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Contest is Over

• Contest was judged on July 28
• Rewards: Gold: 400, Silver: 200, Bronze: 100, Honorable mention: 5 people
• Final notes:
  well i am finally done with all 113 eateries, i apologize if i was not as critical as i could have been with some of you but i tried my best. thank you all for entering and congrats the winners it was very well deserved

Contest Winners

1. ten mile beautiful

   by ladybug. 43 lines, 10 comments, on Jul 6 3:33 PM
   Gold trophy winner

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2. you know me like rocket science.

   Being young doesn't hurt as much as it should.
   

   by xxRainbowDawnxx 28 lines, 4 comments, on Jun 27 1:00 AM
   Silver trophy winner

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3. what if cancer had a conscience?

   by lowercase prelude 24 lines, 21 comments, on Jul 11 2:23 AM. In Contest, Life, Pain, Sad, Other, Prose
   Bronze trophy winner

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4. tabernacle.

   god, who the hell do you think you are trying to force me into worship into stained-glass rooms with closed doors where I cannot breathe fo

   by etoile 29 lines, 18 comments, on Jul 10 4:57 PM. In noguest, prose~, letters~, deities~
   Honorable mention

   • Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove]
5. Error: Unable to find finalist item 5524175, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
6. Sunburned

   Summer brought us to life
   and as it started to fade
   so did you...

   by Nakatrea 84 lines, 16 comments, on Jul 14 3:07 PM
   Honorable mention

   • Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove]
7. How many times?

   How many times will it take to get it right?
   Why do you always have to put up a fight?

   by Blue-Rose Beauty 70 lines, 119 comments, on May 28 4:15 PM
   Honorable mention

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Entries [70]

• unneeded truth, we know all the lies.

  With every sigh he gives, and says "I LOVE YOU".
  she thinks with all his sighs he knows all of his lies,

  by Vampirette1901 31 lines, 2 comments, on Jul 17 11:10 AM. In Life, Love, Pain, Sad, Thoughts, Dark

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• the shadow kiss, unbreakable love.

  With every kiss you blow me
  you blow me away.

  by Vampirette1901 24 lines, 6 comments, on Jul 15 5:59 PM. In Life, Love, Thoughts, Personal

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• little gurl (dirty little dancer)

  she used to see herself in you,
  that is why she fell unglued.

  by Vampirette1901 42 lines, 9 comments, on Jul 9 2:10 AM. In Society, Thoughts

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• perspective of a glass eye

  perspective of a glass eye

  by Broken Thoughts 30 lines, 2 comments, on Jul 13 10:16 PM

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• Bear Hug-Eulogy

  I long for a time, a time well never have, to know each other
  Even after you left, you still came, came to help me carry on

  by Acidbath 25 lines, 3 comments, on Jul 14 8:15 PM. In Hope, Life, Pain, Personal, Sad, Spiritual, Thoughts

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• dirty hands

  by lowercase prelude 7 lines, 15 comments, on Jun 23 2:30 PM. In Life, Pain, Dark, Abuse, Other

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• shallow

  by lowercase prelude 8 lines, 11 comments, on May 24 9:44 PM. In Contest, Life, Love, Pain, Dark, Other, Prose

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• This colorless world

  colour the world that the people blacked out
  they dindn't understand it's beauty intill it was gone

  by orangepeeling 15 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 17 9:55 AM. In Sad, Nature, Contest, Life, Humanity

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• Wisdom

  She is the all-knowing judge,
  Of artful skills to be had.

  by Beautiful Liar 14 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 16 3:44 PM. In Hope, Life, Love, Wisdom, Thoughts, Personal, Happiness

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• Dance Under The Stars

  It's late. Dark but not to
  dark you can't see anything.

  by Englandgirl2008 22 lines, 4 comments, on Jun 5 11:45 AM. In Love, Life, Hope

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• Here we go, is that Heaven or Hell?

  I sit in bed and try to call
  As your message taunts my every try.

  by Ellek 63 lines, 11 comments, on Jul 16 2:20 AM. In Dark, Life, Love, Sad, Thoughts

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• Here's the ring, Meet you there!

  Come again to a place where we were.
  I come to stand at the place that you are.

  by Ellek 76 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 12 11:21 PM. In Dark, Love, Pain, Sad

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• "Your move," Life says

  Now I see I'm running away.
  Will I really keep true on that promise

  by Ellek 39 lines, 4 comments, on Jul 10 12:39 PM. In Life, Love, Personal, Thoughts

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• Native American Woman

  We are like a whisper carried on the wind
  we will tell you stories of our lives and ways

  by spiritraven 18 lines, 8 comments, on Jul 17 12:52 PM. In Life, Love, Personal, Thoughts, Spiritual

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• Puppet

  by Frankenchrist 30 lines, 3 comments, on Jun 8 1:46 AM. In Dark, Life, Pain, Personal, Spiritual, Thoughts

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• Would You?

  Your love on is so strong.

  by Borntowriteforever 24 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 16 10:23 PM

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• He Became My Muse

  by Indigovirgogreen16 28 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 17 12:51 PM. In Adult, Erotica, Thoughts, Love, Contest

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• Lost In Translation

  Lost In translation...........It may have been the transmission........
  

  by Indigovirgogreen16 39 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 17 1:00 PM. In Love, Life, Dedication, My own style, Lost in thought

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• Construction paper worlds, robotic routines

  old drawing left laying on dusty floors:
  abandoned childhood memories,

  by Nakatrea 58 lines, 14 comments, on Jun 25 1:14 PM

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• "Check the Dictionary," He Said

  by ahenne3 26 lines, 9 comments, on Jul 8 8:12 PM

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• (There Are No Winners Here.)

  We chose to supplement daggers with cyanide pills, roses with a fragrance made of sweet tears and ironic blood spill. This was a war like no other, Baby, and we wanted to make sure that it went down in history. With bruises a

  by Livingemptyspaces 8 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 15 4:43 PM

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• Answers

  Nightime dreams caught in a softened web.
  The beetles writhe within lost nightmares.

  by Frankenchrist 22 lines, 2 comments, on Sep 27 3:09 AM 2008

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• Find My Soul

  For it's my wish to live at peace
  but my emotions must release

  by AngieLynne 20 lines, 17 comments, on Jul 13 10:58 AM. In Life, Hope, Personal, Spiritual, Thoughts

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• Destinies Last Match

  Ink splatters the histories coalesced
  Among the stars.

  by Shyarn 29 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 17 1:30 PM. In weird, metaphor, nature

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• Heart-Shaped Tears & Smiles.

  by Bleed the truth X 56 lines, 2 comments, on Jul 15 11:08 AM. In My own style, Friendship

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• Stained Photographs

  I lose my wit every couple of days
  it lives on a very short lifespan

  by Bleed the truth X 40 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 17 1:23 PM. In Life, Sad, Family

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• Dream in Colour

  I need time for the words to write themselves into a poem for me

  by Nakatrea 29 lines, 6 comments, on Feb 1 5:34 PM

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• skeptisizm

  is this real
  are you here

  by xochocoholicxo 47 lines, 4 comments, on Jul 4 12:12 AM

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• Standing At The Door

  I stand in front of a door,
  Wondering what will happen if it opens.

  by Deutschschreiber 33 lines, 3 comments, on Jul 9 10:52 PM

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• Wrong.

  I'm going to do it again.
  For it is not wrong.

  by Horrific Hollis 38 lines, 7 comments, on Jul 10 3:55 PM

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• There's A Dagger.

  There's a dagger
  in my chest...

  by Horrific Hollis 19 lines, 3 comments, on Jun 15 12:22 PM

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• What Happens?

  What happens,
  when your "habbit"

  by Horrific Hollis 47 lines, 5 comments, on Jun 2 2:25 PM

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• Struggle

  Leaves fall ash grey from concrete trees,
  and I am here again,

  by rebel lips 57 lines, 5 comments, on Jun 25 12:16 PM

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• limitless blue

  by rebel lips 48 lines, 3 comments, on Jul 14 10:18 PM

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• Nothing More Hellish

  Cheerfulness is a cruel religion.

  by ourgirlFriday 44 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 14 10:43 PM. In Pain, Angst, Sad, Thoughts

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• Ice and Dark

  by Kira65 22 lines, 42 comments, on May 6 8:59 PM. In Dark

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• Mafia Princess

  You fell in love with me ....
  

  by fairy princess k 50 lines, 7 comments, on Jun 18 6:55 AM. In Fantasy, mafia, Society, Thoughts, Life, Love, Inspirational, Personal., Background

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• Broken Hearted Soul

  by Kira65 15 lines, 50 comments, on Jun 6 5:48 PM. In Life, Dark, Personal, Pain, Sad, Thoughts, Abuse, Adult

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• Twelve Angry Men

  by liltandrhyme 27 lines, 36 comments, on Aug 3 5:29 PM 2007. In Spiritual, Historic/Fiction

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• Feeling Blue

  The color blue has caused me Trepidation,
  puncturing the infrastructure of my sanity,

  by WuzGood 36 lines, 33 comments, on Jul 6 5:17 AM. In Contest, Crazy, Thoughts, noguest

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• Never-Ending Conversation

  I'm an old man now,
  I'm very fortunate to have made it to 66.

  by WuzGood 27 lines, 32 comments, on Jul 6 2:12 PM. In Contest, Thoughts, Freewrite, noguest

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• Not Moi

  Was it enough for you
  that I went beyond

  by 2lullabyhaven 14 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 17 3:42 PM. In Contest, Love

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• Caginess

  Trapped within subtle self containers overly constructed to incompacitate / Agility's mental manueverings mainly wanders / Indecent arresti

  by 2lullabyhaven 14 lines, 13 comments, on Jun 14 4:25 PM 2007. In Contest, Inspirational, Personal, Hope, Freewrite

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• Contemporaneous Destiny

  We both were in a hurry as folks sometimes tend to be

  by 2lullabyhaven 23 lines, 11 comments, on Oct 12 4:15 PM 2007. In Contest, Humor, Life, Love, Society

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• Where have all The Seagulls Gone?

  (it helps to know that our mascot is the seagull)
  

  by The cliche typo 32 lines, 39 comments, on Jun 11 8:01 PM

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• Dying within

  by Ami 23 lines, 11 comments, on Jul 14 4:23 PM. In Lyrics, Personal, Life, Thoughts, Self

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• Thirteen

  by Ami 41 lines, 11 comments, on Jun 29 8:08 PM. In Lyrics, Personal, Sad, Pain, My life, Thoughts, Lost love, Love, Self

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• Trinity of Sonnets to Pisces

  At one time you were a fly without wings
  No pushed or bent envelopes to be found

  by Virulent Malice 55 lines, 1 comment, on Jan 1 12:27 PM 2007. In Hope, Personal, Nature, Dark

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• lipless adjectives.

  You are mangos -
  Sweet and moist against my lips,

  by xxRainbowDawnxx 17 lines, 7 comments, on Jun 22 9:44 PM

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• the Reasons Why

  She works the streets. With her feelings paralyzed. Showing them what’s for sale as they drive on by.
  

  by Dark passenger 23 lines, 6 comments, on Jul 15 2:59 PM. In Love, Life, Sad, Pain, Dark, Hope, Society, Death, Depressed, Anger, Hate, War, Sex

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• My Task

  Alone I crept through the quite halls
  Ignoring the stares of the pictures on the walls

  by DarkAngel4689 96 lines, 3 comments, on Jul 17 9:48 PM. In Abuse, Angst, Pain, Sad, Other

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• Tell me a story

  Tell me a story Dazzle me with your eyes Capture me with your words Rile me in with your lies Tell me of a world of beauty Sing me a perfec

  by DarkAngel4689 30 lines, 2 comments, on Jun 16 11:57 PM. In Angst, Hope, War

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• Upon the paper

  Her hands grip me tightly
  As she moves me around the paper

  by DarkAngel4689 23 lines, 8 comments, on Apr 17 11:10 PM. In Hope, Weird, Longing

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• Brush Harbor Revival

  Brush Harbor Revival
  

  by Wickedruby1 162 lines, 1 comment, on Jun 1 12:58 AM. In Personal

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• 3A Friday

  There was something in me
  wanting to control me

  by aldebaran 31 lines, 8 comments, on Mar 16 2:10 AM 2006. In Personal

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• Tribute to pink

  by aldebaran 22 lines, 3 comments, on Feb 14 2:53 AM. In Adult, Nature, Pain, Personal, Society, Sad, Thoughts, Humor, Life, Love

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• Take it all away

  It’s beneath my skin, in my every cell.
  I am addicted and I seek for it everyday, desperately, painfully.

  by aldebaran 25 lines, 2 comments, on Jun 15 1:26 AM. In Life, Thoughts, Personal

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• The Truth Hurts

  left so completely hollow, I ask you to fill me
  with the yet unbroken promise, I sustain myself

  by Acidbath 36 lines, 8 comments, on Apr 25 1:58 PM

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• One Thing

  I've been conditioned to hurt for you
  

  by Acidbath 29 lines, 2 comments, on Apr 27 6:10 PM

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• dieciséis errores

  by heavenbird 125 lines, 11 comments, on Jul 10 6:30 PM

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• you are my atonement

  by heavenbird 70 lines, 31 comments, on Jul 2 2:37 AM

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• in vivo

  You might say,
  We were conceived at the same time.

  by momentarylapse 48 lines, 52 comments, on May 26 9:51 AM 2005. In Other

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• Cracks will remain

  I always thought I could read you like a book
  now I seem to be lost in the new edition

  by Enrinye 34 lines, 22 comments, on Jul 14 3:22 PM. In Pain, Thoughts, Life, Friendship

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• Seasons of deception

  I. Lost all faith
  

  by Enrinye 63 lines, 13 comments, on Jul 19 7:37 AM. In Life, Pain, Sad

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  transcendental baby
  July 17
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  I think I would feel more confident in your critical abilities if you had at least tried to make your explanatory paragraph grammatically correct. Just a bug in your ear to remind you that good writing starts with good mechanics ... and good literary criticism needs more than opinion to be useful. Not intended to be insulting ... just practical
• 
  lowercase prelude
  July 29
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  Thanks for the bronze

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