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A Dog's Life

Sixteen years, now almost seventeen,
I've played at stick and ball, stayed seldom still
until good master's call would whistle shrill
to lead me back - no need to smack.  Sight keen.

Sixteen years tail's wagged as faithful friend,
as boon companion, running round fun years.
His mother passed away, I shared the tears
that fountained forth and never seemed to end.

Sixteen years round each revolving moon
from hearth and home I pick up slightest sound,
ears prick, eyes bright, in sight I'm always found
to hold my ground, though often play buffoon.

Sixteen years, come rain or shine, we walk
twice, sometimes thrice a day, I sense each smell
around the house, know friends and rascals well,
and after dinner hear the table talk.

Sixteen years from pet to family,
from playful pat to priceless kith and kin,
I vet as threat who'd twins' affections win,
can smell a rat or chase cat up a tree.

Sixteen years I've watched the children grow,
suffered unruly hands that now caress,
I guard them still, still at the same address,
as I will willing till my turn to go.

Sixteen years saw summers shedding hair,
saw autumns' colours charm birds from the trees,
saw winter whiteness whose bare branches' frieze
prepared for springs unbounded, weather fair.

Sixteen years, milk - nap - home-made pap brew,
from toothless start, heart full, until depart,
toothless, heart filled beyond all man may chart,
life's cycle spins till ready to renew.

Sixteen years that gambolled life away,
with water, beef and bone, I’ve played at will.
Scents seem less sharp today, and soon I will
make my last bow, - still in thrill dreams I play !


Author notes


Puppy pic
http://flickr.com/photos/tswill/2443146360/



Old age pic
http://flickr.com/photos/aileenfotografie/1468196900/


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Definition : gambol as opposed to gamble
gay or light-hearted recreational activity for diversion or amusement, play boisterously

Definition : frieze as opposed to freeze
horizontal band of sculpted or painted decoration

Definition : vet - wordplay implying 'case the joint' or oversee more than in the sense of animal doctor

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In terms of life expectancy 1 'dog year' is considered to be the equivalent of between 6 and 7 human years. 16 is thus an approximate equivalent of between 100 and 110

Stanza 3 : John Dryden Absalom and Achitophel, pt. 1, l. 545-50 (1681) Zimri, as George Villiers, 2nd Duke of Buckingham

...so various, that he seemed to be
Not one, but all mankind’s epitome.
./.
But in the course of one revolving moon
Was chemist, fiddler, statesman and buffoon.


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The initial poem wrote itself, drawn through and by a 16 year old labrador that joined four people in a small car for a long trip from Paris to St. Tropez for New Year 1991/1992 ...
... 'and thereon hangs a tail's tale'



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  • lullabyegurl
    April 14

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    hey!!! love the pic!!! im sure i seen my butthead of a friend in there!!!!!!! lol
    great poem 2 tho loved it!!!!! lol xx

  • stani
    April 14

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    nice write about a dog's life! cool! i need to spend some more time and read this again! definitely captivating!

  • SafeRefuge
    April 12

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    whoa! I love that you incorporated a previous poem into your own piece of work. I dare say that the word play on vet was marvelous I had to read that line at least two times I believe to fully receive the meaning behind it. I do love your poetry and I wish I had more time to indulge myself in more.

  • Reptile Lady gold member
    April 9

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    Best friends and loyal to the end
    Paints that so well within your poem
    I have a Labradoodle, and she is wonderful
    Julie
  • Dog's are our "special" children they are a gift from god,sweet little presents sent to us from heaven up above. My dog "missy" is our 3rd child she is an asset to our family and pure joy. She is faithful trusting and such a sweet loving and kind soul. I love this poem it touched my heart like poetry should and left me with a sweet sigh of oh I can relate to these angelic words,thoughts and feelings. Very well written. I love the picture you added as well.

    . Rewarded 8

  • This was a very good look into the mind of a dog. I really like it. I must say that it was quite long, and couldn't keep my attention. It really makes me look at my own dog and wonder what exactly he thinks though.
    Thankyouu for entering my contest and good luck.

    -Dana.

  • great story i really enjoyed it

    i like the poem

  • myrataal silver member
    April 5

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    OH! You know of dogs ...

    of humans ... of love ... life and ... of POETRY!

    Very well done ... and you opened up my tear fountain ... for our little doggie died yesterday. After only 45 dog years ... (he was 5 human years old)

    Blessed be.

    . Rewarded 4

  • Fantastic

    It was meaningful, and sincere. I truly loved it! good job. Well worth my and everyone who reads its time

    . Rewarded 4

  • In my opinion, there is no friend like a loving dog. I've got two, one 12 years old and one 8...I dread the passing years almost as much as I revel in the wonderful moments.

    This piece resonated with me deeply, not only in the lovely descriptions, but also in the "matter of fact" narrative. The power in making this piece come from the "dog's mouth", so to speak, is huge. Bravo!

    . Rewarded 8


  • Ratatoskr
    April 4

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    This is a great poem. It makes me remember why I love dogs, and hate cats. Brings me back to the day that I found my current dog. Heh, thank you for that. Great poem and great look into the life of a dog.
  • Priscilla123
    April 3
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    love i
  • This poem is very well written and warm. It had me thinking about all the dogs I've had throughout my life, and how one in particular really did become part of the family. He was wild and unruly, but very sweet. Oh, the powers of poetry. This is wonderful. I'm very happy to have read it tonight.

  • TabbyJoy
    March 27
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    Thank you for the entry...gave me a peek inside a dog's life (and I love dogs)

  • TizMoi
    March 26

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    I love tis poem so much, its very well written indeed. I've commented away back but would like to wish you well in the contest with this awesome write.

  • Kevin Moderators member
    March 24
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    i may have commented on this already heh, I can't remember

    lovely oldpoetry style.

    the repetitive start didn't do much for me, but i'm not a huge form person

    'sixteen years tail's' -> of tails? And it shouldn't be possessive, though I've never been great at knowing when to use '.

    'pick up slightest sound' -> 'the slightest sound'?

    'in sight i'm always found' -> I always yell about subject/verb inversion. I'm always found in sight. But image are you trying to convey though? Could be said more powerful by a metaphor/example...

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  • Philogos gold member
    March 24

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    I can empathise with the dog's point of view as my wife is an enthusiast. Particularly liked the way the internal rhymes worked and the use of incomplete sentence structure to fix both rhythm and meaning.

    . Rewarded 4


  • TillyMay
    March 24

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    I hadn't realized, until I'd already clicked on this, that I had read it (and commented on it) before. I'm sorry! I hate to use up your feature points like that! If it is any consolation- I enjoyed it even more the second time around!!!

  • Elenaliz
    March 22

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    this is such a sweet story about what great and faithful friends dogs can be.very well written.the end is so sad but inevidable.i love this part.
    Sixteen years I've watched the children grow,
    suffered unruly hands that now caress,
    I guard them still, still at the same address,
    as I will willing till my turn to go.
    its funny how they put up w/ kids.great write.


  • Raven Tears gold member
    March 21
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    What a beautiful and descriptive write.
    That dog seemed as though he had a life worth cherishing!
    Well done, and goodluck.

  • Sacred Ground
    March 20
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    Very nice write and the creativity you expressed putting this together is great!
    LisaMarie

  • jo-jo
    March 20
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    i liked your poem

    was your dogs name rascal i had a dog named rascal only lived 12 years. we all grow old


  • Clarabelll
    March 20

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    WOW... I lvoe Dogs and I get this peom so much!
    "Sixteen years round each revolving moon"
    I love that line!
  • tiabobia
    March 20

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    this is about a dog...
    wow.


    i love my dog too
    his name is Bo & he's fat.





    i like it
  • XHEAVENkiRAx
    March 20
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    good wor

  • eleno
    March 20

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    so sweet, but i think i read it before. its great. i love dogs. there is nothing more loyal walking our planet. -eleno
  • Awwwwww that is so sweet...

    I love the way you wrote this, i honestly do, its a great write, i love my puppy so it hits a special spot wif me...I love it, Thanks for sharing that one... its one of the best i have read so far...

    . Rewarded 4


  • shepherd23 silver member
    March 20

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    Delightful!

    "Sixteen years tail's wagged as faithful friend,
    as boon companion, running round fun years."
    Maybe my favorite lines - re-read serveral times - asking myself...is the "boon companion" the dog to the man or the tail to the dog, or both - Ha Ha what a time I had thinking of that...
    "Sixteen years from pet to family,
    from playful pat to priceless kith and kin,"
    a good runner-up to my first favorite - my Jack Russell would also approve of this line
    "...watched the children grow,
    suffered unruly hands that now caress,"
    (my dog takes over the keyboard and types) "I know exactly how he feels"
    and fianlly, "willing till my turn to go."
    only a true boon companion would assume this position/attidude - this line could inspire a whole other poem...
    Thanks for a great start to my day!

    S23



  • This is very warm. The last stanza is, in my opinion, the best. Lines twenty-one to twenty-two are also very nice - but the whole piece is, really. Thank you!

  • kira1115
    March 19

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    Good. I have my dog beside me now and I know she is my friend. Thank you for sharing this.


  • Moqui Takoda
    March 19

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    i love dogs ... this is wonderful ... i always knew they had stuff in their heads that i had forgotten ... yeah, it sure is sad when a loved pet starts to get old and then passes away ... well, anyway , i love this poem with all my heart. never read one with a dog as the personna .... love it ... just love it

    . Rewarded 6


  • FallenAngel09
    March 19

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    A very good write, it was extremely interesting to me because I have never read a poem that was taken from the point of view of a family pet. It was beautifully executed and had a sweet nostalgia that was very good for this type of poem. I loved it and enjoyed reading it. Great job and hope you keep writing.

    Hugs and Kisses,
    Tiphanie
  • wow, thats a really good poem and i think that its really unique. i love the part where it says "Sixteen years round each revolving moon
    from hearth and home I pick up slightest sound,
    ears prick, eyes bright, in sight I'm always found
    to hold my ground, though often play buffoon."
    i think that the first line really explains the poem and the first line leads to a really good and powerful poem.

    . Rewarded 8


  • unsigned gold member
    March 19
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    *wags tail excitedly*......*chases tail*...


  • Whisper Mckee
    March 18

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    I have a dog whos twelve, I to thing of all the things she does. I got two puts hoping when her time comes they will ease her passage. My husband that wanted no dogs in the house...will now hurt most of all, because somewhere along the way she became his baby.
  • its really good. i mostly like it cuz it shows how loyal dogs really are and reminds me of my dog

    . Rewarded 4


  • TillyMay
    March 18
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    This is a wonderful poem. Besides being expertly crafted and beautifully penned, it is moving and a sweet testimony to the dogs who start out as pets and become family. I work for a county dog shelter- and have a special place in my heart for these intelligent animals. Lovely stuff!

    . Rewarded 6


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 18

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    (The system doesn't seem to want to let me applaud today - let me try again... Bother! Nope, please take the will for the deed. At least I can add them as emoticons )


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 18
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    This is familiar - have you posted your earlier version? I quite like it, and I hope it does well in the contest.

  • Lady Altheia
    March 17

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    I wrote a story poemcalled A Doggie Dog Lif. It was about one of my dachshunds in a more comical setting. I thorouhly enjoye your poem. Niaish (Thank you) for sharing.

  • megan-mikels
    March 17

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    so sweet...

    Sixteen years I've watched the children grow,
    suffered unruly hands that now caress,
    I guard them still, still at the same address... this is the sweetest line.   More so the idea that these wise old observations are perfect perspective placers!

  • KayJay gold member
    March 17

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    16 years this poem has been waiting (unless my math is off LOL) but it ends in life not death and that dog will live forever in your words. It reminds me of my true and faithful who will never leave my side until no one remembers...
    Great write. Thank you from both Scooter and me.

    . Rewarded 6

  • Great job!

  • liduen silver member
    March 15

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    yeah! someone did this option!!!! Geesh, there are so many good poems in this contest (including this one) its going to be soooo hard to judge Great write! Good luck in the contest.

  • shuvi
    March 7

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    I have already commented on this one I guess, but again, it is wow.. the EIGHT FIFTY SEVEN applause proves this...is this, the most applauded poem on AP???

    love and cheers, shuvi

    i can send you the feature cost points if you wish, i havent exactly 'critique'd on here

    . Rewarded 4


  • Ace13
    March 7

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    Wow, there was a lot of time spent on this poem. And so in depth for writting about a dog.weird but good "thumbs up

  • NiurTarow
    March 7

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    Having recently lost a beloved dog to old age, and having recently gained a new puppy with all the vigors of life, I deeply appreciate the sentiment in this piece. Well done poet, thank you for reminding me of my pet, when I am at college and cannot see him.

    And, might I add, you have a talent for rhyme. It is fluid, without being cheesy. Masterful.

  • crazymomma
    March 3

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    Wonderful

    I thought it had to be your pet to know so much. But I really love the editted line "as I will willing till my turn to go". It describes our loyal companions so well. Thanks for sharing and nice write.

    . Rewarded 4


  • garbait
    March 3

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    You don't have to love dogs to feel the passion here(I don't much care for dogs.)
    Youve put a lot of time and effort into very nice write. Never give up your passions.

    . Rewarded 4

  • okjcop
    March 3

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    Thank You. Just lost a beloved Pug a month ago amd this leaves me with tears in my eyes and renewed grief. I know each time I go through it leaves me a little more free to focus on the fun times. You show a great deal of understanding for what a pet can mean.

  • darkangelcutter
    February 28

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    hey i really love dogs so i love this poem my dog just had five puppies and my other dog is also going to have them so i am reading everything about dogs thanks for writing this poem!
  • sadsongstress
    February 28

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    so cool

    I have a brand new puppy and so I really really liked this poem. Your images are incredibly strong and just as g-tonttu said, it captures the essence of dogness. Congrats! I can't wait to read more of your stuff.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Flutterby--x
    February 27
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    Very sentimental, warm and a write worth cherishing.
    Much love.
    x


  • Nigeej
    February 27
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    very good, i didnt waste time reading it , will always stay in my mind

  • Floorboards
    February 27

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    Very good, I would have appreciated it more if I actually liked dogs, but that's not your fault. The poem is very well written with an excellent rhyme scheme and good/ strong images, I can see this poem is very dear to you, and I can see why,
    well done,
    kind regards,
    Floorboards.

    . Rewarded 6


  • g-tonttu
    February 27

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    I really like this poem...had a dog once myself.
    You have indeed captured the "essence of dogness".

  • DogontheComet
    February 27

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    What a great poem. The perspective taken puts the reader behind every sense what being a dog is like. This is very unique and definitely worthy of all the attention and praise it has receive. Great work!
    Have a good day,
    Herman

    . Rewarded 4

  • ccb
    February 26
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    interesting topic, cool poem.

  • obscenegesture
    February 25

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    Interesting approach. A bit too long for its own good perhaps, but, the way you use words is as it should be.
    Also gives me a weird, ruggy feeling in the back of my mouth. Nice one.

    Also, isn't that the name of a chaplin film?

    . Rewarded 4


  • MissyMouse
    February 25
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    ;_; I <3 this poem, It makes me miss my old dog.
  • avendesora
    February 25

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    I am an absolute dog lover! so i absoluelty love this poem. it is so sweet, and yet the end is so said! After my last two dogs grew old and died together i have not been able to talk my parents into getting another. it is such a blessing to have a companion like that, but then that makes it even harder to let go when it is time to say good bye. great job. I love it!

  • lady8
    February 25

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    The flow of the poem was wonderful as you thrusted the reader unto a dogs life.A lover of both poems and animals you have done a wonderful job! Thank you for the enjoyable read.

    . Rewarded 4


  • simplefarmgirl
    February 25
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    Awesome!


  • RainbowGirl257
    February 25

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    wow, i was completely drawn to this poem in the featured poems list, since dogs are my favourite kind of animal. I think you've done an accurate poem on a dog's life. and it reminds me of my dog!

  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 12

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    I believe I do like the revised version better. Thought they are both good. You did well expanding it and keeping a good flow. It's also quite touching

  • a dozenglassroses
    February 12
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    Great poem about your pet

  • kira1115
    February 12
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    Great write. Reminds me of my dog, how we took her in and she became part of us, though she is still here, at school I miss her so.
  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    February 12

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    effective use of refrain "Sixteen years etc" although it may have become laboured after a while good view of the 'family life' from a dog's point of view [considering i watched the WESTMINISTER DOG SHOW last night - AND preferred the small beagle over the larger one who 'won' the hound group] nice useage of 'gambol' great ending stanza good rhymes good job thanks for sharing regards zaj

    . Rewarded 8

  • Clovis6790Curious silver member
    February 12
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    Superb

    A very fine write indeed. Most excellant as is.

  • Devils Reject
    February 12

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    I believe I may have commented on this before. If I did, my apologies for wasting your points. Great write
  • okjcop
    February 11
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    Thank you for sharing. Our pug was recently killed and you poem has left me with tears but also reminds me of the wonderful times we shared. Your lines at times seem a little strained to fit the style, but it has been very effective at opening my spigot.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Deceits Tears
    February 11

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    This was fantastic, i have a dog but not sure who owns who sometimes..i really related to this amazing write...thankyou for sharing, All the best

    . Rewarded 4


  • broncotwister
    February 11

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    Beautiful. I love dogs, have been around them since I was old enought to crawl. Their is no more unconditional love a man can experience than that of a dog. Bravo.

    . Rewarded 4


  • maralisa silver member
    February 11

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    a wonderful write about mans best friend the second staza is great i stood a faithful as born companion spinning out the years good luck and keep your pen flowing

    . Rewarded 4


  • Animarising
    February 11

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    Like the poem...hate dogs.

    Can't help thinking some of the fourth line meter/rhymes are a little weak or forced though. eg.
    "Sixteen years that gambolled life away/...etc.../make my last bow, - still in thrill dreams I play." This, in particular seems better expressed in the 1992 version.

    So it certainly feels a bit forced/ unwieldy, to me anyway. There are several others which could be easily ironed out and help the flow.

    On the other hand, as it's written from the dog's perspective...perhaps that how dogs talk!

  • galfalfa gold member
    February 11

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    Gotta love man's best friend, sadly there are those who treat them not as a member of the family but as stupid animals with no feelings...

    I dont understand this line " I vet as threat "

    Thanks for the enjoyable read,

    galfalfa


  • I have a dog, and although she's only a year old, I can definately see this piece pertaining to her already. Very good piece.

  • Demington
    February 7