Jeff and Sue welcome you to the greatest test of Rhyme and Flow on AP. This round the theme is "Feelings". Any way you want to take that but if your metaphors are too cryptic please explain them in your notes!!!
Some changes from the last time we were here, first, thanks to generous donations we have MUCH bigger prizes. We hope to pick up more donations so we can continue to give large numbers of HMs
Each round will have a "Dalaney" contest, this is a sort of beginners prize. All the contests stand alone, you may enter any number of rounds or all of them.
Also this time two entries per round per poet, and only one of these can be a pre-write.
1 5000 gold 2000 silver 1000 bronze Summertime
Never-ending Summer by Amera and Summer's Inspiration by PerVirtuous joint winners Breathe, a Land in Wait by One Angry Monkey Bronze
2 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze Children's
Twinkle Toes by Gwenevere Gold, The Magic Train
by NeonRose Silver, The Color Poem by Amera bronze
3 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze New; Shopping (Trijan Refrain) by Amera, gold; In Medeas Res ... Retourne by ecrivain01 silver; Hiding Place Gwenevere, bronze
4 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze Fantasy - Aflame in Fiery Death by One Angry Monkey gold; Shape Shifter by Amera silver; The Dragon at Retal by ecrivain01
5 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze Villanelle by Vera Rich gold Sonnette - Love by pania Silver A Fantasy, Perhaps by NeonRose bronze
6 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze The Wall Unscalable by EarthToJim, Gold. Caged by One Angry Monkey, silver. Indestructable by Allan Emery Bronze.
7 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze Old - The Nature of Old by EarthToJim Gold Bessie by Vera Rich Silver Time Does Its Work by GreySquirrel Bronze
8 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze Memories - Still running
9 2500 gold 1000 silver 500 bronze *** Feelings ***
10 6000 gold 3000 silver 1000 bronze Grand Finale Goodbyes
This below illustrates something of the sort of poetry we are looking for, no-one has written us a new example poem so I did!
Impressing the judges
Flowing like butter on toast in the morning
Oil in an engine, or water downhill
Rhyme like a bell that is rung for a warning
Clock on a church spire when weather is still
The poems we seek are all rhyming and flowing
Beautifully worded and sounding like song
If you're a poet with talent for showing
Then this is a contest that cannot go wrong
Sonnets and villanelles, ottava rima
Anything rhyming with meter sublime
On ode or a ballad that tells of a dreamer
No awkward corners and plenty of rhyme
Triplets or monorhyme, couplets or rubai
Exact and not slanting if you want to win
Form found in Texas or somewhere near Dubai
Just pull up your muse and it's time to begin
Look at the theme and then write us a beauty
Edit and polish it make sure it shines
Careful attention's a good poet's duty
Match up the sounds of the words on the lines
All of the entries are read by the judges
Three or four times in our heads and aloud
So if you write rhyme and you never bear grudges
Write us a verse that will make you feel proud
In other words what we are after is poetry that rhymes, and we both strongly favour exact rhyming, and poetry that flows.
We both love poems in other forms but this contest is for rhyme and flow. Formed or unformed doesn't matter, so a sonnet has as much or as little chance as a loose ballad.
Judging:
We set a standard for rhyme and flow, all poems that meet that standard reach the final, although we both strongly prefer exact rhyming (that is defined by my dictionary as an identity of sound from the last stressed vowel sound to the end of the words) we have always allowed a small amount of leeway but don't push your luck, more than a couple of slant rhymes in a long poem, more than a couple of places where only an unstressed syllable rhymes and you won't win. Once we have assessed a poem as good enough for the final we mark on meeting the theme, the content and what we call the poetry, that is the rhyme, flow, meter etc. During the judging we will remove some poems from the final, this is just to make it easier on ourselves re-ordering the finalists. All poems are read at least twice, all finalists at least twice more, and the nearer you are to the prizes the more work we will put in.
These are not "Form contests" we are not marking against "rules" so if you have a Villanelle where you modified the repeat lines a bit, that is fine here. They are also not spelling tests, we do want you to get everything right but unless the spelling and punctuation mean we find it hard to understand, we won't punish you heavily.
Finally they are our contests, and we decide!!! If we prefer one poem to another it will win!
Part 9
Feelings
Interpret this how you will but please no CUTTING or SUICIDE. We both enjoy "adult" poetry but we want all our competitors to be able to read your entries here so no erotica, even if it fits the theme. Be creative here!!!
AMAZE US PLEASE!!!
You may enter two poems each, but only one may be a pre-write. However you will not win two prizes so if you have the best two poems in a contest do not be surprised if one does not place, we will have worked hard to choose the right one (for us!) from your entries. Please do not enter poems that have been in our Rhyme series before.
If you have not won a major cup from us, or two or more HMs you can enter the Dalaney contest that will run in parallel.
Dalaney cup winners are invited to this contest where they are automatic finalists.
The pictures are only for show and are not the prompt, but you may use them for inspiration if you so desire.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on September 7, 2008
- Rewards: Gold: 2500, Silver: 1000, Bronze: 500, Honorable mention: 10 people
- Final notes: Just one more of these to go!
This was another very strong round, Amera is back on top, this time with a chilling prewrite, a Poe based quatern. EarthToJim follows with another poem only he could have written and Neon Rose adds a bronze to her trophy cabinet.
We have both enjoyed reading all the poems this round and are eagerly anticipating more brilliance in the finale, so if you haven't got your entry in, think "goodbye" and get writing.
Thanks again to everyone for giving us such a difficult job!
Jeff and Sue
Contest Winners
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Quatern with an internal rhyme • Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] - Error: Unable to find finalist item 4557557, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
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I wrote a letter to my Love;
another opened it instead• Commented on by judge. [remove] - Error: Unable to find finalist item 2312556, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
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"Happy birthday, Perry,
Your teeth are looking nice,"• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] - Error: Unable to find finalist item 4533693, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
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by Blue Eyes Wander 22 lines, 2 comments, on Sep 2 1:59 AM 2008. In Contemporary, Dark, Life, Other, Society, Thoughts, Weird• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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Once again I sit beside the candles glow,
drawn to the light like a moth to the flame.by Sunshine Always 23 lines, 8 comments, on Aug 10 2:18 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] -
I blew some kisses into the air and they turned into a breeze,
And on danced on gossamer wings hovering there with ease.• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] -
As points of light a glimmer trapped in sparkling beads of dewby Antonio Valentino 57 lines, 4 comments, on Jul 26 8:12 AM 2008• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove]
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Yesterday when these tree were young
spreading their limbs to kiss the sun• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] -
Thy gilded cage, so devoid of light,
Pains thee by day and haunts thee by night.by Sunkissed xo 31 lines, 15 comments, on Jul 20 11:15 PM 2008. In Hope, Life, Love, Thoughts, Dedication, Longing• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] -
With feelings still falling,
I wake every morning• Commented on by judge. [remove] -
I fall on the floor.
Do you even see what you've done to me?• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] -
Messages were garbled. I don’t understand.
Weren't the words clear from my hand?• Commented on by judge. [remove] -
To feel the air between your toes,
Two feet above the floor.
by One Angry Monkey 9 lines, 6 comments, on Apr 6 8:43 AM 2008. In Love• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] -
Her face is like a faded flower at rest
a gentle breast that rises quiet and slow,• Commented on by judge. [remove] - Error: Unable to find finalist item 4566101, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
Gold trophy winner
Honorable mention
Entries [50]
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Ramble at it's finest, I know I'm biasedby Luciferian Aeon 99 lines, 8 comments, on May 4 2:14 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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I see you standing in the shadows.• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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Take a look at man's mirror can you see all the pain?• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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When I rumble like war
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Today was a good day,
I think I'm doing all right.by Jenny84 38 lines, 4 comments, on Aug 16 8:41 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
if it's just a dream,
then why do we scream?• Commented on by judge. -
I am fragile now,
treat me with cloud like hands.by Islanddreamer 58 lines, 1 comment, on Aug 15 8:41 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. -
I'm not impressed
With your fleshby Krockrumble 24 lines, 2 comments, on Aug 15 5:58 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. -
Think before you say or it'll all fall apart.
Never look dumb• Commented on by judge. -
I see you stare at my color, I know you hate my race.by Islanddreamer 21 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 10 11:59 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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I'm so high
Flying a kite from a cloudby Krockrumble 37 lines, 2 comments, on Aug 15 4:09 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. -
Joyous light has just leaked on me.
My excited heart has just peaked on me.by Vampstress 16 lines, 2 comments, on Sep 2 3:42 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. -
In 1200 BC, the towns boldly sprouting were grave
to any lonely farmer who happened to pass by.by HagarenHanyou 24 lines, 1 comment, on Sep 2 10:43 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. -
Come see the Despair pit, It's the reminiscence of a hole,
it once held the power, of creation of soul.by Vampstress 20 lines, 7 comments, on Apr 21 6:02 AM 2005. In Dark• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
I'm going to eat your soul. I'll grab it, fry it, eat it whole.by there-goes-my-heart 7 lines, 10 comments, on Sep 2 11:18 PM 2008. In Niftylicious, Dark, Love, Life and Death• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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You're hard work, but you're worth it. You're slightly worn, not quite perfect.• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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Like to have a walk with me,
through the garden of my mind?by Jesann 101 lines, 13 comments, on Sep 2 12:43 PM 2008• Commented on by judge. -
A Bittersweet Escape 2
by ngaba 30 lines, 1 comment, on Sep 2 3:14 AM 2008• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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Slamm / Rapp
YO! ___ Angry youth / Rude / Uncouth
Try’in to shock the tribe
With your negative vibes and diatribe
Try’in to make your mark / While the world is dy’in
I’m not im - pressed / With your cry’n
Jus’ cuz you think you’ve been / Neglected
& Dis respected
You know NOT what you’ve destroyed
You killed the melody in MUSIC ___
with all that noise.
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Good luck everyone, Di
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Isn't it time you entered to show us all how it's done
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Holy crap you guys must have a lot of points
I'm gonna read some of these to see the experts of rhyme and flow
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Congratulations to the winners, ,kind regards Di
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