I will stand upon the place you take your final rest,
and I'll imagine lying next to you, diagnosed with
hyperphagia,
an uncanny ability to take your bones and stuff them
inside me, until I can feel them rattling and cutting every
pink, dazzed organ until they turn red and blue and gold
with my love.
- twelve steps til my bones turn gold
Adsaige
Rules:
- Check Grammar
- No Pedestrain Rhyme
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on November 29, 2008
- Rewards: Gold: 400
- Final notes:
Beautiful.
I thank you all.
Sorry I didn't comment on them all.
Be blessed! Keep writing
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Finally alone, bathed in moonlights irridescent dusk.by ears2hearyou 70 lines, 8 comments, on Nov 16 11:05 PM 2008. In Contest, Love, Hope, Romance, Inspirational, Happiness, Life, Friendship, Lost love
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by Lavender Butterfly 17 lines, 1 comment, on Nov 16 10:23 PM 2008. In Personal• Viewed by judge.
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And then there were candles
and my hand hovering, cookedby evidently 17 lines, 3 comments, on Nov 28 3:09 PM 2008• Viewed by judge.
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Wow...that's an amazing quote above.
Bookmarked.
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A stanza from my one of my newest poems. I adore it.
Hope to see you here!
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holy jesus. i am inspired.
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Escribir, escribir, escribir, mi preciosa! -
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yo trataré a escribir.
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No hay ninguna intentando participar con usted!
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aw, gracias. ahora, hay presión! lol
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Claro, claro, no hay. Usted me adulan demasiado.
Usted empezar darme un ego y, a continuación, cuando
se infla el tamaño del sol y los eclipses, la gente empezará a tirar cohetes en mi cabeza tratando de ruptura abierta!
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ahahaha! you crack me up.
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It's the truth.
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I love the quote!
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Then Enter!
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ack, but it's 1:30 and I havent finished homework
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Excuses, excuses. 
Finish your homework then enter.
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lol! I will if it's still open and I'm still awake
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I'll reopen if you need me to.
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sweeet, thanks - I'll let you know
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my beautiful and oh so talented daughter, count me IN
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Can't wait!
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what is pedestrain rhyme?
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Rhyme that is undistinguished and ordinary. Does that help?
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not really, but i don't think i could write for it anyway
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An example of pedestrian rhyme:
I stubbed my toes today
and it hurt in every way
so I told my mama and she took care of it
but still called in sick!
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eh my muse isn't hitting me like it normally does
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I see. Well, if it does, then you are welcomed to enter.
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I adore it too. I have an obsession with bones as of late.
Love the image of stuffing someone else's bones into your skin. 
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Yes well, I want to pack mine in a suitcase and mail them to someone to love them.
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bookmarked ... i am insane
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Really hoping you enter.
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Wow, this reminds me of something I began writing awhile back. Let me see if I can breathe a new life into it.
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Would definitely love to see your take.
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Amazing quote. -
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Thanks. Glad you like it!
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awww. thank-you
congradumalations to the other winners
thank-you for the damn well inspiring contest. -
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Once I saw: moving on requires taking steps, I had to close the contest.
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