i want dark poems, negative, make it as negative as u can, dont tell me "o life is beautiful, u should live it"
give me an acual criticism of whats goin on, give me what u see is WRONG with all those things i wrote in the title. u can also expand and talk about philosophy, ideology, etc. i want thought about statements! and im realy nice with criticism/feed back, so dont be afraid. im no bitch!(like others)and i will comment on all the enteries
there are no rules
i don care about punctuation, spelling (as long as i can tell what the word is), cursing, u can put as much sex and depression in it as u want, give me blasphemy, and disgrace, and jus punch the things u were spoon-fed in the face!
o and plz do NOT write mean things about other ppl's work! they put their heart into it!
o and i absolutly love rhyme, u don have to do it at all, but i like it.
u can use this poem for inspiration:
do as I say
not as I do
use this gruesome gun
cut with this bold blade
accept the sting
because u never obeyed
Philosophy is just a society of doubters
and ideology just a gathering of the rejected
their words volatile as gun powder
but for some reason their minds are respected
all they looked for was a position of power
for idealization
all they wanted was innocence to devour
in alienation
religion is just an institution of deficient rituals
and the ayatollah's and rabies and the priests
preach their habitual
their competence questionable
their acceptance perceptual
and their lies
adequate but not exceptional
so if you have a mind
if you have a brain
you'll see through
the image they maintain
and from being a sheep
you will abstain
and the truth
you will obtain
you have to give YOUR verdict
YOUR adjudication
not what they say
in manipulation
their words hollow
their lies gilded
what they want is for you to obey
to give them satisfaction
to listen to their words
and not their actions
or this one:
i look at all that is henious n foul
n on the inside i scream
on the inside i growl
tongue stuck in the jaw
from the words i withdraw
on the swollen gums i chew
the screws in my lips, easy to screw
fat pigs are stamping on grapes for wine
n theyr just dancing
in a crimson flood
but the truth is
the grapes are hearts
n the wine is blood
the vacant eye
sees not but the blind
n the entangled mind
sees not but the intertwined
so i love alone
n i hate alone
so my eyes, ears n lips
have been sown
all there was n there is
has been mislaid
n we hide in the dark
in the safety of the shadow
n the shade
n i look at the world
n i notice the blemishes
n i laugh at the fetishes
n i cry for all that is wrong
this world is an oxymoron
no less than its a paradox
like the little chicken eating the fox
like an athiest wearing the hejab
like a stoner doin the job
like a jew drawing the swastika
like a model that has a flaw
like an armanian loving a turk
like a king goin to work
it is all a circle of regrets n bruises
a society of dark n light
a cycle of wrong n right
n its not gonna change overnite
aright im done talkin, give me what u got!
i noe u can do it loves!
peace out pps
give me an acual criticism of whats goin on, give me what u see is WRONG with all those things i wrote in the title. u can also expand and talk about philosophy, ideology, etc. i want thought about statements! and im realy nice with criticism/feed back, so dont be afraid. im no bitch!(like others)and i will comment on all the enteries
there are no rules
i don care about punctuation, spelling (as long as i can tell what the word is), cursing, u can put as much sex and depression in it as u want, give me blasphemy, and disgrace, and jus punch the things u were spoon-fed in the face!
o and plz do NOT write mean things about other ppl's work! they put their heart into it!
o and i absolutly love rhyme, u don have to do it at all, but i like it.
u can use this poem for inspiration:
do as I say
not as I do
use this gruesome gun
cut with this bold blade
accept the sting
because u never obeyed
Philosophy is just a society of doubters
and ideology just a gathering of the rejected
their words volatile as gun powder
but for some reason their minds are respected
all they looked for was a position of power
for idealization
all they wanted was innocence to devour
in alienation
religion is just an institution of deficient rituals
and the ayatollah's and rabies and the priests
preach their habitual
their competence questionable
their acceptance perceptual
and their lies
adequate but not exceptional
so if you have a mind
if you have a brain
you'll see through
the image they maintain
and from being a sheep
you will abstain
and the truth
you will obtain
you have to give YOUR verdict
YOUR adjudication
not what they say
in manipulation
their words hollow
their lies gilded
what they want is for you to obey
to give them satisfaction
to listen to their words
and not their actions
or this one:
i look at all that is henious n foul
n on the inside i scream
on the inside i growl
tongue stuck in the jaw
from the words i withdraw
on the swollen gums i chew
the screws in my lips, easy to screw
fat pigs are stamping on grapes for wine
n theyr just dancing
in a crimson flood
but the truth is
the grapes are hearts
n the wine is blood
the vacant eye
sees not but the blind
n the entangled mind
sees not but the intertwined
so i love alone
n i hate alone
so my eyes, ears n lips
have been sown
all there was n there is
has been mislaid
n we hide in the dark
in the safety of the shadow
n the shade
n i look at the world
n i notice the blemishes
n i laugh at the fetishes
n i cry for all that is wrong
this world is an oxymoron
no less than its a paradox
like the little chicken eating the fox
like an athiest wearing the hejab
like a stoner doin the job
like a jew drawing the swastika
like a model that has a flaw
like an armanian loving a turk
like a king goin to work
it is all a circle of regrets n bruises
a society of dark n light
a cycle of wrong n right
n its not gonna change overnite
aright im done talkin, give me what u got!
i noe u can do it loves!
peace out pps
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on November 19, 2007
- Rewards: Gold: 300, Silver: 100, Bronze: 50, Honorable mention: 2 people
- Final notes: the enteries were all reallY REALLY GOOD! i couldnt even wait to have even more just because i couldnt handle having to pick only five out of even more beautiful poems! i absolutly LOVED the gold, silver, and bronze winners. and i thought the HMs were really amazing as well! some of the poems were too complicated in my opinion (which doesnt realy count as anything)but yeah, i thought some of them were trying too hard to sound "geart". my advice for most poets (again in my opinion which is almost nothing) is dont try to make your poems too complicated. but maybe thats just me! it probly is! anywayssss...thanks to everyone of you who entered, and good luck in everything you do, attempt to do, or wish to do.
thanks again
ggirll90
Contest Winners
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On Sunday he passed the collection plate,
went to the alter, kneeled and prayed.by sassylilpoet 24 lines, 9 comments, on Nov 17 11:56 AM 2007. In Life, Society, Sad
Silver trophy winner
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Dismiss what I say and send me on my way.
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Sharing a glass in the smiling night Hitmen with slowing breath and smoker's lung• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove]
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I wonder why we fight wars with no end
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Gold trophy winner
Honorable mention
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These words
Do they speak of meby danceswsquirrels 63 lines, 5 comments, on Sep 17 11:17 PM 2005. In Personal• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
I am sick, of the joy,• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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For when a boy is a manby jocelynclaire 25 lines, 2 comments, on May 8 8:19 PM 2006. In Sad• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
What this world needs
is the gift of second chance.by light insight 24 lines, 3 comments, on Nov 7 1:18 AM 2007
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Thanks for making this contest, I'm glad to have made it into the top six!
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