I have written a column regarding haiku and senryu.... and also have kept an on going class. These two items are your reference material regarding this contest. Also, keep in mind that haiku and senryu are in the present.... a moment in time that is always the "now". They don't refer to the past or future. They are observations you've made and written in present tense.
You can write either a haiku or a senryu. Two max please! They can be 5,7,5 in syllables or less but NOT more. It's important to strive for a CRISP image and not allow it to be split or convoluted with too many ideas in it. I really would like to see these entries contain traditional subject matter and feel. Also, though there are three lines you should try to avoid a run on sentence.... one of the lines must break.... or contrast.
A twist is this: this will be an interactive contest....... you post your poem and I'll respond by saying "clear", "not clear" or "read my column, class"....... if I say it is not clear you can, if you want, edit it...... don't erase the original but add your clearer version underneath. You can do this until the cut off hour and then..... well, whatever we were able to do, we did. So, bottom line.... everyone has a chance to get feedback and then revise until they think they have a well honed poem. I will not give back too much detail.... only "clear", "not clear" or "read column, class" regarding image. I might IM you with an educational comment though.
I have several people waiting to see your entries, including myself that will determine if the image is crisp or not. Good quality imagery is needed....... and the senryu need humor/satire as well.
Please don't take it personal..... take it as a challenge.............. also, run-on three line sentences are not haiku, senryu. This is a bit difficult of a contest but the points are worth it. Good luck. IM me if any questions. NO PREWRITES!!! lol
Thanks,
Don
ps..... please don't write one in the last thirty minutes and expect me to have time to give you feedback......... I may be playing tennis. lol
Senryu example
in smacking the fly
I hit also
my nose
Haiku example...
mantis on a leaf
statuesque in prayer-
stillness
You can write either a haiku or a senryu. Two max please! They can be 5,7,5 in syllables or less but NOT more. It's important to strive for a CRISP image and not allow it to be split or convoluted with too many ideas in it. I really would like to see these entries contain traditional subject matter and feel. Also, though there are three lines you should try to avoid a run on sentence.... one of the lines must break.... or contrast.
A twist is this: this will be an interactive contest....... you post your poem and I'll respond by saying "clear", "not clear" or "read my column, class"....... if I say it is not clear you can, if you want, edit it...... don't erase the original but add your clearer version underneath. You can do this until the cut off hour and then..... well, whatever we were able to do, we did. So, bottom line.... everyone has a chance to get feedback and then revise until they think they have a well honed poem. I will not give back too much detail.... only "clear", "not clear" or "read column, class" regarding image. I might IM you with an educational comment though.
I have several people waiting to see your entries, including myself that will determine if the image is crisp or not. Good quality imagery is needed....... and the senryu need humor/satire as well.
Please don't take it personal..... take it as a challenge.............. also, run-on three line sentences are not haiku, senryu. This is a bit difficult of a contest but the points are worth it. Good luck. IM me if any questions. NO PREWRITES!!! lol
Thanks,
Don
ps..... please don't write one in the last thirty minutes and expect me to have time to give you feedback......... I may be playing tennis. lol
Senryu example
in smacking the fly
I hit also
my nose
Haiku example...
mantis on a leaf
statuesque in prayer-
stillness
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on December 17, 2003
- Rewards: Gold: 750
- Final notes: This was the toughest and greatest contest...... unbelievable the way all the contestants participated. Wonderful talent! Very difficult to judge. Thanks to you all...... each entry was truly excellent. 2nd place will be sent 200 points, 3rd 100 points....and then the following: 4th, new moon by beatnique 50pts; 5th hidden in the mist, by hide 50 pts.; 6th strolling by grundle 50 pts; 7th rain by brida 50 pts; summer moon by myron, 25 pts; reflections by sherry 25 pts, peaceful hunter by forgotten treasures 25 pts; greed by bertie 25pts; splash by sprite 25 pts; and last drop by cookie zeal 25 pts. Well, that's the line up folks. Again, this was really impossible to judge as so many entries were absolutely excellent. If I had more points I would give everyone a bunch. Thanks so much...... now I get to sleep!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! much love to you all..... Don (ps... 2nd and on points will be sent from me to you personally through point gift program)
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Our last glow of love
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How can we stop wars
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Alone in the dark
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cherry blossoms fall
a pink blizzard of fragrance• Commented on by judge. -
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time whistle blows steam
hands of starlings sweep throughby Jacob Jesus Escape 13 lines, 4 comments, on Dec 11 4:15 PM 2003. In Other• Commented on by judge. -
by Jacob Jesus Escape 6 lines, 3 comments, on Dec 11 4:26 PM 2003. In Nature• Commented on by judge.
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Seeking critque...I have removed this from the contest.by Arepetianz 3 lines, 14 comments, on Dec 11 5:16 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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Christmas quandary
presenting presents not boughtby oneslowtyper 6 lines, 5 comments, on Dec 11 6:25 PM 2003. In Humor• Commented on by judge. -
Winters icy grip
hibernation rules the landby oneslowtyper 7 lines, 4 comments, on Dec 11 6:49 PM 2003. In Nature• Commented on by judge. -
Lost, cold, alone
looking around, finding love,by Stace the Mace 3 lines, 3 comments, on Dec 11 7:33 PM 2003. In Love• Commented on by judge. -
by forgottentreasure 2 lines, 2 comments, on Dec 11 9:34 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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First snow has fallen,
Much beauty in this whitenessby Michael Dennis Rivers 9 lines, 7 comments, on Dec 11 10:28 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
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by Arepetianz 6 lines, 9 comments, on Dec 12 2:38 AM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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she dances alone
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View of a butterfly.• Commented on by judge.
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Ok this should match the contest• Commented on by judge.
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Sparrow drops alone
Beneath clouds that never fall;by stratavari 3 lines, 8 comments, on Dec 12 7:16 PM 2003. In Nature• Commented on by judge. -
by dragonstuff83 2 lines, 11 comments, on Dec 12 8:09 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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I stand in the door.
Listen, the clock is ticking.by Michael Dennis Rivers 3 lines, 2 comments, on Dec 12 11:06 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
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by forgottentreasure 8 lines, 7 comments, on Dec 13 9:55 AM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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by philophant 3 lines, 7 comments, on Dec 13 10:43 AM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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Honey,I love you!
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I gaze at the stars
i wonder what is beyondby strawberrylover 3 lines, 1 comment, on Dec 13 6:52 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
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i believe in Faes
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Poetry does leave
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Freshly Fallen Snow
Cascades into our valley.by CatchAFire 11 lines, 2 comments, on Dec 14 12:55 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
rolls of dough capturetreasures bury anchored weightblack pearlsby Honesty Abounds 8 lines, 11 comments, on Dec 14 2:51 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
Senyru
The brown bear stood up• Commented on by judge. -
by hugh wyles 6 lines, 6 comments, on Dec 14 4:08 PM 2003. In Nature• Commented on by judge.
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morning swim
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Redemption washing me down
Confessions gatheredby Razors-Edge 6 lines, 2 comments, on Dec 14 10:52 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
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a snowflake
drips down my faceby theroyaloui 2 lines, 1 comment, on Dec 15 5:39 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
fingernails
gently itch my backby theroyaloui 2 lines, 1 comment, on Dec 15 5:43 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
coffee grounds are spilling
toes squish in dark juiceby CookieZeal 3 lines, 4 comments, on Dec 15 6:17 PM 2003. In Humor• Commented on by judge. -
orange ball melts in
mirrored liquid poolsby CookieZeal 2 lines, 4 comments, on Dec 15 6:27 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
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Humiliation, corrosive heart
summer's night skyby Tudor Rose 2 lines, 2 comments, on Dec 15 7:51 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
by AngelEyes323 3 lines, 5 comments, on Dec 15 8:32 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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Light shimmering
across a wall of distant starsby Tudor Rose 5 lines, 5 comments, on Dec 15 8:56 PM 2003. In Haiku• Commented on by judge. -
Winter is so cold
Warmth of fire is soothingby space blanket 5 lines, 1 comment, on Dec 15 9:23 PM 2003. In Love• Commented on by judge. -
Many a pretty poem I have written
with flowery words and explanations• Commented on by judge.
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I'll enter this for sure for sure hehe LOL!
Anyways. Hope you g et tons of entries.
Love
Mal -
would you mind explaining the senryu...? i've never heard of it before.
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I tried to write in both of these styles, and they turned out like crap...if I could I would enter, but alas my writing ablities bound me.
Good luck in judging!
~~Jenn -
I'm looking forward to this I love haiku/senryu and am hoping to improve my understanding of it.
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I will enter if I can!
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Wow Don! You ahve many entries to your contest! Good Luck to all that enter, if I can think of a Haiku, I'll be back to enter
---Sara
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Monk you have so many entries sweetie I don't stand a chance..... I know that....Although if there are any in my collections you like me to enter I will....But looks like you have enough already to judge.....Hugs,Sherry
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Enter away...... hello..... tap, tap, tap.... I'm waiting. lol
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Monk Im hiding and hope you will like em
I did two because I didn't know which one sounded best either could work ?But I thought I let you decide how many times can we try this ? Hehe
Hugs,Sherry
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Monk I have done five and all them you may like but only one you can pick so have fun.......also did one by itself on a rainbow.
Edited on Dec 14, 9:49 p.m. because ''. -
Night Owl Monk
Monk was up late-
in early morning hours,
Sleep walking for chips
LOL sorry buddy just goofing off...wanted make you smile
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This looks like a great challenge. I admit that I've never really had as much respect for Haikus as I have for other types of poetry--but the first poem i ever wrote I remember was in class; probably grade one, and it was a haiku. I have browsed through the entries of others, and I think I'm beginning to change my mind about what I think of Haikus. Poetry doesn't have to only be about unrestrained expression. I ask myself: is life really just one big opportunity to goof off, be and say whatever we feel like? No, that's not how the world works. And although poetry can be a great escape from reality at times, should it not also enlighten and reflect reality at others. It is a powerful tool of commincation, but it is also a great means of understanding. And so perhaps I've found what value in a Haiku means to me. Where before I despised the constraint, I welcome the challenge. So if something comes to me, I'll give it a try. Thanks for enlightening me ;-),
Michael
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silly senryu:happy haiku
jeeeez...... just noticed how many entries there are ....and mine is at the bottom of the pile, by the time you get to mine you're gonna be knackered and probably wont read them.
p.s. I put both entries together to try and save you a wee bit of time when it comes to reading....
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wooooohoooo!! The contest is almost at an end!!!! good luck, all!! and thanks, Mr. Monk, for putting us all through this!
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Dear haikumonk~
I appreciate you as a fellow poet and thanks for a contest that is your forte. Maybe my haiku was too complex, but many people understood the underlying meaning. So, even though I won't win, based on my complex thinking...Thanks for the chance to feature my complexity to those that find it refreshing. Have fun judging! There are lots to choose from.
Always an
^j^Honesty
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O.O Wow that's a lot of entries. I saw quite a few great ones myself. Good luck with the judging haikumonk, you got your work cut out for ya
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I understand that last line in mine was a bit different than what you were looking for, and that's ok. I can't seem to write traditional haiku very well, but as you've stated I have a grasp on the contemporary. I just couldn't change the line; it spoke to me. You know how it is. Anyhows, good luck with everything and thanks for the compliments. Means a lot coming from the haikusan.
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This contest was great. It really opened up all those road blocks in my head and has freed my creativity once again. I am greatly looking forward to writing many more of these wonderful bits of life called Haiku. They awaken my mind to the little things in life and help to "put me in the moment" (which is a great place to be!). Thanks again.....
Dragon -
This was one of the best haiku contest in this site, you should do it again
and I miss you
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