Your inspiration is the poem listed below by English Poet, Philip Larkin (1922-1985).
http://oldpoetry.com/oauthor/show/Philip_Larkin
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Talking In Bed
Talking in bed ought to be easiest,
lying together there goes back so far,
an emblem of two people being honest.
Yet more and more time passes silently.
Outside, the wind's incomplete unrest
builds and disperses clouds in the sky,
and dark towns heap up on the horizon.
None of this cares for us. Nothing shows why
at this unique distance from isolation
it becomes still more difficult to find
words at once true and kind,
or not untrue and not unkind.
Philip Larkin
the must have list:
preference of free verse
subtle end-line rhyme if you must
subtle alliteration
imagery
no more than 50 lines
spell check
Due to the significant number of poems that Larkin wrote with end-line rhyme, I have revised the must-have list to include SUBTLE end-line rhyme. If the content isn't strong enough that the lyrical nature of the poem takes over - it may very well weigh against the piece when it comes down to judging. Content /imagery and the overall story of the piece is key.
http://oldpoetry.com/oauthor/show/Philip_Larkin
larkin/biography/">
http://poemhunter.com/philip-larkin/biography/
Talking In Bed
Talking in bed ought to be easiest,
lying together there goes back so far,
an emblem of two people being honest.
Yet more and more time passes silently.
Outside, the wind's incomplete unrest
builds and disperses clouds in the sky,
and dark towns heap up on the horizon.
None of this cares for us. Nothing shows why
at this unique distance from isolation
it becomes still more difficult to find
words at once true and kind,
or not untrue and not unkind.
Philip Larkin
the must have list:
preference of free verse
subtle end-line rhyme if you must
subtle alliteration
imagery
no more than 50 lines
spell check
Due to the significant number of poems that Larkin wrote with end-line rhyme, I have revised the must-have list to include SUBTLE end-line rhyme. If the content isn't strong enough that the lyrical nature of the poem takes over - it may very well weigh against the piece when it comes down to judging. Content /imagery and the overall story of the piece is key.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on August 12, 2007
- Rewards: Gold: 300, Silver: 200, Bronze: 100, Honorable mention: 4 people
- Final notes: with the diverse and wonderful entries for this contest - I thought it would be impossible to judge. still, there has to be slightest preference or we wouldn't be human.
thanks so much to all of the entries for taking time to write such wonderful and sometimes somber / thoughtful poems for this contest.
Kim
Contest Winners
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I adore symbols / on my body / collections of your devotion• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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The tap keeps dripping / in some distant memory, /• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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- Error: Unable to find finalist item 3238272, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
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by cherche -d -ame 60 lines, 11 comments, on Aug 4 2:16 AM 2007. In Contest entry, Angst, Dark, Life, Other, Pain, Sad, Thoughts, Lost in thought
Honorable mention
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Gold trophy winner
Bronze trophy winner
Entries [11]
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when he seemed dead to herby rachelann 29 lines, 11 comments, on Aug 3 3:39 PM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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Joining you each night in memory
Reaching for your pillowby A floatingleaf 24 lines, 1 comment, on Aug 4 8:37 AM 2007. In Contest, Freewrite, Creative, Lost in thought, Love, imaginary• Commented on by judge.
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Oh an odd wee poem by Larkin, Mr. EndRhyme himself. This sets off all kinds of responses in me, actually. Hope you get some fascinating entries.
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I actually did go in and revise to include those that can end line rhyme with subtle use of that "tool". Granted, Larkin did so phenomenonly as his theme/ content was so strong that I think that took over his poetry verses the distinct rhyme through many of his pieces.
I'm hoping I didn't confuse matters more - as I tend to do. lol
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it seems you have a thing for bedtime communication. i think it was you who commented on one my bed poems. here's the link to one awesome poem i read a while back, you'll like it.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/1608234
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cool larkin poem
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serious question:
are you seeking philip larkins style? -
Now, why would you ever want to talk in bed -- well, except to say "honey, NO, that's not where it goes!" Instructions are entirely permissible, nothing else is. Oh, and it's also OK to provide commentary on watching a porn together. You know "those aren't real, and that position was done with mirrors." Important stuff -- and both very kind and unkind. See, that was what Larkin needed. More porn. Then he would have been rhyming away all over again, like
I saw Ron Jeremy
and heard my wife laugh --
I looked under the sheets
and realized my gaff.
Next time I'll try body lotions
or buy a bottle of wine --
something that will at least
bring wood to my sad pine.
Seriously, great contest Kim. I haven't done anything in a century. Perhaps I might use this great idea as leverage to get my poetic juices flowing again.
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love that poem...
I'm bookmarking.. even if I don't write anything for this, I'll be sure to check the entries out! -
you're so good at this contest thing...
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oooh, thanks Kim and congrats to the other winners!
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Thank you for hosting a great contest, Kim. Congrats to Stacy & the other worthy entrants. Be well, Poets. 
Wanda
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thanks so much Kim for the shiney... quite unexpected with all those big hitters..
a great contest
congratulations to all the others too
G.x
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