Ok, I want you to tell me what your Utopian society would be like; I want to read about what Heaven on Earth would be to you.
There are many different names for the Utopian idealism: Atlantis, Arcadia, Brigadoon, Canaan, Eden, Elysium Fields, Empyrean, Erewhon, Heaven, Land Of Leal, Never-Never Land, Nirvana, Paradise, Shangri-La, Xanadu, Zion... Ok I could go on and on and on, literally. But, I think you get the point. I want you to tell me as poetically as possible as to what your Utopia is going to be like.
Rules (Yeah we all hate them, but they do have a purpose):
1. No vulgar language, that means that you can use curse words, but only in situations where it would be proper.
2. Try to make it story like, but still with a poetic take on it. Basically what I want is a very expressive poem, I want to be able to paint an exact picture of what you see; from your words.
3. I am not going to allow pre-writes, I know I know, "He's being mean by not letting me pull a poem out of my codex of poetry." I guess I'm just doing this to make sure you really think about your Utopia before you tell me what it is.
4. Use your vocabulary to it's fullest extent, even expand it if necessary, but only use words that work together and don't become monotonous (I tend to have that problem). Just force me to look words up in the dictionary, but don't make me read your poem out of the dictionary.
I guess that that's about all the rules.
As a few suggestions: Don't comment on my poetry; I always get a feeling that people are sucking up to me, question my comments; if you don't understand something I commented about or asked about; return the question with a question; but do it in a civil way, if you're going to give comments to others poem's leave real; nice; constructive; criticism, and; I like seeing that when a person receives some constructive criticism that they actually make an effort to edit their write to make it more understandable to the readers; if possible.
(Durn, writing this has caused my delicious Jasmin tea to get cold; ok I'm weird.)
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on January 25, 2005
- Rewards: Gold: 450
- Final notes: This wasn't an easy contest to judge, but in the end it had to come down to only a few, and these are what I chose.
1st Place:
The Garden of Dreams, by: DDsithstriker.
You really painted a picture of what your Utopia is like, I still have a picture of the beautiful place you described in my mind, and yopu used a wonderful vocabulary, just like I wanted.
2nd Place:
A child, by: Easy Assumption.
This was great, I had to read it quite a few times and each time I got a different feeling/meaning from it. I really like when poetry is able to do that. It also used wonderful vocabulary and it was more on the end of telling a story.
3rd Place:
...With Thoughts by My Side, by: Sinnerwounds.
Again, a wonderful use of vocabulary, it was a little but shorter than I would have preferred, I felt like it could have said a lot more, but still it said enough for my to get a good idea and visual of what your perfect place would be like.
Thank you every one for your wonderful entries in my contest, you all did a wonderful job.
Entries [8]
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A utopia is a place that is perfect to an individual or a group of people.For me,My utopia,Would be,A place that is simple.Not too cby The Chameleon 0 lines, 4 comments, on Jan 12 3:46 PM 2005. In Personal• Commented on by judge.
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My Arcadia is golden
T'is caressed in my loveby Romeos captive 42 lines, 2 comments, on Jan 13 2:35 AM 2005. In Other• Commented on by judge. -
The smell of my utopia
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by wohadreambig 28 lines, 1 comment, on Jan 16 12:53 PM 2005. In Society• Commented on by judge.
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Utopia is found in…
oneby Easy Assumption 64 lines, 3 comments, on Jan 21 9:51 PM 2005. In Spiritual, Society, Hope
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Run your fingers
Through my hair.........• Commented on by judge.
Bronze trophy winner
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Oh lovely idea for a contest - one can let your mind run free here. But oh boy, I've just written two poems about my Eden, my utopia...but I'll see if my muse loves me enough to write that poem about the Namib desert. Hope you get carried away to all the beautiful utopia's - take care!
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Thank you for the kinda comment, and yeah I'd kinda like to make it open to pre-write, but I just want the poet/s to spend some time actually visualizing the place and follow the other rules. I'm just trying to get people to take that extra step, like you said you had already written two about your Utopia, how about if you try to combine those two together, if it's possible, somtimes I can't. And Finally yes, so far I have been brought to some really beautiful places. Thank you
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You know, I look back at your comment and realise tht you are saying that the Nambi Desert is your Eden and you're pretty much living in your Utopia... I had to look up Namib Desert first, I'm pretty good at geography, but i guess not that good, hey I've learned something simply from your comment .
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So I could say "suck my rabid beaver's wood" just not to a child. Right?
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I suppose if that's what you wanted... all though be it very odd, I'm just curious I've read soem of your stuff, and some comments/arguments/conversations you have with people, and what I was wondering, do you just say things for the shock affect, to try and offend people? Or do you actually live like that? I would find it to be very odd, but if it is your lifestyle it is yours, and it is very unique. I for one hide from society because I, for myself think the world has gone straight to hell, but that is just my opinion. Well, I was just curious about those few things. And I do hope to see you post one of your very unique writes in my contest.
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I only wish I had time to enter this, It's a wonderful topic
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Great idea for a contest. I saw Brigadoon in theatre last year during my Thespian state competition. It was so surreal. I'd write, but I seem to be in a "writer's block." Have fun judging all the splendid entries.
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