An old pond
a frog jumps in
Sound of water- Matsuo Basho
The sea at springtime.
All day it rises and falls,
yes, rises and falls.- Buson
Going deeper
And deeper still
Green Mountains- Santoka
This is a haiku contest/workshop. The theme is back to basics, in practicing how to write good haiku. All haiku will be comented on by the judges, and any revisions suggested will be left in the comments. You will have up to 2 days after the contest to complete any revisions you would like, the decision is always yours as the haijin, the haiku poet.
Rules:
1. a haiku can be written in 17 syllables or less
2. present tense
3. captures no more than two simultaneous moments
4. has a leap (aha moment) in the last line
5. no graphics or adult content
6. You may have up to 3 entries, no haiku chains
7. have fun!
First Place: Gold Trophy and 300 points
Second Place: Silver Trophy and 260 points
Third Place: Bronze Trophy and 230 points
Lots of HM's!
Graphic: http://www.japancollection.com/images/spring/009.jpg
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on June 6, 2007
- Rewards: Gold: 300, Silver: 260, Bronze: 230, Honorable mention: 4 people
- Final notes: Pollycheck and I thank you for so many wonderful entries. And thank you for all the helpful comments that were left for everyone, that is what makes these contest/workshops so great! Here are the winners, and I hope to see you all again soon in another haiku contest/workshop.
Susie
1st Place: glass shards
2nd Place: atop a dam
Third Place: zebras
HM’s (in no special order)
Morning sun
Sun tea
Drifting off
Harvest moon
Contest Winners
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glass shards / on the tile floor / a broken knight /by between slices 24 lines, 6 comments, on Jun 1 7:21 AM 2007. In Sad, Chess, War, Contemporary Haiku
Gold trophy winner
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old zebras / inside the zoo / prison duds /• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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Second Revision / ~*~ / morning sun / between tree branches / birdsong rises / ~*~ / First Revision / songbirds consort / sunlight dappled• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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HARVEST MOON
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by bengalibelle 2 lines, 12 comments, on May 22 12:32 PM 2007. In Personal, Thoughts, Haiku
Honorable mention
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Silver trophy winner
Bronze trophy winner
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by Maya Lyubenova 7 lines, 16 comments, on May 19 11:20 AM 2007. In Haiku• Commented on by judge.
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Reds, greens and yellows / Colours bright before the snow / Colours announce Fall / Colours of Fall©Lady Dragonwyck / (10-5-2005 a Haiku) /by Lady Dragonwyck 6 lines, 10 comments, on May 19 11:56 AM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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White clouds / changing shape, floating by / an angel• Commented on by judge.
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painted turtle babes / pebbles who shift on concrete / wetlands left behind• Commented on by judge.
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chilly west wind / shivers leaves in the trees / winter is nigh• Commented on by judge.
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melting winter snow...exposing the soil below... now I can touch you• Commented on by judge.
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osprey, bird of prey / fisher without a license / sushi every day• Commented on by judge.
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SPRING BREEZE
(HAIKU/SENYRU)by NoWayJo 11 lines, 19 comments, on May 20 6:22 PM 2007. In HAIKU/SENYRU• Commented on by judge. -
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by swanridur 3 lines, 5 comments, on May 20 5:08 AM 2007. In traditional haiku• Commented on by judge.
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Thawing winters grip / Melting waters feed the land ~ /• Commented on by judge.
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Winters biting chill / Icy breath kisses the land ~ /• Commented on by judge.
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strands of white thread / sear blackened fabric / thunder ensues /by Floorboards 4 lines, 12 comments, on May 20 5:41 AM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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Berries of summer / sweet & tart without sugar / coloring my tongueby intanglio2ring 8 lines, 11 comments, on May 19 4:29 PM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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by sheltered 7 lines, 6 comments, on May 24 10:52 PM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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WINTER LANDSCAPE
(HAIKU/SENYRU)by NoWayJo 21 lines, 12 comments, on May 25 3:50 PM 2007. In HAIKU/SENYRU• Commented on by judge. -
a child laughs / as the moon turns yellow - / dog pee /by Sai Babas Lotus 21 lines, 3 comments, on May 26 7:02 AM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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masked men / shoot train travellers - / a butterfly escapes /by Sai Babas Lotus 19 lines, 4 comments, on May 26 11:22 PM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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Love like falling rain / gently falling down on us / silently and soft.• Commented on by judge.
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cool car going fast / down the road / look out on the right! /by nelly12 3 lines, 3 comments, on May 30 8:41 PM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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the moon / on an empty pole / finally, a streetlight /• Commented on by judge.
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A large Man enters / Biggy cline Demands respect / and yet he gets none• Commented on by judge.
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The raindrops fall
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Centered in the stream, / Crimson leaves are dancing, / Choosing their own path.by Epistomolus 2 lines, 4 comments, on Jun 1 8:05 PM 2007• Commented on by judge.
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Silently we wait / As nature's sleep is erased / Hunger now takes it placeby jahschosen 3 lines, 5 comments, on Jun 1 10:22 PM 2007. In Nature• Commented on by judge.
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COOL-COOL-COOL! I meant to ask when the next series of these contests might be posted--(I know we've both been busy), but here it is! I'll be flipping through my notebook tonight to see what I have.
Thanks for this contest, Susie and Polly!
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Yahooo. Can never have too many Haiku contests. Thanks.
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4. has a leap (aha moment) in the last line....being a Japanese will someone who hold this contest explain to me what is the meaning of this? I could not relate to this one. All I know is that haiku is being written in its simplicity capturing the moment or feeling at the time containing (季語）kigo ....
Is this the same as this one?
Most haiku contain a special season word: it introduces a cer-
tain background in which "a haiku event" takes place. It may be di-
rect naming ("winter night") or something that gives a hint and 切れ地 (kireji)...(usually kireji splits haiku into two parts,
the pause occurs at the end of the first or the second line).
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Thank you for asking, Rose Tattoo. Yes, haiku use a kigo. But for this workshop we are concentrating on one specific aspect of a haiku for clarification, getting down to some basic structure. If we work on too many aspects at once, it can be confusing, or frustrating, for the poet. That is why we hold many of these events.
The AHA moment-usually the last line contains that "certain something," but can also be found in any line it is written. Yes, it is written into two parts: in English it would be a fragment and phrase. The judges are looking for that aspect within these haiku in the contest/workshop.
Feelings, or descriptions of emotions are usually not written specifically via words in English haiku, but through the images or sensations that are portrayed themselves. It is the inability of the language to contain multiple meaning with all word choices. But by selecting carefully how the image is presented, the season, etc. the emotional aspect of the haiku can be inferred and understood.
You may ask all you want, I don't mind.
And if you have more to add, please do. This is as close to mutual conversation of haiku as we get here. And I think it is great.
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Is personification banned?
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No, it is not banned. I do not think we ban anything, but adult content.
Personification is usually not used in haiku, to let the images speak for themselves.
Now, here is an article-and it is not against personification per se-if you feel your haiku has it, and I know they do, but feel it should stand as is, please let it remain. My comments are only suggestions, and you are already an outstanding haijin, you must write them as you think is best.
http://asstudents.unco.edu/students/AE-Extra/2006/3/Lukiv.html
Ghads, I have so many boo-boos on my own, it is sometimes hard to have contest/workshops, I know I need to sit in them myself.
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I like the idea for this contest. Maybe you should try making it into a class or something when the contest finishes.
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Your friend was very helpful.
Imagination:
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Changed mine per advice. I want to tell the story behind it SO BAD, but I feel that a description or title gives an unfair advantage as the Haiku should do it's job within it's conservation.
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you'll see much of me...
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Hi I tried to edit my haiku taking the comments into consideration. However I am not sure whether I should alert you of that. But I am because I realized that you have not seen my revisions. Thank you and good luck with the judging.
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it's interesting to note that i continue to dominate your haiku workshops...
thanks for the gold!!
bless ya!
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Thank you
Oh my
I feel so very honored that my haiku was chosen for silver placement. Wow, thank you very much, for the points also. Congrats the other winners as well
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Congratulations to the winners and kudos to all who entered and thanks to the judges for all their hard work. I hope to be able to enter the next time, but this idea of a workshop/contest is so great and must take a lot of work, so here's to the judges!
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Thank you for the HM, Susie and Polly, and thanks to everyone for their help with my entries along the way. CONGRATULATIONS to all the winners!
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I have no successfully been an idiot and commented on each and every haiku entered into this contest. (I think!!!) My eyes hurt hehe.
Everyone did a great job
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