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I love portrait poetry - things along the lines of:
brilliant
the things I remember and like
about people often fall into
one of these categories:
offensive and satirical,
things they wouldn't remember
about themselves
a well-dressed stoner;
his clothes are effortlessly worn,
and there is something lazy about
his obvious intelligence
his mother makes the best cookies;
last year, Marissa and I slyly stuck
our hands in his desk to grab
the Ziploc of home-baked cookies
he wouldn't share with us directly
.::.
our English teacher
likes similes and reading out loud
in a monotone voice that
manages some kind of inflection:
"He was rather fat ...
... a fart as big as the Statue of Liberty"
without explicitly stating
the author of such a write,
it was plain to everyone
the details had been written by Ryan
though I like to refrain compliments
for people I don't know well,
I couldn't suppress myself from
saying, "That was brilliant"
whether he was flattered or
already knew it,
I felt oddly liberated
for telling him the truth;
it's not always ugly
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4745429 - written by Jessica (notorious)
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I want you to write something along these lines about a boy/man that you know.
It must be original and unique.
have fun!
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EDIT: Pre-writes are now allowed - but if you enter a pre-write that I don't think really fits the contest then you will be disqualified without warning.
I love portrait poetry - things along the lines of:
brilliant
the things I remember and like
about people often fall into
one of these categories:
offensive and satirical,
things they wouldn't remember
about themselves
a well-dressed stoner;
his clothes are effortlessly worn,
and there is something lazy about
his obvious intelligence
his mother makes the best cookies;
last year, Marissa and I slyly stuck
our hands in his desk to grab
the Ziploc of home-baked cookies
he wouldn't share with us directly
.::.
our English teacher
likes similes and reading out loud
in a monotone voice that
manages some kind of inflection:
"He was rather fat ...
... a fart as big as the Statue of Liberty"
without explicitly stating
the author of such a write,
it was plain to everyone
the details had been written by Ryan
though I like to refrain compliments
for people I don't know well,
I couldn't suppress myself from
saying, "That was brilliant"
whether he was flattered or
already knew it,
I felt oddly liberated
for telling him the truth;
it's not always ugly
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4745429 - written by Jessica (notorious)
.
I want you to write something along these lines about a boy/man that you know.
It must be original and unique.
have fun!
.
EDIT: Pre-writes are now allowed - but if you enter a pre-write that I don't think really fits the contest then you will be disqualified without warning.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on December 16, 2008
- Rewards: Gold: 1000, Silver: 500, Bronze: 250, Honorable mention: 4 people
- Final notes: Thank you to everyone who entered this contest - you made it incredibly hard to judge with the high quality of your entries!
Please congratulate the winners - their poetry is outstanding!
Keep writing everyone, and I hope to see you in future contests!
Polly
Contest Winners
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by Lavender Butterfly 26 lines, 5 comments, on Nov 28 1:41 AM 2008. In Personal, Thoughts
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a blush to my faceby PhlegmPho 12 lines, 4 comments, on Nov 27 1:22 AM 2008• Commented on by judge.
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Aw man... I have the PERFECT prewrite for this!!
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Just make sure it is perfect
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I didn't know you were gonna use that poem of mine!
I'm uber to the flattered, of course
This contest rocks my face off
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This is my favorite male-portrait of yours ... I couldn't use another girl one - that would make people confused
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LoL oh yeah - both your favorite poems of mine are about girls.
Here's a confession:
I actually don't mind this poem that much.
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Unfortunately, the one I'd write about happens to be 9 months old...so you can guess there's not much in the way of originality I can write with my son as the subject. Which means no wonderful things only he does - yet. I hope you do this contest again in a few years. By then, I'll be able to give you something about him you haven't heard 10 mil. times. Good luck!
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Thank you for the silver.
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you deserved it - I'm glad that you entered!
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Why did you remove my poem from your contest?
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It was removed because in your author notes you said that it the name was of a childhood friend - but the poem wasn't a true story, and in this contest I was looking for a life-portrait of someone you know.
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Your rules:
I want you to write something along these lines about a boy/man that you know.
It must be original and unique.
have fun!
Joachuim: Hebrew for God will judge .
This is not a true story (though the name of my boyhood friend is true), it is just a whimsical little tale in my head that was a fantasy at one time about a childhood friend, but nothing came out of it. Yet, I did have a boyhood crush on him and thus this poem.
You ask us to submit an original poem about a boy/man that we knew. I submitted a poem about a boyhood friend I had a crush on, wrote out my fantasy about him and it was original. To have actually expressed this to him at the time period that I grew up would have raised some eyebrows, if not have uncertain consequences where I lived, thus the fantasy. Yet who is to question the detail I put in the poem about father relationships and societal morals is false. This was the disappointing thing about you pulling the poem out. Second insult was when the judge failed to leave a comment explaining, but I still think that Joachuim is as real to me in my life as he is not real to you as a reader. What a disappointment that is.
Gregg
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The contest stated that "Pre-writes are now allowed - but if you enter a pre-write that I don't think really fits the contest then you will be disqualified without warning."
I didn't think that your poem fit the contest description because portraits are generally objective and true-to-life. I don't have anything against you poem at all, and I am not stating that it wasn't original - I just thought that as it was a fantasy, then it wasn't an objective picture of your childhood friend.
Is there anything I can do to make you feel less upset and insulted about this? -
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Polaja:
I don't think it is your fault nor is it my fault, I think it is the fault of the interpretation.
And with that said, I am going to change my author's note and let it read that this is a true story, because it was as a real of a relationship that we could allow as two teenagers could go in discovering our sexualities. Perhaps the name is not the name of the young gentleman it happened to (I used that name because of the symbolic meaning behind it and I also had a friend named Joachuim), -- that is my poetic licence in retelling the story -- but the individual who had experienced this with me will still remain anonymous.
I apologize for being a little uptight up the way it was judged and dismissed and hope that we can start afresh since I just discovered we belong to a few groups together and I would hate to get off on the wrong foot with another member.
Gregg -
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I apologise for not commenting on your poem before it was removed from the contest - I'm sure that in the future we will have more pleasant conversations about our poetry!
Pol
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