I AM EXTENDING THE CONTEST, AS I THINK THERE ARE FAR TOO MANY POINTS INVOLVED FOR SUCH A FEW ENTRIES. I've also decided to allow 3 entries per person.
I am co-hosting a contest for villanelles with Jeff Green (aka cricketjeff), and the prompt is a poem by cricketjeff called the "The Tridents of the Tritons", found here:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4445387
We are looking for villanelles which either reply to his poem or are written as a takeoff on his poem. This is a villanelle, so you can see how they are written:
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/2906-Dylan-Thomas-Do-Not-Go-Gentle-Into-That-Good-Night
The usual rules apply, including nothing religious unless it specifically pertains to the contest, no profanity, no bashing of any sort. (I don't know how those things would be worked into a contest like this, but ... just in case.) Obviously, rhyme only.
Grammar, spelling and punctuation important. Punctuation is optional since cricketjeff often doesn't use it, but I do, so if you do use it, use it correctly. Believe me, I will know.
Good luck to all, and happy writing.
I am co-hosting a contest for villanelles with Jeff Green (aka cricketjeff), and the prompt is a poem by cricketjeff called the "The Tridents of the Tritons", found here:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4445387
We are looking for villanelles which either reply to his poem or are written as a takeoff on his poem. This is a villanelle, so you can see how they are written:
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/2906-Dylan-Thomas-Do-Not-Go-Gentle-Into-That-Good-Night
The usual rules apply, including nothing religious unless it specifically pertains to the contest, no profanity, no bashing of any sort. (I don't know how those things would be worked into a contest like this, but ... just in case.) Obviously, rhyme only.
Grammar, spelling and punctuation important. Punctuation is optional since cricketjeff often doesn't use it, but I do, so if you do use it, use it correctly. Believe me, I will know.
Good luck to all, and happy writing.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on September 6
- Rewards: Gold: 4000, Silver: 1500, Bronze: 500, Honorable mention: 2 people
- Final notes: As I've not been feeling well for some time, I left the final ordering of the winners here to Jeff, so these are his choices, in the main. The Gold was my suggestion, but the rest are his.
I've rarely had a contest where there was so much confusion about the contest theme itself. At least half a dozen poems were entered and then removed because they were off-theme, There were various errors of various kinds, in nearly every poem. Jeff's view on that adheres closely to mine. He said:
"The top two as I have re-ordered them, while neither is problem free are imo the best Villanelles while having good content and sticking to the theme. I have put the next three or four in approximate order but would not argue strongly for any of them. They each have such glaring faults, of content, English, or poetry as to make scoring them against each other very hard."
Considering the large number of points we put up for this contest, it is a real disappointment. I suspect I won't be having many more contests for some time to come.
In any case, good luck with your writing in the future and thanks to those who entered.
Contest Winners
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The Tritons and the swordfish now swim as one.
Their wake is stained with blood and fear.by Keith E. Gerber 54 lines, 7 comments, on Aug 11 2:59 PM. In Contest, Fantasy, Contemporary, Other, Personal
Honorable mention
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When Aphrodite left her marriage bed
To play with Ares, all the Earth did shake,by masterblaster 43 lines, 3 comments, on Aug 18 1:36 AM• Commented on by judge. [remove] -
Moonlight skips across silver sheen
Their tridents long and lean
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Silver trophy winner
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The water beasts with serpent heads were long
His twisted conch was called to raise the seaby SteveS 27 lines, 9 comments, on Jul 31 2:51 AM• Commented on by judge. -
On crescent moons sit all dreams
My firelight fades into dark streams
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The tritons never show a hint of fear
On guard in case the Kraken should awakeby cricketjeff 26 lines, 9 comments, on Aug 9 7:13 AM• Commented on by judge.
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Have never written a Villanelle so thought I'd try, but I read Jeff's great piece and it seems to be way different from the instructions given on how to write a Villanelle. Maybe his is a variation of the form. An explanation would help immensely.
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His is not a villanelle ...
we are just asking for a poem replying to his poem, or a take off on his poem, which IS a villanelle. For an example of a villanelle, read Dylan Thomas's poem, "Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night", which IS a villanelle.
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/2906-Dylan-Thomas-Do-Not-Go-Gentle-Into-That-Good-Night -
The verse I wrote was not a villanelle
But just a fantasy of which I'm fond
A foolish tale that someone had to tell
The contest bids you weave another spell
Of creatures from tha massive salty pond
The verse I wrote was not a villanelle
Send tritons to assault the gates of hell
And tell us how the residents respond
A foolish tale that someone had to tell
Or let us know of how King Neptune fell
Of how his forces had been badly conned
The verse I wrote was not a villanelle
The swordfish may have heard the final bell
You'd tell us how they fell beneath the wand
A foolish tale that someone had to tell
I'm pretty sure that you could do it well
Your poetry can reach so far beyond
The verse I wrote was not a villanelle
It holds a tale that I was pleased to tell
That's a villanelle, if not a good one!
The lines should all be in the same meter and some people like to vary the repeating lines slightly, but never the repeating rhymes, hope that helps
Jeff
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Oh. That's a shame! Still, this form is good enough, too! If only I'd read this before getting so pleased that the poem of yours I just read was a villanelle
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wow two heavywieghts hosting a contest together...good luck!
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I'm only about 50 pounds overweight ...
but you don't have to rub it in.
Thanks for the compliment though.
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I sent the link for this contest to several groups in which I participate. I hope there will be more entries!
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I hope so too ...
thanks.
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Hi, many thanks for the gold and the silver,Di
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