"I don't know how to say it: a day is long
and I will be waiting for you, as in an empty station
when the trains are parked off somewhere else, asleep."...
- Neruda.
the shorter the better...
but a long poem that holds
my attention is fine...
...thank you and please be inspired by
the lines above.
I want beautiful imagery of
your emptiness...
lol...if possible.
A hint*
Do not tell me what emptiness is,
show me what it is
This contest theme is not
about train stations...lol...
it is about what your own emptiness
is without someone/something/losing yourself, etc.
I hope that helps
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on July 13, 2007
- Rewards: Gold: 500, Silver: 300, Bronze: 100, Honorable mention: 3 people
- Final notes: The top three are SO deserving of gold...all so different and excellent...it was VERY hard to judge this...lol...thank you so much to all who entered.
Contest Winners
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Time drops slowly / in the strange shape of pain / during the day, during the night... / I wait for you, / my eyes closed, I sigh... / I ca• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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tenderly upon your neck.• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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I spend little time / contemplating empty / with nose to glass / pressing face, / watching rain. / But drops of pain / do coagulate / in pa• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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alone / in world of bereft belief, / i tremble secret wishes wanton / for one to share my soul, / in whole / as picture painted pigmentby wolfspiritguide 14 lines, 5 comments, on Jul 3 1:22 PM 2007• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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My emptiness is an unfulfillable void / Like writing on paper with invisible ink / knowing that it's there, but not seeing it / Being able• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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Silver trophy winner
Bronze trophy winner
Honorable mention
Entries [22]
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by rainyday woman 25 lines, 1 comment, on Jul 3 1:09 PM 2007. In Contemporary, Life, Personal, Thoughts• Commented on by judge.
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My heart / has no feeling / without my lover's touch / too pour rainbows into my soul / creating gardens where nothing grows / I am a hallo• Commented on by judge.
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Depletion being a milder word / Yet depicts my state of mind / When it comes to you / For it describes perfectly / On a minuscule scale / T• Commented on by judge.
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by amaranthine lover 6 lines, 2 comments, on Jul 4 7:01 PM 2007. In Fantasy, Contemporary, Dark, Abstract, Contest, My own style, Weird, noguest• Commented on by judge.
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Wishing I knew, remembered / the backside of life where / roads were desolate; rural / composure pitched against / smell of wet grass at dawn. / Missing home, plows, clean / living, the farm... I was a / m• Commented on by judge.
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Pablo Neruda happens to be the only famous poet i've read. I like his style. I have a lot of emptiness. This SHOULD be easy.
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lol...I have only started studying his work...I went from Thomas Moore to Neruda...lol... you need to read also...The Light Of Other Days (Thomas Moore)...a great poem
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Not feeling much like writing these days but the contest should be up for a while...
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...I feel like one
Who treads alone
Some banquet-hall deserted,
Whose lights are fled,
Whose garlands dead,
And all but he departed!...
(from the light of other days - Thomas Moore)
I will keep it up for a while...
I only want one excellent example easy...lol.
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Another great comtest idea...emptiness...I think I can do...where to start, where to start...*smile*
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you will give me brilliance, I know it
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Wonderful theme and with a touch of Neruda...just perfect. Will bookmark and see if I can write my emptiness...
~ Nicolette
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Nicolette,
thank you
...and I would love an entry from you for this contest
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Very nice contest idea. Neruda is my favorite all time poet and that's one of my favorite pieces of his poetry you have up there. Let me see what I can do.
~Lyrical
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I'm still struggling with a poem for this contest... you know one of those where you know what you want to say yet the words keep dancing all over the page
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I wish you would allow prewrites I just wrote one better then what I enter.
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you may change the poem any way you like that you entered...you are more than welcome to paste your new poem in and take out the old one...or change the one you have...I let people edit up until the contest closes/until I judge.
Let me know and I will read it again...I read all the poems again...even ones not in the finalists before judging
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This is gorgeous! I may try to squeeze into this contest!
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Zayra, ...thank you so much and I would love an entry from you for this contest...I am actually going to up the number of entries allowed...so it will be open for a little while longer
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love this idea...
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Oh, what a nice surprise! Thanks for the honorable mention and congratulations to all the winners up there! This was fun.
~Lyrical
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Wonderful ~ thank you so much for the trophy and congratulations to Zayra & Sonja and all the HM's on their wins! Was a great contest!
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you're welcome The top three all deserve gold...I hate when I have 3 close poems in the top...well...it is good to get that quality of poetry entered...but makes it very difficult to judge!
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Wow! What a contest, what an honor and what a line up of work! This is some of the best poetry I have read here at AP in ages! Thank you so much for hosting this contest and being so generous with your ideas! Congratulations to all the writers in this contest both those who collected cups and those who where in the running! Very inspirational!
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you're welcome and congrats!
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Congratulations to all winners and thank you for this nice, shiny trophy!
~Sonja~
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