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My Tiger

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My Tiger

When deepest thoughts are turned within,
There lives a Tiger I obey.
I find my other self… my twin.

Protecting me from mortal sin
She blossoms like a fresh bouquet.
When deepest thoughts are turned within.

She waits in silence with a grin
And enemies are easy prey.
I find my other self… my twin.

A part of me that waits therein;
My Tiger keeps my foes at bay.
When deepest thoughts are turned within.

My Tiger waits beneath my skin
And she has never run astray.
I find my other self… my twin.

My other self, my discipline;
Harm me and she’ll make you pay.
When deepest thoughts are turned within,
I find my other self… my twin.

 

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Art by: Jim Warren

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  • PerVirtuous
    February 16, 2007

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    Tandem Hunting..

    Twins, one tame one wild, can you imagine that!
    But whether kitty or tiger, either 'tis a cat.
    Roses in my left hand, cat o' nines in my right,
    music has us dancing, stalking, pouncing, in the night.
    Leg and breast alluring, claw and teeth raise fear
    open hand caresses, whip snaps at your ear.
    One who seeks this tandem, must repeat this oath:
    "I will lose my life or, I will capture both!"

    Three psychotic bunnies who think they are half badger.


  • Whoochi gold member
    February 16, 2007

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    Intersting form and rhythm..was captivating, exhilirating with the emphasis and use of the repetition this leads to an exciting read...Cannot imagine doing anything quite so well with this type of poetry but ...enjoying learning all the new things..Good Luck,


    • Amera gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      Thank you, yea this style drives you nuts to write.


  • February 16, 2007

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    I succumb to you... my tiger...

    Such a deep write, sharing who you are within to the world, so beautiful... Oh, Princess... I look into your alluring eyes, you crouch down ready to pounce on your prey. You jump and playfully bat me around… I succumb to you and your advances; I give myself to you and your desires! Within your arms I can hear you purring… Your warmth intoxicates me… I give into you -- the feline ideal. I want to play with the tiger that is you. You move me... BRAVO! I love the villanelle to do it justice...


    • Amera gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      Wow! What a comment. That alluring huh?


      • February 16, 2007
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        Yes, princess... I want to play with you


  • burdened
    February 16, 2007

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    Wow, this is a great piece, with a great form, i havent heard of this one, and thanks for explaining it, it helps a great deal, but can you just clarify, is the last stanzas rhyming abaa, or aaba, becasue you have put it in the comments as abaa, but your poem has it aaba. thanks. i like the repetition, it really gets the point across, and aslo the imagery portrayed in this piece, it paints agreat picture. thanks for entering, and good luck. XxX


    • Amera gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      You're right! I told you it was tough, I'll fix it

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