This contest is for the following people who made it from round one to here with unique themes.
aboomer Cutiepie freswinn NeonRose Arkbear Starz of Heaven mcmc
This round has a few more rules...
I still want as unique as you can get...that's an always with me..
...I also want PERFECT spelling, grammar and punctuation. I want flow and impact. I want to be able to read your poem and say Wow! Or smile, or cry...or something
Poetic devices get extra points.
I would like you to include this time:
1. A reference to time....day, night, minute, spring...anything
time related.
2. Some reference to color.
3. Something nature related.
Now use your imagination...I don't want rainbows in spring!!
Best wishes to you all...
The top three at least will move to round three...
Remember...unique with above references.
As always please put your username in the AN.
And this time your favorite food.
Thanks for playing along!! Congrats on getting to round
two...now...let your imagination go...and HAVE FUN!!!
aboomer Cutiepie freswinn NeonRose Arkbear Starz of Heaven mcmc
This round has a few more rules...
I still want as unique as you can get...that's an always with me..
...I also want PERFECT spelling, grammar and punctuation. I want flow and impact. I want to be able to read your poem and say Wow! Or smile, or cry...or somethingPoetic devices get extra points.
I would like you to include this time:
1. A reference to time....day, night, minute, spring...anything
time related.
2. Some reference to color.
3. Something nature related.
Now use your imagination...I don't want rainbows in spring!!
Best wishes to you all...
The top three at least will move to round three...
Remember...unique with above references.
As always please put your username in the AN.
And this time your favorite food.
Thanks for playing along!! Congrats on getting to round
two...now...let your imagination go...and HAVE FUN!!!
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on October 21, 2008
- Rewards: Gold: 300, Silver: 200, Bronze: 100, Honorable mention: 2 people
- Final notes: Aloha and mahalo one and all!! I score the poems, then tally all the scores at the end...so sometimes it even surprises me, who the winners are and in what order...I wasn't prepared for two ties!! BUT that's how the scores turned out! So I flipped a coin for first and second and fourth and fifth...
I will add these scores to the scores in round three and winner takes all...
stay tuned!!
Here is how this round scored:
Round Two
Fargone Summer Nights
TITLE: I like the title except…it S/B Far-gone 9.2
THEME: Awesome…the whole idea is great and quite unique…especially in this round! 9.5
THOUGHT: LOL…if you were the boy, with the aluminum bat, and an idea….you’ve thought about it a lot and it showed…9
PRESENTATION: I like your line breaks and the way you took us through the whole ordeal. 9
FLOW: I read this out loud to my husband…who by the way also enjoyed it…and it flowed nicely…you will however learn, if you continue to pen for my contests, that the over use of filler words is something I have learned to look for….you could take out several “and”s.:
had grown neglectfully high
and the roses had not blossomed. that’s the first “and” you could loose…also line #9
I missed one,
and swung again and again,
I missed one,
swung again and again.
You will loose a few points here…but not bad!
9.2
you can see where I’m going with that part of it…still you didn’t do bad on the flow.
CREATIVITY: Extremely creative!! and I really like the use of the repetition, usually
it doesn’t work….you’ve used it well.
9.5
IMAGERY: Totally there.10
IMPACT: Also Totally there. 10
GRAMMAR: mosquitoes, nose-dived, newborns, existence are all spelled incorrectly…spell check is your friend!! This is where your score looses points again…also it is prone…not proned. In this stanza:
The fireflies were here; flitting about…
you change tenses….then go back again…The fireflies were there
9
RULES: 10
TOTAL: 94.4
Brambled Barbs
TITLE: I love the title…it describes the little bugger to a “t”….even though Brambled isn’t a word…I like it! 9.5
THEME: So far everyone has come up with a unique poem…theme wise…this is no exception!! 9.3
THOUGHT: 9.5
PRESENTATION: 9.7
FLOW: 9.8
CREATIVITY:9
IMAGERY: 9
IMPACT: 9.2
GRAMMAR: 9.5
RULES: 9.9
TOTAL: 94.4
Invasion
TITLE: Perfect for the poem! Nice metaphor with the aliens…J 9.9
THEME: Your theme is great…so far all I’ve read are unique.9
THOUGHT: 9.5
PRESENTATION: 9.8 I like the way you went free style…it works well with this write!
FLOW: 9.8 I had only one problem with this write…you said in the beginning they prepare for their invasion…then after “lift-off” you change to past tense…maybe that was on purpose but I would have
used: Their sounds are of sleet…then in the next stanza you have a great transition for changing tense..
just my opinion, of course!
CREATIVITY:9.5
IMAGERY: 9.7
IMPACT:9.9
GRAMMAR:9.8
RULES:10
TOTAL: 96.9
Patience personified,
in artistic design.
Each stroke drawn from my being
inner resources purged,
laid down in meticulous manner,
tested and tried,
repeated and repeated.
Angular spirals in strict array,
largest to smallest,
and back again.
How many miles must be traveled;
fluid, yet fixed in time.
The day drifts, contemplating my
masterpiece unfolding,
catching a glimmer of sun,
leaching a silvered drop of dew...
no time to dawdle, savor the view,
existence depends on perfection.
Mission accomplished.
A trap without teeth...
strong as steel,
yet as fragile as breath.
Come into my parlor,
before I must devour it,
and begin again.
Patience personified..in artistic design.
Spinner
TITLE: Excellent companion to poem! 9.9
THEME: 9 Unique…as with most entries this time…J
THOUGHT: 9.5
PRESENTATION: 9.7 Great job…only thing I would have done differently is match the first and last line….but that’s me!!!
FLOW: 9.7
CREATIVITY: 9.8 Mission accomplished.
A trap without teeth...
strong as steel,
yet as fragile as breath.
My favorite line!
IMAGERY: 9.8
IMPACT: 9.8
GRAMMAR: 9.7 The third stanza could use some revision in punctuation (IMHO)
RULES: 10
TOTAL: 96.9
Shards of Time
TITLE: Goes excellent with the poem! 9.9
THEME: Time is not quite as unique as some themes 8.9
THOUGHT: 9.8
PRESENTATION: 9.8
FLOW: 9.7you have a few extra “filler” words I would leave out…
CREATIVITY:9.8
IMAGERY: 9.7
IMPACT: 9.5
GRAMMAR: 9.7 Follow the sun
into the early afternoon.
Underneath the green tree
is where you will find me,
enjoying my meal
I would take out the “is”….
RULES: 10
TOTAL:96.8
Contest Winners
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Silver trophy winner
Honorable mention
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Only five entrants from the seven that made it. That's saddening. =*(
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Thank you for the Silver and congrats to all the winners!
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Thank you for Bronze congratulations to everyone else be well
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wow...many congrats! and thanks for the HM
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