up and simplified it beautifully at the end of this.
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Wow... that was amazing. So touchign and heartfelt!
"I must be strong
I must not break
I cannot show my fear
I have found through all this pain
That there's truth in these words:
Strength is truly no more
Than how well you hide the hurt "
Ok, lots to highlight, but just really sumed it up and it was great! -
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How didn't you do? haha
this poem is amazing, but sadly true. There's only one, and ONLY one thing i'd change: My smiles are NONE BUT fake
As my heart still aches
other than that, i LOVED the flow and choice of words. FANTASTIC WORK!!!
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Wow....You did great...lolz...I love this write..very good!!
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oh...well done. Smiling on the outside, crying on the inside...ya...I've been there too. ***Pam***
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i like it... its very well-written!!
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A touching poem and a testament to a girl/woman's strength. I sometimes wonder about the sentiment expressed in the last line. Don't get me wrong, that's I exactly what I did (spousal abuse), sometimes I wonder what would have happened if I had shouted it from the rooftops and exposed him for the heel he really was? Don't know, but we do what we feel is best at the time.
Whew! Very well written and as you can tell, has really made me think. Thank you for that
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This is really good. I only have one suggestion though. I would change line 6 to
"and not open up new wounds"
It flows a little better in my opinion.
But clappies for you!
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I have so felt like this its describes this feeling in so much detail its just so ovbious that..........................................................................................................You can read minds!!!!!!!!!! WoW
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That is exactly it.
I read everybody's ind and put them together in one semi-fantastic piece of work.
Yay mind readers!
Haha, just kidding, but really, thank you for taking to the time to read and comment!
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amazing!i love this it really does show so much emotion and everything!!great job!im glad u got ur inspirationn back
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That is exactly what I was aiming for!
Yay emotion!
I'm glad I got it back too, my brain was getting lonely!
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I can relate to this so much it's scarey. Only the him would be changed to a her. I think you did a great job of capturing the emotions and feelings of what being abused is like well.
Thanks for sharing and great job.
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Thank you soooo much! Well, I was abused as an infant, but I don't actually remember it clearly. But the fact that it happened was enough to inspire me. Thank you again!
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Your very much welcome. I'm sorry about your abuse. I was abused when I was six.
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