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Pillow Talk
What will you take to your pillow? Is there something that you wake up with that lands on your night sleep at the end of the day -a goal, concern, worry, loss or torment?
Is it yours or someone else’s conscience that should be pricked in a way which you could translate for them? The president, a country ambassador, leader of community, an employer or homeless person?
Criteria:
Express the above idea/theme in this contest through your own words.
Take it from the slant of anticipation, yet answered prayer or anything that explains the focus of it.
You can even write ‘about’ the process of that creativity objectively if you don’t want to share about yourself or specific subject. It’s not hard, but something that needs thought. Design it as ‘if’ you have something held within. Imagine and stair-step it.
Focus here in several ways:
A- Elevate the reader by reflection, and suggested solution.
B- Give us a philosophical approach that is fresh, simple, yet intuitive. I love ambiguity long as there are viable layers. Tell how this subject will end with the last thought of the day before you sleep.
I realize this leaves a vast amount of possibilities, so go with it. Surprise us without
warning.
Example I:
Faded Lamp
Did I really let you go, Daddy ?
in every waking moment I see your face
watch you in all the places,
near the elevator , the closet
My lips are clinched and my hand waves;<-- The pain has affected the writer
do you wave back?
Is heaven everything I thought and more
as this painful life has placed a tag on my pillow
faded scripts of how to take care of
the fluff of things below your place;
inside and out, however do I manage?
Air’s dry, and I choke while asking tonight.
I could cherish this as there’s no
light above my bed and I can’t
read the scratching on the wall;
It wants you back in the padded chair <-Suggestion
holding our children, a glass of water
uneven shadows begging for answers
that might redeem the lost place before.<-----Potential solution-- recalling for closure
© All rights reserved M. Dianne Berry (CookieZeal)
Rules:
You must be a member who’s not won a contest yet, though prewrites are accepted. Should you be engaged in another contest at the same time as this one with the same piece, that is fine
~ No longer than 20 lines
~Though romantic descriptives are invited, no profanity or graphic eroticism
~ Any form- free verse or rhyme
~ Colloqualisms are fine as long as they are tastefully and not wastefully used.
~ All entries -please be open for editing from critiques, as winners will be judged on the
final edit and the willingness to improve. (myrataal
will be collaborating to this effort since she's
in professional publication and workshops for such are her specialty.)
In your Comment Area, please state
the form so that we all can learn.
We want you to win a trophy, so just have a great time with excelling!
If you have a question, please let us know.
Gold Trophy-350 points
Silver Trophy-150
Bronze-100
Honorable Mentions each-50 points
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on June 3, 2007
- Rewards: Gold: 350, Silver: 150, Bronze: 100, Honorable mention: 2 people
- Final notes: I want to thank you for some rather haunting pieces overall.
However, it was brought to my attention that some of the entries were already awarded trophies long before the contest which sadly gave me no alternative but to disqualify them.
I'm glad to see those of you who took heed to the critiques and edited. Those of you who've won could still spit-shine and polish here and there. An inspirational egg is always parched at first, but nourishment brings it a solid GOLD!
Thank you for your time. Keep entering and posting the best~ Warmly, CookieZeal and Myrataal! :
Contest Winners
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Its the farthest you can be from me.
Sometimes at night I listen to you breathe.• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] -
I lay my heart to rest / to forget, / The pain I feel, / My arms are empty, / my heart beat still. / My brain rushing, / my face full of tears. / You left me to fly, / with our lord. / I lay my heart toby vampirekisser 10 lines, 1 comment, on May 30 5:02 PM 2007. In my friends suicide
Honorable winner• Commented on by judge. [remove]
Gold trophy winner
Bronze trophy winner
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Your heart is so sweet and full of joy
You make me laugh alot when I feel sadby georgiababe17 22 lines, 3 comments, on Mar 13 9:42 AM 2007. In Friend• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
Like whispers in my ear / When I lie down to sleep / A racing brain formulating / Nothingness / Twisted and something appears / Swirles aroby Starretta 16 lines, 8 comments, on Apr 27 12:25 PM 2007• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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Im trapped in a structure of sorrow / Feeling so alone / Always dreading tomorrow / And wanting to be home. / Im trapped in a body of doubt / That feels so emty and cold / Wanting to be let out / But someth• Commented on by judge.
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The thunder rips through the silence of my thoughts / And my mind is bombarded with that of which I've lost / Did you really die on me? Or• Commented on by judge.
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That moment before you fall asleep, / That place in time so warm and deep, / Stress lifted away in one swift sweep, / This moment, / This is perfect. / You feel your body start to slow, / You're half unconsci• Commented on by judge.
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That call that always should be made / I never seem to find the time / I'll write a note to remember / but then forget the note / I'll put it in my diary / but the date would come and go / Each nigh• Commented on by judge.
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Derek / my love does grow / stronger by the second / I love you so very much and / so does Charlie, we are both waiting for / your triumphaby XXbLAcKNAiLPoLisHXx 8 lines, 14 comments, on May 30 6:49 PM 2007. In Love• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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C'monnnnnnnnn. The perimeters are many. You'll be so happy you did.
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GLITCH NOTICE
CONTRARY TO what this says, it is NOT an anonymous contest.
Until the glitch is fixed, please IM me your author's page link so I can verify you've not
won a contest yet. Sorry for any inconvenience!
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Cookie, when I entered the contest I had not won a conest yet.
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Prewrites are fine, whether you've won or not, but only DURING the simultaneous post. You're still eligible according to what I see on the post date.
Please enter!
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Keep it Up
O Dear! This seems a nice contest for someone like me who always yearns at the sight of trophies at other's author's page. But I am not that good to write a poem on the given topics. Still I would give it a try. If I can manage then I would participate. Wish you a good luck with the contest. -
i cant enter this contest cuz i already have a trophy...i have a rlly good poem that would fit in too!!
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Oh no
Okay i didnt read the 20 line part so how do i delete it mines much longer ..........
But it is so passionate to me oh well ,
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Does it count if I've only ever won bronze: 2. -
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Prewrites are accepted ONLY if there was no win, and in this case...............it isn't eligible. But thank you !
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I havn't won a contest before, the only trophy I got was from one of my best friends and I think she just gave it to me because... I was her bf lol but my poem was written before I even saw this contest for my boyfriend who's sick right now =) but I love him with all of my heart -
argh! sorry!
im now not sure when you say 'won' if u mean getting gold or any kind of trophy before. i once received a bronze - if that counts, im very sorry!! -
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I'm sorry. I know how frustrating it is, but this contest is for those with NO trophies unless they were won simultaneously with the posting to this one.
I wish you the best otherwise! Thank you.
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The poem "Hunger", the author has 12 trophies.
The poem "Heart of a Dreamer, the author has 1 trophy.
The poem "Something from Nothing", the author has 4 trophies.
The poem "That moment before you fall asleep", the author has 1 trophy.
The poem "I Love You, My Pillow", the author has 2 trophies.
The poem "Dear Dad", the author has 1 trophy.
The problem with doing Contests like this, is you have it in "anonymous", and also, people have aliases on here. All they'd have to do is log under an alias that has no trophies and enter accordingly.
Perhaps you should limit it to one or two trophies, or less than 5.
But zero trophies? This isn't 3+ years ago when trophies weren't abundant on most author pages, nor was the website at the membership level.
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