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My Tiger

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My Tiger

When deepest thoughts are turned within,
There lives a Tiger I obey.
I find my other self… my twin.

Protecting me from mortal sin
She blossoms like a fresh bouquet.
When deepest thoughts are turned within.

She waits in silence with a grin
And enemies are easy prey.
I find my other self… my twin.

A part of me that waits therein;
My Tiger keeps my foes at bay.
When deepest thoughts are turned within.

My Tiger waits beneath my skin
And she has never run astray.
I find my other self… my twin.

My other self, my discipline;
Harm me and she’ll make you pay.
When deepest thoughts are turned within,
I find my other self… my twin.

 

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Art by: Jim Warren

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  • ecrivain01
    November 23
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    Smudged indeed ...

    and it works well this way. We all have an inner beast growling ... or purring, as the case might be. Yours seems to do both, like a well-tuned engine.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in the competition.


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    October 27

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    I feel exactly this way also! The tiger is my twin and a reflection of my soul. If her anger is aroused ~ she even frightens me with her ferocity. She protects me and is always there, guarding me. Sometimes she pounces before she thinks; and that can be her downfall. I loved this write. Truely beautiful and true. Thank you for sharing it here with us!

  • dragon singer
    August 7

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    WOW

    unfortunately i think my inner self is currantly a snake: striking where it hurts and letting the venom do the rest a tigress would be a vast improvement


  • Hihamburger
    June 14

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    Great

    This is great and true. Everyone has someone else withing them that makes sure that when we get hurt that they will hurt them back to make them pay. I loved it and am glad I read it. Keep writing and great job,
    ~Hihamburger


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 7, 2008

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    Very well written and so true

    We all do have that one person within us that is at work to helpp keep you safe from harm and sometimes in life when people use mind altring drugs they feel they have lost this person for their mind can no longer function with this protection . I feel we must have keep out minds free from the dangers of this world to stay drug free so that that inner person will always be there to rally and see we are safe from harm


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    The tiger buried deep inside, who comes out to deal with the enemies of the one people see. What a contrast that must be to the beautiful dancer who graces the pages each day.


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    The tiger within...my twin...protecting me, This is a fantastic write of origality and imagery. The poem flows with the words like a storytale you can feel. This should get teh godl and I dont think I could best it. Good luck...

    return the favor?


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 16, 2008

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    Ah, this one is beautifully done. The form is perfect and the whole poem is enchanting to the psyche. Most excellent


  • Beating gold member
    October 24, 2007

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    I love the picture and how you describe your other half as the tiger. Or the tiger as your twin. A new side of yourself that you discoverd. It's like you found a new strength. I like that. Very well written!


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    August 26, 2007
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    Lovely dulcet tones in this one dear


  • jo-el
    August 25, 2007

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    very interesting write. a dual capacity for expression. one picks up the slack where the other lacks. when i read somethin that moves me on every level such as sound, rhythm, message and honesty(openess)i ussually have some sort of physical reaction. my hair all over stands up as if in contact with a static electricity charged metal comb. this peice accomplished that. i like how the transformation is within your control and infact a calculated defense mechanism summoned with deep concentration. which isn't really a transformation at all i guess. i don't want to imply that you have a psychosis lol. more accurately, through a concerted effort of will and thought you reach within yourself and withdraw extra strength and fortitude to deal with whatever situation that confronts you. most excellent write


  • Beanbiscuit
    August 13, 2007

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    The great power dwelling in the mind is impossible to weaken or shake. The guardian angel is the bravery itself. The creation is truly impressive.


  • workingharleylady
    August 12, 2007

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    Holly cow

    A 10 in my book. Love this picture, would like to write one myself based on this pic. Very well written, you have a special pen my dear poetess, run with it.
    Warmly, Chrissy


  • brentsrich
    August 12, 2007

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    I find such strict structure difficult to write under. However, when done well, structure can make a poem more beautiful and significant. I think you've achieved this here. I hear the mantra, sense the tension, and recognize both fear and respect of the hidden tiger. Nicely done.

    Thanks for entering.


  • PerfectImperfection
    August 3, 2007

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    Such a powerful piece of well composed form! The roaring intensity, an unveiling of strength. Very nice piece! Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    July 29, 2007
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    Wonderful use of this form. I'm glad I got the chance to read it.


  • Katyv
    July 27, 2007
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    Very creative. The poem is a great write.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    Nice Art Work,

    From the picture, to the howling words you roar, I adore this masterpiece, I gaze into to explore.. You have a great creation going here between the two of you, pen on sweet and sexy soul!


    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo


  • forbidden-dreams
    July 26, 2007

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    Great

    This is a lovely poem. I really like the way it is set out and the way it fits together so perfectly. I got a good sense from this poem, an inner feeling of happiness. It's a great read..well done!

  • Eusebius
    July 25, 2007

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    bravo

    Ah, a fine villanelle! Nearly a forgotten form now, but so wonderful and so potent when used well as this is! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • holly9
    July 23, 2007
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    Creative

    Very original!

  • Virgoan
    July 18, 2007

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    Beautiful! The language, thought, imagery ar above par! Well executed piece.

    Thanks so much for sharing this beautiful piece. I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.

    ~VIRGOAN~


  • scorpio rising
    July 17, 2007

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    Holly cow!!!

    What are you some kind of pro?

    Hahahaha...

    Every well written poem

    You obviously put a lot of work into this and it seems to have payed off

    My tiger!

    I wish I could find my tiger

    Maybe I have?

    Word words...seem to hold so much...wisdom and experience

    I enjoyed this very much
    It was a pleasure to have read

    Keep them comin!!!!


    Much Love!


  • Swan song gold member
    July 14, 2007
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    This is excellent sikly smooth and you did not force a beat. Very good will read again


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    This was creatively penned and carried within a stunning form! I pull a feeling of strong vs. weak, good vs. evil within your lines. Everyone may possess these characteristics, but not everyone acknowledges or recognizes them Excellent penning, delivering a unique perspective and intrigue! This was certainly my pleasure to read ~tia


    • Amera gold member
      July 13, 2007
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      Thanks Tia, I like you; you'll never meet my tiger.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    July 2, 2007
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    This is fantastic. Really awesome. lol


    • Amera gold member
      July 2, 2007
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      Thank you for the lovely comment and the applause (bunnies)


  • Candy6
    June 24, 2007
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    I like it!

    Amera, This poem is so excellent. I like small and big cats, meeowwww!


  • Foxydaze14
    June 20, 2007

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    I love this form and this is such a great poem. You did a great job on it. Thanks for sharing it with us!


  • second-born
    June 16, 2007

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    This is such an awesome write!!! First of all I would like to congratulate you for you really put up to the challenge of a villanelle..and I think you conquered that poetry form already...moreover, the concept of your piece is so interesting...and last but not the least, this poem of yours is definitely one of the best poems I have ever read in AP...and I can't wait to read all your poems!!!


    • Amera gold member
      June 16, 2007
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      Thank you; what a lovely comment.


      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • RedAquarius
    June 14, 2007

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    Perfection. This is a form I have yet to attempt, but you make it look so easy. The art definitely complements the words here but even without the picture, these words would be sleek and strong - like the tiger.


  • ellipsist
    June 14, 2007

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    wonderful!

    this piece is masterfully crafted! I love the wording, the imagery... very well composed, everything about this piece is wonderful!


  • LadyInRed55
    June 10, 2007
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    This piece is great

    I loved it. Very good!!!
    Thanks!!!!


  • extasy
    June 8, 2007
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    I had to read this several times. I've never seen anything like it.


  • intanglio2ring
    June 7, 2007

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    Perfect!

    I've only tried this form once myself - but the beauty of your words exceeded anY thoughts of repetitive boredom! I was entranced!
    Good Luck in teh contest - you've already blown my entry away!
    Tang


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 31, 2007

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    A Lovely Villanelle

    I truly do adore this form and find it one of the most difficult to master. It appears you have this down quite nicely. Well done. This really is a beautiful poem. ~Pamela

    • Amera gold member
      May 31, 2007

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      Thank you Pam, a comment from a poet like you is like finding that small small gift behind the Christmas Tree. You made me smile, thanks.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • maa gold member
    May 29, 2007

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    how beautiful ...
    tiger really seems to be your spirit-guide ...
    amazing ...
    a perfectly flowing tribute to tiger ...
    brava ...

    maa


  • StarEyes
    May 24, 2007

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    WOW!!!!! This is a most enjoyed read!!!!! I have never really thought of it quite like this, but the way you say you "found your other self...twin" I think that is true of all of us, somewhere inside ourselves, we have, (if you will) another part of ourselves that we hear, we feel, to help get us through in troubling times. Great read!!!!!!! Congrats on the gold! Well deserved for sure!!!!


  • PicturePoet
    May 24, 2007

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    Excellent

    Savory writing! I LOVE all your imagery . . . just like your other poem, Feminine Control, this is very self empowering. Great work, keep it going!

    Sincerely,
    SilverMoonCat


  • Delta
    May 22, 2007

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    Most eXcellent

    You are an amazing writer. I love the element of duality and how great strength is summoned from within. It shows a new angle of how independence can be cultivated. The repetition likens to a mantra. I might just adopt it as such. thanks for sharing

    ~Delta


  • Manoura xx
    May 21, 2007
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    oh, and i almost forgot...TWO GOLD TROPHIES!!!WOOWWW!!!!!


  • Manoura xx
    May 21, 2007
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    hey, where do you get all these pictures from???there soo cool!!!!


  • FallingTwilight
    May 20, 2007

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    Brilliant. I love the picture, it accompanies your poem so well.

    Congratulations on winning two contests,

    FallenPoeticAngel


  • bedovich
    May 14, 2007

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    amera ishkhanuhi in armenian princess prencess u got names as much you got words and talentssssssss yayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy u rock princesss this is so cooooooooooool its so hard to write in this genre but u did fair and welll


  • Swan song gold member
    May 12, 2007
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    REALLY WELL DONE


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    May 9, 2007
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    Great piece of art here, the picture makes it all the better!


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    April 28, 2007

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    Brilliant!!!!

    Amera,
    I love the pic However, your words paints the picture more vividly than the picture itself. The repetetion worked very well in this piece. Ryhme and flow is perfect.
    Amazing Write!
    You surely don't need this as you penned this so well but good luck in the contests.
    Take care
    Bo


  • Triste
    April 20, 2007

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    Very Nice

    I loved the imagery of this poem. I could feel the protective tiger spirit surrounding you. You accomplished the form of the poem very well. I liked that the lines used in repetition seemed fresh in every stanza, because in each a new or varied thought was presented. I didn't feel like I was reading the same phrases over and over with no purpose. Also, the rhyming was done very well. Thanks for your entry.


  • macandrew
    April 19, 2007

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    Very well written villanelle. A smooth read with good use of the refrains.

    John


  • PoetBoy2008
    April 17, 2007

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    That truly is a contest winner and i see why this is your favorite poem it's incredible i like how you describe your other half as the tiger it's good description.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 15, 2007
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    I found my other self… my twin...with twin gold ...lol.. a great poem indeed...

    ...


  • Musimwa
    April 5, 2007

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    Great Piece

    Dear Poet, lol, this is a great poem. I love it. I am touched by this part;
    Crouched and ready to begin

    Harm me and I’ll make you pay

    Turning my thought, deep within

    I found my other self… my twin

    Keep this up. Good day


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    I read this awhile ago but got so lost in thought that I forgot to comment it. You dug deep for this one and it really shows. The description here is vivid and that's an achievement in a Villanelle. The form seems to limit us in what we can say, but you did extremely well with this one. I love Villanelles and consider them amongst the hardest of the forms and certainly a favourite of mine. Thanks for sharing. Laura


  • -Ink Artist-
    April 4, 2007

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    Gorgeous villanelle! Such a revealing and intriguing piece. The flow was flawless and your imagery was lovely. Beautifully written! Thanks for your entry!

    ~Lori


  • Jalalbad gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    Love the photo

    also the poem. This reminds me of the dream I once had of playing with 2 white and black stripped tigers. Great eyes.


  • sunny day
    March 26, 2007

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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    Amera, A villanelle done to perfection. What wonderful imager you produced. I was reminded of Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon there for a moment. Your rhythm and ryhming are superb creating an effortless flow. Each and every word placed carefully like an artist I watched each brush stroke produce this masterpiece. I can see why it would get gold. Thank you for sharing the gift of your elegant pen with all of us. Kudos for you with this brilliant work. Love and God bless, Joyce


  • manoguru
    March 13, 2007

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    sorry for a late response. but without much ado, here i go:

    in the the first stz, first line, i wonder if you really need to keep "so" in that line. i sounds so superfluous. also i don't really get what you mean by the 2nd line. perhaps you mean that after your introspection, you found some feeling which were true to you and hence had to be followed. but this particular line sounds forced. maybe the wierdness is due to the lack of a subject in that line. perhaps putting an "I" infront of the line will help.

    in the 2nd stz, i think the last line can be improved by altering the line a bit. maybe "she hid in my thoughts deep within" so that there is a better connection with the 2nd line.

    the 3rd, 4th, 5th and 6th stz i have nothing to complain about. the flow of the sense is not hampered by the requirements of the poetic form. however, i find an inconsistancy here. you say that the tiger protects you form mortal sin by preying on your enemies, but isn't "preying" on somebody else also a sin? you maybe using a metaphor of tiger, but i don't believe in hurting others because they hurt you. since the tiger is traditionally a symbol of power, i think it would have been more interesting if you had depicted it as a rejuvinating force after a deep despair, and hence your protector, rather than something that (as far as the poem seems to suggest) punishes your foe. lastly in the 5th stz, 2nd line, the word "play" didn't work for me. i would have prefered "pray" instead of "play".

    • Amera gold member
      March 13, 2007
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      manoguru

      Perfect my friend! Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the most comprehensive critique I have ever received. I did use a few of your suggestions as I found them to improve my poem. I don’t see your point on the line; “Extracted feelings to obey” I do that my self frequently; I extract a feeling and act on it rather than acting on a logical conclusion. Your comment about attacking being a sin is great! That’s the whole theme of the poem: “an eye for an eye a tooth for a tooth” it’s hypercritical but aren’t we all hypocrites in one way or another?

      Again, thank you and God bless you.

      Love,
      Amera


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 10, 2007

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    Wow,

    Nice disciplined write. The gemini here understands the duality of your persona. It is good to have your Tiger within to protect you. Some people never allow their protector out to be able to do what needs to be done.

    Thank you for sharing this, and bringing it to my attention.

    And your well deserved bunnies are coming up.
    Buddy


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    March 10, 2007

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    I too can clearly see why you won gold, this is not only beautiful but amazing Amera, thankyou for sharing it with me, Bella


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 9, 2007

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    i see why you won the gold, twice. this is very introspective of you. thank you for sending me the link. viyanna rosemarie


  • blueyez
    March 6, 2007

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    So it finally comes out! You are a tiger lol You are so talented Amera! I love the form and you wrote an awesome poem about your twin! very well done!

  • manoguru
    March 4, 2007
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    this is really interesting... an i am amazed how quickly you responded to my challenge. i will be back to give you a more detailed comment.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    March 3, 2007

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    this is a lovely write and flows well we all have these other parts of others some protect us, some allow us innocence, some are critical and judge. The flow was impressive as was the dramtic natuire of some of he lines well done

    love annd light,
    blaze


    • Amera gold member
      March 3, 2007
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      Blazing White Wolf

      Thank you so much a comment from you does me honor.


  • Fire N Ice
    March 3, 2007

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    Fantastic

    this may just be your best yet, very deserving of the double gold you have there, and more to follow i hope.
    i guess we all have a hidden Tiger ready to pounce lol,
    this is truly wonderful my friend.


  • Spiritvision angel
    March 3, 2007

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    EXCELLENT AMERA!!!! This is awesome!! The story it holds while keeping the rhythym and suspense as one reads and the way it repeats "turning my thoughts so deep within, I found my other self, my twin"! Its no wonder you won the gold. Its just so worth it!!!!


  • InMemoryofCharlieJr
    February 28, 2007
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    I totally agree with ro! Great pic to go with an awesome poem!


  • lilrochick silver member
    February 28, 2007

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    This is a superb write. The picture deffanitly goes well with the rest of the pome. I love the rhyme scheme that you used and the repitition of "turning my thoughts so deep within", and "I've found my other self...my twin". Excellent job. Thank you for entering my contest.

    Ro


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    Excellent!! I can completely relate! I have a facet that is definitely razor edged, I am happy to see another who has one also and embraces it! Well done!


    • Amera gold member
      February 26, 2007
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      lol, it does kind of describe you doesn't it?


  • Never Fall in Love
    February 23, 2007

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    wow
    Wow
    WoW
    WOW
    WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!
    this is amazing
    you really make me jealous with this
    and you know what
    I'm gonna try this
    as soon as I'm done with the poem I have to finish now
    sorry .. couldnt start a new one
    without finishing my older one
    one question
    you tired of my comments yet?

    Never ♥

    • Amera gold member
      February 23, 2007
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      lol, I love your comments! You make me feel good even when I messed a poem up. Thank you so much for making writing worthwhile.

      Love, Amera


  • JohnnyD gold member
    February 22, 2007

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    This was quiet well done! very well indeed. A joy to read and the visual was great. I liked this last stanza the best of all;

    Crouched and ready to begin

    Harm me and I’ll make you pay

    Turning my thought so deep within

    I found my other self… my twin


    yes, very, very well done! bravo!

    JD


    • Amera gold member
      February 22, 2007
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      Thanks (blush) I knew you'd like My Tiger. I don't know why I didn't think of it yesterday.


  • Puppydog gold member
    February 17, 2007

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    BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN!

    We all have another side to our selves, sometimes it seems we are two very different people


  • myrataal silver member
    February 17, 2007

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    Wonderful poem ...

    hauntingly awesome. You've succeeded in writing an exquisite poem. Well done, Amera.

    Did you mean prey? (She lies in wait, deep within/My enemies are her pray).

    I love the Villannelle; repetition always works well and adds so much drama.



    Myra


  • Aeonna
    February 17, 2007

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    whoaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!

    wow, you must have patience, to write a poem in this form, you're aweseome.. superb write indeed.. keep your poems comimg..

    fleur de rosa

    • Amera gold member
      February 17, 2007
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      Thanks, my muse was on a roll. The contest asked for my best and I gave him the hardest style I could think of. Love Amera


  • Sacrificial Love
    February 17, 2007

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    Excellent!!!

    You did an outstanding job at this Vilanelle...
    You have mastered what, in my opinion, is one of the most difficut to master.

    Incredibly done...

    Sahabah


    • Amera gold member
      February 17, 2007
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      I don't know about mastering it but thanks so much. Love , Amera


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 16, 2007

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    I love this. I could never do this. I would pull out my hair You make it seem so easy, which is the art of what you do. Kudo's and a pound of pralines...
    Love, Lane


    • Amera gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      Thanks Lane, I'll buy the brandy thie time. You got a smoke?


  • Dark Soul Reaper
    February 16, 2007

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    Great write. I like that style of writing. Good job. The whole this just flows well and you make the entire poem pop out. It paints a picture in my mine so vividly it's amazing. Keep it up.


    • Amera gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      Thanks Dark Soul Reaper! I like your Ap name. I messed up when I joined, I used my real name, LOL


  • And Hyetal
    February 16, 2007

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    Ooooh, very pretty! I like the villanelle!

    Cassie


  • soldiersoul gold member
    February 16, 2007

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    Tigress cant change her stripes unless she rolls in bleach...but hey shes a white tiger anyway so i'd say the TWIN is black and white...u gotta BROTHER? lol...LOVE ALWAYS ELF GOOD JOB


  • mysticstorm gold member
    February 16, 2007

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    The two sides of one coin. Perfect form and flow. This is very well done and reminds me of several people that I know. Often wonder if we all do not have equal good and bad.
    Lovely work!


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 16, 2007
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    a difficult form factor here

    the writer handles it well and delivers her message

  • Fire N Ice
    February 16, 2007
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    Excellent!!

    perfect form as always!!
    the write is fantastic, we all have a hidden side,
    a tiger waiting to strike lol
    this is great work, well done sweet


  • PerVirtuous
    February 16, 2007

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    Tandem Hunting..

    Twins, one tame one wild, can you imagine that!
    But whether kitty or tiger, either 'tis a cat.
    Roses in my left hand, cat o' nines in my right,
    music has us dancing, stalking, pouncing, in the night.
    Leg and breast alluring, claw and teeth raise fear
    open hand caresses, whip snaps at your ear.
    One who seeks this tandem, must repeat this oath:
    "I will lose my life or, I will capture both!"

    Three psychotic bunnies who think they are half badger.

    • Amera gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      <

      Oh my... the comments are getting better than the poem. If you are trying to seduce me sir you are on the right track.


      • PerVirtuous
        February 16, 2007
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        Don't give me any credit. You threw the gauntlet down. Somebody had to come pick it up...

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