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Winklings # 167 invites all friends and members ~ The Shadorma!

The Shadorma is a form that can be quite trite. The best poetry using the form I have seen on Allpoetry is that by naena.

 

http://allpoetry.com/poem/292486

 

 

Caresses (Shadorma)

Caresses,
delicate flutters
of fingers
meeting flesh
in declaration of love,
as lips remain still.

Unmoving,
through volumes spoken
heart to soul,
soul to heart,
in softly flowing rhythms
of love's own language.

 

 

Now, the Shadorma goes like this:

 

Shadorma

The Shadorma is a Spanish form, of six unrhymed lines. However, it is a syllabic poem, so there is, a strict number of syllables per line.

The line/syllable pattern is as follows:

Line 1: 3 syllables
Line 2: 5 syllables
Line 3: 3 syllables
Line 4: 3 syllables
Line 5: 7 syllables
Line 6: 5 syllables

You can have as many verses as you like, as long as each verse follows the above pattern. There is no rhyme requirement...but nothing says you cannot use rhyme.

Obviously you may write two or three of them together and related one to the other.

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YOUR TASK: Write a double Shadorma involving the above painting in some understandable way by George Grie called "Final Frontier". Your effort does not need his painting title.

 

Good luck and go to it.

 

 

Contest is Over

  • Contest was judged on March 15
  • Rewards: Gold: 1000, Silver: 500, Bronze: 250, Honorable mention: 2 people
  • Final notes:
    This is Lyndon.
    Firstly, I personally had nothing to do with judgements made and opinions expressed by Jeff, Marilyn and Sandi. However, I have reason to accept their separate opinions because they judged in good faith and anonymously pertaining to the poems. On your behalf, I thank them sincerely.
    To this moment, I have no idea as to identities myself. I can say this: the judges were a trifle disappointed with many poems that were perhaps a bit prosaic which is a trap easily fallen into with counting forms such as this one.
    After all, Billy Collins has made fun, satirically, of this trap.
    Having said these things, I thank all contestants.
    Congratulations to the author of 'Transcendence". GOLD has been awarded to you with an Grade Point Average of 8.1 (Generally, I like Gold to score >8.9 but that is symptomatic of what I said above. )

    "safe harbor" earns SILVER with a GPA of 7.9. (Again, I prefer the score to be > 8.4.)
    Congratulations.

    "Sentinels" wins BRONZE with a GPA of 7.73. Very good. (Again, I prefer the score to be >7.9)

    1st HM: "On the Cusp". GPA = 7.7. Good work for HM.

    2nd HM: "arrested winds". GPA = 7.6. Good.

    Technically handled by Lyndon. Thank you.



Contest Winners

  1. Transcendence
    Transcending
    frontiers of being,
    by Peripatetic 13 lines, 6 comments, on Mar 1 11:15 PM. In Thoughts, Hope
    Gold trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  2. safe harbor (Shadorma)
    still waters
    deceive simple souls
    by Draig aine 16 lines, 9 comments, on Mar 10 10:13 PM. In Contest, Life, Thoughts, Spiritual
    Silver trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  3. Sentinels
    fearless white horizon stands her sentinels at our doors...
    by archangel827 23 lines, 5 comments, on Feb 26 3:39 AM. In Sexuality, Contest
    Bronze trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  4. On the Cusp
    Sailing blind--
    the wind tips our mast
    by yamadori 14 lines, 4 comments, on Mar 10 11:53 PM. In Love
    Honorable mention
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 25
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    Wow. I LOVE that image!


    • Lyndon gold member
      February 25
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      Well

      try out the form. I am sure that you would do it ever so well.


  • Peripatetic gold member
    March 15
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    Prosaic entries

    The challenge of a form is to write with poetic grace within its conventions. Form of any kind should be a conveyance for one's inspiration, but one which focuses poetic expression. This contest introduced some of us to the Shadorma, a form which has some wonderfully concentrating qualities with its brevity and metrical conventions.
    My issue with some challenges to write in a particular form or to feature certain poetic devices is that the prompts are often too restrictive beyond the primary challenge. Potential entrants may be inspired and excited by the challenging conventions of the form, but they might have no response at all for a picture or particular subject prompt. The limiting factor on subject matter for form contests seems to work better when the challenge excludes a few subjects or themes rather than restricting responses to a particular subject or image prompt. Though energized by the form's challenge, the results from a narrow prompt may be more prosaic than poetic as entrants focus their constricted musings on a directed subject. Their attention is more on the framing than on the aesthetics of the finished work.
    I am grateful for the contest which introduced me to the Shadorma, and for the recognition my poem received from the judges. However, the contest gave shape and form to other ideas, poems I could not enter because they had nothing to do with the prompt. I do not know if they would have fared well in the contest, but I felt better about them than I did about the entry I did post.