make me feel something.

lately i've been kind of emotionless.
fix me .. please?

i want pure gold.
please don't give me generic, cliched poems,
i want you to take all your feelings
and express them in ways that i've never heard before.
i want your pain expressed abstractly,
not thrown in my face.

literary devices are your friends.
bonus points if you can make me cry.

left-align only.
plain background.
readable font.
i really prefer freeverse,
if you decide to rhyme,
DO NOT make it forced,
or you have no chance.
i'm not looking for happy or funny poems.

please try to stick these guidelines.

i will comment on all entries,
however i am in paris until july 11th,
so any entries submitted before then
will be commented when i am back.

if your poem is not what i am looking for,
i will tell you.
please don't be offended,
everyone has different opinions.

oh.
i cannot STAND poems with bad grammar, spelling or punctuation.
so seriously, proofread.

i may open the contest to prewrites later on,
but for now i want new stuff.
--

please. make me feel something.

--
opened contest to prewrites.
this means that i'm going to get a lot of crap entries.
so, if your poem isn't what i'm looking for, i'll DQ you.
sorry but i need the space

Contest is Over

• Contest was judged on July 20, 2008
• Rewards: Gold: 500, Silver: 300, Bronze: 203, Honorable mention: 1 people
• Final notes:
  thanks everyone

Contest Winners

1. I tried

   by leander 22 lines, 21 comments, on Jul 5 7:36 AM 2008. In Personal, Sad
   Gold trophy winner

   • Commented on by judge. [remove]
2. There is no escaping gravity

   by Tigris 30 lines, 6 comments, on Jul 6 2:53 AM 2008. In Love, Life
   Silver trophy winner

   • Commented on by judge. [remove]
3. Hell, or why I hate that song so much

   Hell was watching her hold your heart,
   white blistered needles drove into my mind

   by sassykitty 10 lines, 16 comments, on Jun 1 6:18 AM 2008. In Contemporary, Love, Sad
   Bronze trophy winner

   • Viewed by judge. Prewrite [remove]
4. glass.

   Pick me up, don’t shake me.
   Hold me closely, don’t ever lose me.

   by etoile 51 lines, 7 comments, on Jul 5 6:46 PM 2008
   Honorable mention

   • Commented on by judge. [remove]
5. Nicotine Maina In These Public Streets

   by Fim Fivver 48 lines, 4 comments, on Jul 3 10:52 PM 2008. In Depressed, Personal., Abstract, Freewrite, My own style, Adult

   • Viewed by judge. Prewrite [remove]

Entries [25]

• The Boot II

  My ribcage implodes from the pressure of her soldiers. Spiked heels and heart rates remind me of what I was scared of.

  by David. Enjoy. 0 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 4 11:25 PM 2008. In Thoughts, Weird

  • Commented on by judge.
• He, His, Painful will

  As it was an unholy tome, A chapter in his life,

  by Quad cannon 10 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 5 12:35 AM 2008. In Dark, Thoughts

  • Commented on by judge.
• Under Cupid's Toll Bridge

  Love is never required to be given back.

  by mahogany BENch 7 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 5 3:15 AM 2008. In Sad, Personal, Pain, Love, Life, Thoughts, Dark

  • Commented on by judge.
• Soul Pain

  How does one measure the pain of the soul?
  Is it on a scale of 1-10?

  by skye01 15 lines, 12 comments, on Jul 5 4:46 AM 2008. In Death, Sadness, Depression, Loss, Pain, Abuse

  • Commented on by judge.
• Ending the dance

  Dance with me for just one second,
  just one moment of peace.

  by Schabu 19 lines, 4 comments, on Jul 5 10:54 AM 2008. In Sad, Love

  • Commented on by judge.
• Traitorous Tears

  Traitorous tears,
  Oh so backstabbing tears,

  by ChunkyC 34 lines, 2 comments, on Jul 12 1:22 AM 2008. In Love, Personal, Sad, Pain

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• What If?

  What if the seas would turn to ice And give the ocean a sad demise,

  by mannyrich 14 lines, 2 comments, on Jul 12 12:54 PM 2008

  • Viewed by judge.
• whisper

  deep nothings
  dissolving

  by transit 16 lines, 2 comments, on May 31 8:45 AM 2008

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• Fibromyalgia

  Clouds of Sorrow cover me Constant pain won’t let me be

  by Tgrktz 38 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 13 4:34 PM 2008. In Contest, Pain, Personal, Sad

  • Viewed by judge.
• Trapped

  There is screaming, So much it tortures my ears

  by Darker-star 26 lines, on Sep 22 2:19 PM 2007

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• Romance

  The candle has gone out, My dream's deceived by fate,

  by abeautifuldisaster 37 lines, 6 comments, on Sep 25 8:21 AM 2007

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• My glass of brave

  In a world
  At my feet

  by Arpeggi 34 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 5 11:54 PM 2008. In Lyrics, Dark

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• Montreal

  I am haunted by smell It's as potent as it is ominious

  by FireOnIce 33 lines, on Jul 16 7:33 PM 2008

  • Viewed by judge.
• Now and Then

  We used to sit on a big green couch

  by DareU2Byourself 43 lines, 3 comments, on Sep 11 11:48 PM 2007. In Other, Personal, Sad, freeverse

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• Religion Kills

  The Mountains of regret Chiseled in time for us to bow down to

  by SymphonicGoddess88 38 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 16 9:29 PM 2008

  • Viewed by judge.
• Together Forever

  Tonight, / I lay with you for the last time. / But, it will last a lifetime. / / Cancer has taken your body but not your soul. / Your soul

  by nike 16 lines, 22 comments, on Apr 25 2:10 PM 2007. In Love, Dark, Sad

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• ...without a paddle

  by liltandrhyme 67 lines, 2 comments, on Sep 24 6:53 PM 2007

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• Go then ...

  Look to the sky, my love See the stars bleeding for you

  by Selene Tremere 24 lines, 7 comments, on Jun 17 5:58 PM 2008. In Sad, Personal, Contest, Dark, Fantasy, Life, Love, Thoughts, Weird

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• Light

  by laurel 32 lines, 9 comments, on Jun 25 8:41 PM 2008. In Sadness, Anger, Hate, Escape

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite
• Beauty in the Breakdown

  by swim.x 20 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 17 11:52 PM 2008. In Realisation

  • Viewed by judge. Prewrite

Comments

• By me, right now

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• 
  adsaige
  July 4, 2008
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  i think i had the perfect poem
  but it's a prewrite
• 
  leander
  July 22, 2008
  Edit | Reply
  Thank you for seeing my poem gold worthy! I'm truly honoured with this. Congratulations to the other winners as well!
  
  Leander

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