i have not loved the world, nor the world me,
but let us part fair foes; i do believe,
though i have found them not, that there may be
words which are things, hopes which will not deceive,
and virtues which are merciful, nor weave
snares for the failing. i would also deem
o'er others' griefs that some sincerely grieve;
that two, or one, are almost what they seem:
that goodness is no name, and happiness no dream.
--byron
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Puking Faerie Dust on June 21ahem...
first of all.
That robin person is a fucking douche, as you have most likely already figured out.
second.
WTF WHO IS THAT HOE IN YO PICTURE ARE YOU CHEATING ON ME?!?!?!?
*sLyTz MiI PoRcUlYnn RyStS* -
Immortal Obscurity on June 20Sooo... I notice you've changed your name yet again... & our little group misses you
Haha. Actually, I noticed the other person in your picture... is Christie in LOOOOOOVE? Huh? Huh?
Anyway, jsut thought I'd creep your page 'cos I'm s3w DeEp n 3m0
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montez : Dear Raoul, on June 15I've tried to "return the favour", but can't find anything to comment on, as I hate free verse with a passion - so much so, that I now refuse to read it.
I reckon that 99.9% of it wasn't worth writing ; and 90% could have been written by a 10 year old with only average intelligence.
I take your point about cliched rhyme (in your comment to me), but, much as I hate it myself, I prefer THAT to free or blank verse.
The worst form of your adopted "style" is the so-called contemporary free verse, where the author strings a load of non-connected words together (usually those you have to look up the meaning of); creating a bunch of essentially nonsensical words, with absolutely no meaning whatsoever!
"I just wrote down what came into my head," they will say. Critiquers will write things such as "awesome", "brilliant", "you are soooooooooooooooooooooo creative" "you're a genius" etc.
I want to vomit all over the computer screen, or send the world's greatest hitman round to their house to blow their ferkin heads off!
Try rhyme.
Good rhyme in rhythm is very difficult to achieve, but well worth the effort.
Read the old masters - the vast majority of whom wrote in rhyme.
Regards,
Robin.
PS Just as a matter of interest, not all trees are green - and their trunks are invariably not!
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Puking Faerie Dust on June 13*sees no surprise*
