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Kissing Her GoodBye

Giving everything and my all

winds of change started happening

life growing cold as winter creeps

heated passion started fading out

and I can see her now, dancing around

trying to impress me with her all

playing a foolish dance of fakeness

All her baggage in tow, I just want to forget

let go of all the joy; for nothing was real

all of the pain from time that was wasted

I took your guilt and placed it into me

for I felt so very wrong for everything;

and now I kiss it goodbye; letting go forever

our last dance ended fatally, heat died

who's sleeping my side of the bed tonight?

looking next to me, looks like shadows of misery

have you ever cried so hard?
Numbness inside

baby you just died, after everything I did

and there she goes again, lies, screams

another masquerade in false circumstance

She'll fuck you just for the taste, and use you

none of it is real though for it's just a play

I just wish that I could replace all the memories

of what makes my blood run cold,

and as your blood flows through me,

I say goodbye to what we had;

my love you didn't deserve, I see that clearly now

liars will eventually get what they have coming

my heart has been torn in two,

yet people are bypassing my tears,
can't anyone see them as I lay down and cry?

or is it they aren't seeing them
 from false stories told about me
that aren't true and real?

I'm alone and finished...but that's just for a season

she came, and went, I gnawed through my lip,

makeup smeared in her eyes, disbelief comes

each sob's a reason to say good-bye

for my heart doesn't belong to someone that lies

sometimes when your holding on,
 you'll never see the light

with the flowers in her hair,
gazed upon with dead lovers eyes,
she never looked so good

and I never, felt so right, I felt so wrong....

for the only thing I feel right by is
 kissing her goodbye

Author notes

Thank you for the invite. I hope that you like what I did with the lyrics
Atreyu - Right Side Of The Bed Lyrics
and i can see her now, dancing around, her drink in hand. All her baggage in tow, i just want to forget and let go of all the joy, all of the pain, i took your guilt and placed it into me, and now i kiss it goodbye. our last dance ended fatally. who's sleeping on my side of the bed tonight? have you ever cried so hard? baby you just died. and there she goes again, another masquerade in false circumstance. She'll fuck you just for the taste! i just wish that i could replace all the memories of what makes my blood run cold, and as your blood flows through me, i say goodbye to what we had. she came and went, i gnawed through my lip, makeup smeared in her eyes, each sob's a reason to say good bye. sometimes when your holding on, you'll never see the light. with the flowers in her hair, gazed upon with dead lovers eyes. she never looked so good, and i never, felt so right. I felt so wrong...

" lovelost "



Written October 24th, 2006

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  • catcrawford22
    October 24, 2006
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    great poem, fantastic you have an great talent, well done and good luck


  • Kari gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Thank you all so much for the applauses and kind words I am so glad everyone likes it


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 24, 2006
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    Very well done, my friend! I wish you all the very best in the contest


  • freespirit51
    October 24, 2006
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    Great write Kari. It is a very hreatbreaking write. One of your better ones I think..Great job.

  • Kari gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Aw Thank you!


  • panegyric ink
    October 24, 2006
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    This kicks ass!!!!!

    The best I've read all week!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • Kari gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Thanks for the compliment

  • Word poet
    October 24, 2006
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    Very fitting honor to someone who has died and who they were greatly loved. nice poem


  • Kari gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    ooooooo thank you so much for that Blushing! I have changed it Thank you for your wonderful compliment. I am so glad you like it You know..I think no one is never fully alone


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Thought provokingly stunning

    Sweety... the line that end in "my heart has been torn in too" too needs to be two. Other than that... watch the rephrasing of the same thing twice.

    This piece is very vivid and yet surreal in a way. I can see this poem happening in so many lives today because we don't take the time to heal ourselves before trying to give ourselves to another. We are so afraid to be alone,due to whatever reason society makes us feel. We need to stop the fear of loneliness and learn about ourselves before we take the time to be with someone else.

    This poem is a clear, clarion call to that aspect of life and you have phrased it *very* well hon. Great job and I am left truly impressed by this work... Congrats


  • Kari gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Thank you for your compliment! Who knows where the pen will take me next! lol


  • October 24, 2006
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    Awesome!!!

    Wow!! Sound like someone stabbed you hard!! Excellent writing!! I really enjoy this!! Can't wait to see what you write next!

  • Kari gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Yeah, I like that line a lot to Thanks for your kind support


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    October 24, 2006
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    WOW I loved this Kari! Seriously. One of the most sensitive pieces I've read. I could feel the pain in it, so strongly, and it left me with goosebumps! You know what I love most?
    sometimes when your holding on,
    you'll never see the light
    Amazing. Truly amazing!

    Love ya sis

  • Kari gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Thank you sweety..I'm glad you liked it hun


  • JustDavey
    October 24, 2006
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    diggin it majorly

    holy shit this was vivid. dang my love you knocked that one outta the ball park lets hope the contest judger thinks the same and gives you the win

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