Be inspired by the following:
I leave the gas on
walk the alleys in the dark
sleep with candles burning
I leave the door unlocked
I'm weaving a rope and
running all the red lights
Did I get your attention?
Cause I'm sending all the signs
that the clock is ticking
and I'll be giving my two weeks
Pick your favorite shade of black
you'd best prepare a speech
say something funny
say something sweet
but don't say that you loved me
I'm still breathing
but we've been dead for a while
this sickness has no cure
we're going down for sure
already lost a grip
best abandon ship
Maybe I was too pale
Maybe I was too fat
Maybe you had better
better luck in the sack
no formal education
I swore way too much
but I swear you didn't care
because we were in love
so as I write this letter
and shed my last tear
it's all for the better
that we end this here
let's close this chapter
say one last prayer
but don't say
that you loved me
I'm still breathing
though we've been dead for awhile
this sickness has no cure
we're going down for sure
already lost a grip
best abandon ship
Oh...
Katy Perry - "I'm Still Breathing" Lyrics
Listen to song here:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7FIpUnVWfJA&feature=related
or on my author page, on my playlist (should be close to the bottom of the list, close to #100).
No rules.
No prewrites.
Have fun.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on November 13
- Rewards: Gold: 400, Silver: 200, Bronze: 100, Honorable mention: 2 people
- Final notes: I have re-read and re-ordered these finalists so many times that I lost track of time.
All five of the finalist writes were so brilliant, it was extremely hard to decide who deserved to be ahead of the others.
I finally settled on this order - though I must admit I wanted everyone to get gold!
Contest Winners
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When her voice rises on the minor-
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There she was at the fair with the guy she left me for
There was a long moment of silenceby Swan song 62 lines, 1 comment, on Nov 7 4:45 AM. In Life, Personal, Contemporary
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Gold trophy winner
Silver trophy winner
Bronze trophy winner
Entries [13]
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I walk along side you
as you laugh and chat to meby kirstyanne1 58 lines, 4 comments, on Oct 27 3:58 AM• Commented on by judge. -
I recall again
that morning,by Michael Pastore 17 lines, 4 comments, on Oct 27 7:00 AM• Commented on by judge. -
What are you going to do now?
Now that all has gone,by G-y-p-o 35 lines, 5 comments, on Oct 27 12:04 PM• Commented on by judge. -
I zoomed away
Trying to fix my mistakeby xXemohannahXx 34 lines, 4 comments, on Oct 27 4:01 PM• Commented on by judge. -
by Poetic-Theorem 54 lines, 6 comments, on Oct 31 4:00 PM. In Thoughts, Other, Lyrics Inspired, Contest, Noguest
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every time i hear your name
it sends a sting through my bonesby carospellman 25 lines, 5 comments, on Nov 4 2:19 PM. In Love• Commented on by judge. -
The morning rays creep in between the eyelids
Vivid dreams still tugging at the subconsciousby Delrondu 24 lines, 2 comments, on Nov 9 2:14 AM• Commented on by judge.
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i havent found too many poets trying to tackle the lyrical route on this so many applause to you. i loved the line "pick your favorite shade of black," it really resonated with me. i hope u dont mind if i add u to my favs.
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of course I don't mind!
Please enter the contest!
I love music, so I often host contests inspired by lyrics.
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This is NOT a snide comment - it is a genuine enquiry, as I try to keep abreast of US orthograaphy.
"Allies" in line 2 must, it seems to me - be the plural of "alley", which in the UK we would write as "alleys", For us, "allies" is the plural of "ally" - someone who fights (whether physically or metaphorically) on one's side.
The UK rules is that words ending in -ey add an s in the plural, whereas for words ending in -y directly after a consonant, the y is replaced by -ies in the plural.
My immediate reaction to the spelling "allies" made me think this was one of those errors generated by spell-checking soft-ware which if it does not have a word in its limited memory substitutes the nearest equivalent - since it cannot take context into account.
However, I then recalled that I have seen a couple of times in texts either produced in the USA or by people who have learned their English in US-sponsored schools the form "stories" used as the plural of "storey" (i.e."floor" of a building). I assumed that these were also spell-checking errors... but now
I am wondering if the general rule for the plurals of -ey nouns is different in the USA.
Unfortunately, owing to illness, I cannot at present get to a library to check this in the complete OED... which is very sound on US usage.
So please could you elucidate?
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LOL. I didn't take it as snide at all. It's actually a great point that I somehow (dummy me) completely missed. It should be "alleys", yes. I copied and pasted the lyrics from a lyric-posting web site. They had several errors and I did correct most of them, but completely skimmed over that.
I am pretty sure it should be "alleys" and yes, it should be "storeys", but we tend to spell that incorrectly here in the Southern US - as "story" (like a tale instead of the floor of a building) and "stories"... but typically we just say "that building has 28 floors" instead of "that building has 28 storeys."
I will change it, thank you. I hate it when I have spelling errors in my postings, so I appreciate someone pointing it out.
I think I also tend to skim past anything spelled "Allie" because that's my name
UK and US are similar in many ways, but different in many as well. I think it'd be interesting to explore the differences further.
My cousin married a Kiwi (a girl from New Zealand whom I adore). Her father and I had a blast at their rehearsal dinner going on and on about things that we say differently - such as their "chili box" to our "refrigerator", their "ute" to our "SUV" or "truck", their "crack a u-ey" for our "make a u-turn". It was great fun.
Thanks again for pointing that out to me!
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Nothing really to do with your contest but your user name caught my eye, I wrote a poem called "Auburn Mornings" and as soon as I saw your name I remembered it.
scattered smears
crash to shoulders
of autumn flared girl
saffron halo like
fallen leaves
waiting
for a rake
to bring order
auburn
sunrises
are so breathtaking.
Take care.
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Thank you for sharing that. It's a lovely poem.
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thank you .. good luck with your contest
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FYI I LOVE this song. I plan on entering the contest later, but now i'm on my break from work...
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you HAVE to enter!!! Can't wait to see what you come up with!
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I am absolutely in love with this song. But no one knows this one by Katy Perry, they just know stuff like Hot N' Cold and Waking Up in Vegas and just assume that all of her other stuff is like that. This is a truly amazing song and I'm glad to see that someone else knows of its existence and really likes it
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Thank you. I do hope you enter... and yes, I'd say that "I'm Still Breathing" is by far Katy's best song. Though I really like "Ur So Gay" because it's just freaking hilarious.
My husband loves "Hot N' Cold" - he says it's the story of his life with me (because I'm bipolar). I just have to laugh it.
What other bands/songs do you like?
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thank you ever so much for the
honor of bronze & for hosting
such an inspirational contest
congrats to all winners!
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Congratulations and thank you!
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thanks for the hm and awesome contest !!!!!
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