I have created what I believe to be a new form that I think is fun and challenging. It is spawned by Amera’s Shadow Sonnet, with some significant differences. With the Shadow sonnet entire words are used at the beginning and end of each line. I thought that it might me fun just to require the syllable to rhyme. Then, perhaps we could have a beginning rhyme scheme and an end rhyme scheme, thereby increasing the number of rhymes in the sonnet. I have named it the Princess Sonnet, after Amera.
Princess Sonnet
The same as any Sonnet form as far as syllable count and end rhymes. The difference is that the rhyme is reversed for the first syllable (or syllables) of each line. For example: An English sonnet is abab cdcd efef gg so in an English Princess Sonnet the beginning rhyme would be reversed: baba dcdc fefe gg (or hh, as you can use a new beginning rhyme for the couplet if you wish) where the couplet would begin and end with a rhyming syllable (or multiple syllables if you can pull it off). An Italian sonnet would have an end rhyme of: abba abba cdecde, which would mean the start rhyme for an Italian Princess Sonnet would be baab baab edcedc (or baab baab efcefc). This will give the sonnet a cascading quality when read aloud. Often a rhyme will repeat as it ends one line and begins the next. Other times the two end rhymes of a quatrain will be next to one another as well, with one ending one line and the other beginning the next. Done with forethought, it will not be apparent that the sonnet is any different except to a very disciplined eye or ear. Yet, the rhythm and intonation that doubling the number of rhymes in a sonnet creates unquestionably makes the sonnet more like a song. With this, An English Sonnet with a beginning rhyme is an English Princess Sonnet. An Italian Sonnet with a beginning rhyme becomes and Italian Princess Sonnet. Etc. If you wish, you can have the same rhyme begin and end each line, which would be a Mirrored English Princess Sonnet, etc.
Example:
Princess Sonnet
The same as any Sonnet form as far as syllable count and end rhymes. The difference is that the rhyme is reversed for the first syllable (or syllables) of each line. For example: An English sonnet is abab cdcd efef gg so in an English Princess Sonnet the beginning rhyme would be reversed: baba dcdc fefe gg (or hh, as you can use a new beginning rhyme for the couplet if you wish) where the couplet would begin and end with a rhyming syllable (or multiple syllables if you can pull it off). An Italian sonnet would have an end rhyme of: abba abba cdecde, which would mean the start rhyme for an Italian Princess Sonnet would be baab baab edcedc (or baab baab efcefc). This will give the sonnet a cascading quality when read aloud. Often a rhyme will repeat as it ends one line and begins the next. Other times the two end rhymes of a quatrain will be next to one another as well, with one ending one line and the other beginning the next. Done with forethought, it will not be apparent that the sonnet is any different except to a very disciplined eye or ear. Yet, the rhythm and intonation that doubling the number of rhymes in a sonnet creates unquestionably makes the sonnet more like a song. With this, An English Sonnet with a beginning rhyme is an English Princess Sonnet. An Italian Sonnet with a beginning rhyme becomes and Italian Princess Sonnet. Etc. If you wish, you can have the same rhyme begin and end each line, which would be a Mirrored English Princess Sonnet, etc.
Example:
Make Haste
b Make haste, young men, and learn your manners well, a
a Tell friends in vice and pride not to partake. b
b Wake up; let not your hearts be trapped in spell, a
a Hell sings with joy when God’s commandments break. b
d The moment’s pause can lead your soul astray, c
c Way down a road that’s suited not for thee. d
d We all shall mourn each sad and tragic day, c
c They who, afraid of shadows still won't flee. d
e Yet, some will heed the calling of the sun, f
f Run to the light, as near as they can get. e
e Met by these brilliant rays all become one; f
f Done-in are shadows sin’s evils beget. e
g New understandings shall be given you, g
g To soothe your soul, illuminate your view. g
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***** Notice that you can use 2, 3, or 4 syllable rhymes if you can pull them off. However, the most interesting would be the first syllable of the start rhyme and the last syllable of the end rhyme, hence: 'Mental' as a first rhyme would rhyme with 'detriment' as an end rhyme.****
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Don’t suck
Expect crap to be ignored.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on July 19
- Rewards: Gold: 1100, Silver: 1000, Bronze: 1000, Honorable mention: 8 people
- Final notes: I would like to thank one and all for the great entries in this contest. I had to fight with myself to come up with the criteria I used for judging, as I wanted to be as fair as possible.
There were many poems that were overall as good as the winners, so if you did not finish first, second, or third, it does not mean your poem was not as good. In order to judge, since the content of so many poems WAS good, I had to give more weight to technical things like spelling, punctuation, correct usage of words, and meter. Having better meter doesn't make a poem better all by iteslf, but if they are equal on all other counts, then it is given the weight of breaking the tie. Same with the rhyming and choice of language, etc.
The Gold winning poem has little flaws, however, when I consider the poem in all ways it still is the best one in my humble estimation. That would be 'Deceit' by Myrataal. The language is fabulous, the meter is unconventional, yet brilliant. The image is fantastic. This tells a story that is complete and meaningful, all within the constraints of the complex form. I think the degree of dificulty in what she attempted was the highest, and that counts for something with me. What put this poem ever- so-slightly over the top was the creative use of language overall. That originality was the tiebreaker.
The Silver winning poem is flawless. 'Prissy Pirates' by Amera is a textbook example of the form as described in the instructions. It was very difficult not to give this poem the Gold. If I knew how to give two golds, I would.
The bronze winning poem was most difficult because the poems were all so good! I never expected to dig this deep into them to decide the third place poem! The edge went to 'Climbing the Wall' by Pania. I could find nothing wrong with it. It was beautiful. In most contests I believe this would be a Gold winner, however, some of the very best showed up for this contest, so it was much harder. The two that finished higher had slightly better meter and language, as detemined by your unworthy and humble judge.
I would like to throw a thank you out to PoeticLove, Desire, CricketJeff and Penman for the next four entries. All of these were in serious contention for the gold. A couple had spelling errors, which I hated to base anything on, but when things are very equal in all other ways, I must. In the end, this contest was to me like the Olympics diving championships where one thousandth of a point can be the difference. These were all scrutinized that closely. Thanks again and keep writing.
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In days when magic ruled the world of men
When dragons tried to save us all from sinby cricketjeff 22 lines, 11 comments, on Jul 13 11:14 AM. In contest entry, sonnet, princess sonnet
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Chase your dreams wherever they tend to go. So that your destiny preceeds your pace.by 2lullabyhaven 16 lines, 6 comments, on Jul 12 2:21 PM. In Contest, Hope, Thoughts
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by cricketjeff 17 lines, 6 comments, on Jul 9 7:51 PM. In Erotica, sonnet, princess sonnet
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Bring forth my love, another hopeful night, unite the happiness this love will spring.by freespirit51 14 lines, 19 comments, on Jul 9 5:55 PM. In Italian Princess Sonnet, Love, Romance
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Oh My Word~
Holy Shindig-
I have my root canal scheduled
just kidding~ I can give this a whirl...
(tells self under hypnosis)
I bet You and Amera could do this with eyes closed
I'll threaten my quill with harsh language and see what spills
Best wishes with Your contest Busy Bee
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Yikes! That sounds hard ... I might get my feet tangled up
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Not at all. If you can rhyme at the end, you can rhyme at the beginning.
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Thanks for the link.
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Ah Allan ...
you make this sound so easy, but my tired Muse may faint half way through ...
If I can gather enough strength, I may enter ... It sounds fun, nevertheless.
Love
Always Myra
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I do like the challenge this form presents...hmmmm Thank you for the invitation. Let me contemplate this beauty. ~Pamela
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Wow! This one looks interesting but it also looks like it will take all the mind power i possess...will give it a try though,seems very interesting.
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I shall be back to attempt this intriguing form you have created. Thank0you
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Cool form, a little like the Lunar Chant, but the endline scheme is different...and of course it isn't a sonnet, lol. I think I'd like to try it...I hope I can muster somneting.
a lunar chant:
love is sheltered in serinity
along the pathways of divinity
above the plane of earthly pleasures
belong the stellar lighted treasures
chanting in harmomic tones
reverberation in our bones
ranting kelpies are forsaken
invocation, the gods awaken
sooner done than even said
demonic forces away are lead
lunar oceantides resurgence
harmonic energy in convergence
responding to our brothers need
just as they return the deed
bonding love's the only rule
trust, though not as blinded fool
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If you would like to do a Princess Lunar Chant, I am very happy to consider it as I would a sonnet. Thanks for your interest.
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Fine idea and not so hard... Would be a greater challenge if you had to rhyme the ending word and beginning word between stanzas, as well. Cool idea, totally, fine Poet.
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Sounds interesting; let me see what I can come up with lol
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this form is stellar !
just love it ...
how smart of you to play in such an intelligent manner with the sonnet form ...
congratulations on a promising new accomplishment in the world of poetry !
marion
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Thank You!!
Thank You for the HM and points for I am Honored also Appreciative
Congratulations to all who placed
Wow what a contest and I had my root canal already planned and Holy Moly~ thought to give this a whirlI'm Happy I did
Thank You for Hosting Sweet Soul!
Many blessings to You
Best wishes in all You do
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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