Woman in a motel
To be an artist means never to avert one's eyes.
- A Kurosawa
Here I am. It's hot,
the bedspread a terrible green,
the window inside
my dream. I hope to finish
neatly. What do you think
about despair? What I hate is the way
they make it small, the way they think
you can be so goddamned happy
because there are trees in the world,
or families, or two week vacations at the beach.
Some things get lost and stay lost.
This bad painting. This old TV.
This bathroom with two thin and scratchy,
uselessly small towels.
-Mercedes Lawry
Rules:
- 100 words or less
- Strong use of solid imagery
- Left alignment
- Free verse only
- Any subject matter
- Please do not post any images with your poem
- Simple background
- inspired by the poem above
2000 points
al
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on May 27, 2008
- Rewards: Gold: 1500, Silver: 300, Bronze: 200, Honorable mention: 1 people
- Final notes: I' d like to thank everyone who entered this contest, I received so many wonderful poems that it was a pleasure to read through them. I had 8 poems in my top 3 so this was a TOUGH one to judge, with the exception of the gold winner, which is simply amazing and if you read nothing else on the site today please read this one.
Gold- Zayra
Silver- Nurse Chilly
Bronze- Saffron
HM- Mairi bheag
Thank you all again.
al
- To judge this contest, you need to have at least as many finalists as you have rewards. You have 4 awards but only 3 finalists.
Contest Winners
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:::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::by NurseChilly 16 lines, 26 comments, on May 10 8:14 AM 2008. In Life, Love, Manchester Musings.
Silver trophy winner
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by Saffron 17 lines, 22 comments, on May 22 11:58 PM 2008. In Contemporary, noguest
Bronze trophy winner
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by Mairi bheag 27 lines, 18 comments, on May 11 1:48 PM 2008. In Thoughts, Free Verse
Honorable mention
• Commented on by judge. [remove]
Entries [22]
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Painted pictures of deception neon wrapped and advertisedby butterflywriter 17 lines, 9 comments, on May 9 9:40 PM 2008• Commented on by judge.
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I wake up in a room i don't remember. The wallpaper is falling off,by Passionateguitarrist 24 lines, 2 comments, on May 10 3:07 PM 2008• Commented on by judge.
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Life is a parable..• Commented on by judge.
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by Luna Tique Fringe 16 lines, 15 comments, on May 11 9:15 PM 2008• Commented on by judge.
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Justice is an unlucky gambler and we, his last two chips.
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Another town no one knows me• Commented on by judge.
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I've almost gotten used to this The wallpaper is peeling around the edgesby mantis180 11 lines, 2 comments, on May 13 6:07 PM 2008• Commented on by judge.
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something left on the doorknob, firmly turned pushed in against the mildewed air, sucked outby Eric Nunnally 16 lines, 1 comment, on May 18 12:48 PM 2008• Commented on by judge.
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Her bitten lips scarred by hisby LadyLavender 12 lines, 9 comments, on May 22 8:39 AM 2008• Commented on by judge.
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by cheyennea3436 20 lines, 4 comments, on May 22 2:18 PM 2008. In Adult• Commented on by judge.
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Comments
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mmmm. maybe I might.
Hope you are well dear Al.
- James
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One of my favorite authors. Definitely bookmarked.
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Ahh to be challenged by the likes of you a temptation quite hard to resist. Perhaps I will not, resist that is.
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You'd be surprised how many women do resist that temptation...lol
Hope to see you here
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What's so hard about this contest? Here's a cinquain that meets all your criteria:
Monte
stains hotel sheets --
sleeping in a Hilton
warrants a Paris or Nicky
imprint...
Damn, I bet Whitman would high-five me for that. C'mon Al, fork over that gold right now...
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Old Walt would probably want to stain your sheets Monte...lol
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Yeah, I bet you're right -- those doctors. They are so damn frisky.
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I see there is already some fierce competition here.
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there is always room for one more...
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very, very cool
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Figures -- my starting line for this contest arrived this morning.
I'm going to see if it works for Naked.
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wow... thank you Al most unexpected with all the very good competition
many thanks for the shiny and well done to everyone else too
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I was totally not expecting this~~many thanks to you, Al, for this contest and as always, the inspiration. Congratulations to Zayra and Nursechilly, and to all who wrote for this.
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Congratulations to all the poets in the contest for stepping up to write such wonderful poetry! Thank you to the host for sponsoring a truly challenging and interesting contest. Bravo!
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