prewrites allowed.
my step dad recently went away to china with work,
he came back and had packed his things before i even got home from school, he's been my dad for 8 years and didnt even say goodbye.
anything similar ever happen to you?
been abandoned by a lover, a father, any family member?
i want pure emotion and passion, whether its hatred or resentment.
i want to feel your pain.
I wouldnt call these rules, more like suggestions.. but if you dont follow, you are less likely to win.
- hint - i love rhyme.
- prewrites allowed, new poems prefered.
- please nothing to long, if it is long, dont bore me.
- if you need anything else, like a prompt, just let me know.
however the one rule i would like to add is,
if you cant take constructive criticism, do not enter, if you complain then i will DQ as i am only giving you my opinion and trying to help.
i dont have many points, i hope they will go up, if not, sorry.
have fun, good luck
alex x
my step dad recently went away to china with work,
he came back and had packed his things before i even got home from school, he's been my dad for 8 years and didnt even say goodbye.
anything similar ever happen to you?
been abandoned by a lover, a father, any family member?
i want pure emotion and passion, whether its hatred or resentment.
i want to feel your pain.
I wouldnt call these rules, more like suggestions.. but if you dont follow, you are less likely to win.
- hint - i love rhyme.
- prewrites allowed, new poems prefered.
- please nothing to long, if it is long, dont bore me.
- if you need anything else, like a prompt, just let me know.
however the one rule i would like to add is,
if you cant take constructive criticism, do not enter, if you complain then i will DQ as i am only giving you my opinion and trying to help.
i dont have many points, i hope they will go up, if not, sorry.
have fun, good luck
alex x
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on May 17
- Rewards: Gold: 400, Silver: 100, Bronze: 50, Honorable mention: 5 people
- Final notes: well done to the finalists,
all entries were wonderful, i found it difficult to judge as you cant really measure someones pain, however,
the standard of the entries were amazing, the flow, rhythm and perfect words used in each poem really made this a great contest.
thank you for entering alex
Contest Winners
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I promise you, it's not your fault
He's the one to change how he feltby kissjess 43 lines, 140 comments, on Jul 24 12:08 PM 2008. In Pain, Lost in thought, Escape, Hope, Family, Dedication
Silver trophy winner
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I'll never be the same,
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Can you see me?
Can you feel the tears I’ve cried for you• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove]
Gold trophy winner
Honorable mention
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Apart of society ?
Which is not apart of me---by roland halloway 22 lines, 15 comments, on May 3 11:57 AM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
How can anyone describe what I wanes felt,--so seemingly long ago. I don,t know how to describe or interpret such things. For I have no phyby roland halloway 33 lines, 55 comments, on Apr 22 10:17 PM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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He cast me off and left me to die,
Full of resent, My head is still raised high.
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One day---
I saw myselfby roland halloway 55 lines, 32 comments, on Apr 25 10:37 PM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
We used to be in Love, / but you turned your back on me. / Said that it wasn't time for you, / you were too young still. / No major decisioby Griswold 27 lines, 28 comments, on Jun 4 1:49 AM 2007. In Personal, Angst, My life, Contest, Longing, Sadness, Lost love, Angry
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I fell so hard today
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As I have wished for you to see• Viewed by judge.
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What other languages do you speak?
by Writing0Freedom 61 lines, 4 comments, on Apr 22 11:55 PM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
We had known each other for years,
Longer than your marriage,• Commented on by judge. -
If I was five and I tied ink stained balloons to my wrist, and jumped off the monkey bars- you'd come running out and catch my brittle hot air before it dissipated.by Writing0Freedom 17 lines, on Apr 29 11:09 PM• Viewed by judge. Prewrite
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you hauled me out
listened to me scream and shout• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
Can you imagine?
being told you were a mistake• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
I cried in sadness one day.
Tears swelled I cried a song.• Commented on by judge. -
I told myself a lie today, the same one I told yesterday.
The truth I know can set me free, and I could run back to you,by Vf2thekill 12 lines, 13 comments, on Mar 31 4:23 AM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
You wouldn’t believe the conflict in my head
Now that your deadby KitBassGirl 19 lines, 7 comments, on May 4 4:56 AM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
You told me you loved me,
And then you broke my heart.by Princess Cuddle Bug 24 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 12 2:30 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
A mystical world set apart the deadly flame of her exaust,
A world to far from long, that I settle upon the lust.by Chiisai-half-devil 50 lines, 1 comment, on May 8 11:31 AM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
by Isolatedsouls17 106 lines, 2 comments, on Oct 18 10:58 AM 2008. In Personal, Pain, Other, Contemporary, Life, Love, Thoughts, Adult, Angst• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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When I was eight my father threw my mother, and me out on the streets because he was irrational.• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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by TragedyofLife 28 lines, 4 comments, on Jan 26 8:11 PM. In Contest• Viewed by judge. Prewrite
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eh.. no rhyme.. feedback please? i don't think its too awesome atmby TragedyofLife 19 lines, 4 comments, on Jan 22 3:35 PM• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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On a snowy day she sits on the sofa
in the guidance office that afternoonby YouWillBeLoved 90 lines, 5 comments, on Nov 26 2:14 PM 2008. In Pain, Personal, Thoughts, Hope, Life, Love, Sad, My own style, Friendship, Depression• Viewed by judge. Prewrite
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Does abandonment by suicide count?
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yes yes, its the worst kind.
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If there's a happy ending does it count?
like, it's not happy happy, it's just...acceptance -
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go for it
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Thanks so much for gold :)
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Thanks so very much for choosing me as an honorable mention
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