"Turn away from the pain you don't want
Turning down to avoid them when they call
Strange words I heard a long long time ago
I wish I could back to a summer time
I knew more than twenty years ago
can't lay between the sheets
we lie underneath the maple tree now
now I can't smile
lying in the grass with the wind around us
as we smile and talk
listen to your Grandma sing those country songs
She'd tell us how the maple turns to fire
every four years
we'd lay in the grass all summer long
just to watch the autumn come around. . .
I can't smile
I can't smile
now I live alone
and your so far away
Yeah I call you every year
just around the holidays
I still see you in the night
lying above me in the grass. . .
I can't smile
turn away from the pain you don't want
Turning down to avoid them when they call
I can't believe this letter that said you died
I think I'm gonna go back to the house in North Carolina
and lay in the backyard
get drunk and let the leaves
just bury me
bury me. . .
I can't smile"
Artist: Everclear
Do not use any phrase of the lyrics in your poem.
Credit authors and artists [pictures included].
No end line rhyme and no upper length restrictions
- longer than 8 lines.
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Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on July 9
- Rewards: Gold: 800
- Final notes:
Gold:- 500
Silver:- 200
Bronze:- 100
Final prize:-
Gold:- 800
Two other entries had average pieces with spectacular endings. Another had a brilliant steady piece with a not so good ending.
I felt Gold gave a steady brilliance through out and I really think that instead of offering four trophies - one stood out.
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Contest Winners
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Gold trophy winner
Entries [5]
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by AliceinPoetryLand 37 lines, 3 comments, on Jun 23 6:48 AM. In Contest, Lyrics Inspired, Thoughts, Life• Commented on by judge.
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by adsaige 23 lines, 5 comments, on Jun 24 11:49 PM• Commented on by judge.
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Okay ... not phrases, so .. what about 'words' and how many words make a phrase anyway? ... 2 in a row? 3? 4?
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Well. Anything obvious
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& could one use every second word? lol.
*head implodes*
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and i was thinking... whether i was allowed to write a prose under 8 lines :/ :|
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Longer than eight lines.
You'll just have to space it more.
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bleh i just wanted to whether you would accept prose or not... ahahha
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I saw the contest title and thought .. hmm someone is going a little softy on me, then I read the lyrics and said "now thats the lady I love"
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Nawr
Never judge contest by title
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amazing song.
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Darn it I missed this
Best wishes to all...
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Congratulations to the winner and thank you for hosting
It was an interesting challenge
Gaylene
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