- Last seen on Aug 25 2:58 AM. Member since July 18, 2003.
- I'm a citrine experience poet for 176 comments.
- My mood is , and quote is "there is perfection in failure".
- I am a 16 year old girl (United States)
- When I'm not writing, I'm a n amateur photographer.
- I have 176 comments, 2 contests, 20 poems, 1 story
My Poetry
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Dribble down the court
One, two, one, two -
Sleep well, my little darling
Rest your pale blue eyes -
Confined in my mind
Trapped in this heat13 lines, 1 comment, May 26, 2004. In Society, Contemporary -
Lying beneath my imaginary sky
Watching the clouds of pink fly by
My Stories
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792 lines, 8 comments, March 28, 2004. In <200 lines, Young adult
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-sweetbrother- on June 16, 2004Thanks for awarding my poem "Looking for Lucy" second place in your contest. It was a nice concept for a contest. And I was just kidding in my comment about the rules.
Peace-
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daliheldthehandofg0d on June 15, 2004Thanks for checking out one of my poems and taking the time to comment, muchly appreciated. I've read several of yours and I'm impressed. The only bit of advice I have to give you is to not be enslaved to rhyme. You tend to use rhyme in most of your work, and although you do it well and may be inclined towards it, I just want you to see that rhyme isn't essential to poetry and in cases is better without it. Some people rely on rhyme because everything else about their poetry is weak, but I know this isn't true in your case. You write thoughtfully, colorfully, and with purpose. That being said, it's all up to you, you have the skill to use rhyme, or not, to use form, or not. Just make sure that you're using the elements of the pen, and that they're not using you
Keep writing, you're off to a fabulous start. -
WindUpEnigma on February 27, 2004Wander aimlessly,
famelessly
through the drifting sands
of time...
Although obiously not fameless--everybody seems to love your work, and I can see why!
--the rhyme seemed to fit the name "lonely wanderer"...the words just popped into my head, and being extremely impulsive, I decided to post them. Great work on here, btw, I love it!
Freaky
