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Move me to tears

Okay, everybody - here's a new one.

I watched the last 20 minutes of E.T. last night and every time I watch it the last line moves me to tears:

 

E.T. points to Eliot's forehead and says "I'll Be Right Here..."

Out of context it doesn't seem to mean much - but taking into consideration the whole scene and the rest of the movie, it gives me goosebumps every time.

 

Here is your task:

 

Set a scene.

Move me to tears - they can be happy or sad, or a bit of both.

 

If you use form - do it well.

If you use rhyme - make it not obvious.

If you use iambic pentameter - please please please don't force it.

If you don't know what any of these things are and only write free verse, that's fine.

 

Make it good anyway.

 

Don't make it sappy.

Don't make it gross.

Don't use chatspeak or anything like that, it doesn't make a bad poem any better.

 

I want good quality writes. 

I want great stories in poetic writing.

I'm allowing PreWrites because some folks have awesome moving writes and I don't want to leave them out.

 

Move me to tears.

Contest is Over

  • Contest was judged on October 9, 2008
  • Rewards: Gold: 350, Silver: 130
  • Final notes:
    I was rather disappointed in the quality of the works here. It feels as if not many really read the instructions.
    Many of the submissions were sing-songy iambic rhyming works.
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    The instructions were:
    Set a scene.

    Move me to tears - they can be happy or sad, or a bit of both.

    If you use form - do it well.
    If you use rhyme - make it not obvious.
    If you use iambic pentameter - please please please don't force it.

    If you don't know what any of these things are and only write free verse, that's fine.

    Make it good anyway.
    Don't make it sappy.
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    I am sorry to say I had to remove the bronze and HM. I do not feel it is appropriate to reward poems that were not up to the challenge.

    If you would like a specific critical response, send me a message and I will critique.

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    As for the winners:

    BluesMan's "Character" did make my eyes fill with tears. A beautiful sentiment that is honest and innocent and evokes emotion without the "sappy" language. Excellent write.

    Zvrhlik's "Three Pins" made me teary-eyed for another reasonL I wish I could put emotion and meaning into just a few words. My tears are of respect and, I must admit, a smidge of envy. So much meaning in what, eight words? Remarkable.

    Congratulations BluesMan and Zvrhlik.

Contest Winners

  1. Character
    It was like any other day
    for this innocent little girl
    by BluesMan 64 lines, 91 comments, on Sep 23 11:29 AM 2008. In Contest, Nature, Life, Sad, Personal, Pain, Love, Noguest
    Gold trophy winner
    • Viewed by judge. Prewrite [remove]
  2. Three pins
    three pins
    on a clothesline -
    by Zvrhlik 2 lines, 53 comments, on Sep 23 5:02 PM 2008. In Contemporary, Haiku
    Silver trophy winner
    • Viewed by judge. Prewrite [remove]

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  • Zvrhlik
    October 9, 2008
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    Thanks!

    Thank you for silver very much. I didn´t expect it at all.