No line limit!
Accepting 20 entries!
Any Form!
Play nice with the other kiddies!
Blind judging, try and keep it that way please!
Ok this is what I want you to do, using metaphor and imagry please write me something about todays society.
Anyone who knows me will know that a majority of my pieces are on these kind of topics, things that effect us from the past and the future, things we need to open our eyes to and things we definitely need to change.
As example there is a piece below that I wrote a little while ago, it's about how the poor suffer and are taken advantage of intoday's society. The use of intimacy and prostitution is the metaphor. I would love to see something deep and meaningful.
Seasonal Misconception
his beard rubbed, hard-
the inside of tender thighs,
as lips sucked greedily.
my eyes stared vacantly,
coloured lights dancing,
flashing brilliantly-
illuminating legs-
spread eagled...
as that jolly prick-
poised to drive-
the misconceptions home.
with whiskey laced breath-
I was unmoved, lost-
among the gutteral response-
reverberating in my head.
"merry fucking christmas,"
his load delivered now,
swaggering in satisfaction-
I do not bother to close my legs,
for the line forms to the right.
limp now, smiling, satisfied,
he tosses me a twenty-
from his sally ann kettle.
charity for the lost and desperate,
reinforcing my thoughts.
it is the needy who are fucked-
over and over...
with bright wrapping paper-
I quietly wipe away my present-
spreading legs wider still-
next...
All poems commented on upon close.
I don't care if you curse, just don't do it for the sake of it, have it be an integral part of what you are trying to convey.
Okay get to it, amaze me!
Hugs, Bunny
Update: I've decided to open this to prewrites as the entries have been slow. They still have to follow the guidlines above and any that do not will be removed.
Accepting 20 entries!
Any Form!
Play nice with the other kiddies!
Blind judging, try and keep it that way please!
Ok this is what I want you to do, using metaphor and imagry please write me something about todays society.
Anyone who knows me will know that a majority of my pieces are on these kind of topics, things that effect us from the past and the future, things we need to open our eyes to and things we definitely need to change.
As example there is a piece below that I wrote a little while ago, it's about how the poor suffer and are taken advantage of intoday's society. The use of intimacy and prostitution is the metaphor. I would love to see something deep and meaningful.
Seasonal Misconception
his beard rubbed, hard-
the inside of tender thighs,
as lips sucked greedily.
my eyes stared vacantly,
coloured lights dancing,
flashing brilliantly-
illuminating legs-
spread eagled...
as that jolly prick-
poised to drive-
the misconceptions home.
with whiskey laced breath-
I was unmoved, lost-
among the gutteral response-
reverberating in my head.
"merry fucking christmas,"
his load delivered now,
swaggering in satisfaction-
I do not bother to close my legs,
for the line forms to the right.
limp now, smiling, satisfied,
he tosses me a twenty-
from his sally ann kettle.
charity for the lost and desperate,
reinforcing my thoughts.
it is the needy who are fucked-
over and over...
with bright wrapping paper-
I quietly wipe away my present-
spreading legs wider still-
next...
All poems commented on upon close.
I don't care if you curse, just don't do it for the sake of it, have it be an integral part of what you are trying to convey.
Okay get to it, amaze me!
Hugs, BunnyUpdate: I've decided to open this to prewrites as the entries have been slow. They still have to follow the guidlines above and any that do not will be removed.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on March 23, 2007
- Rewards: Gold: 300, Silver: 100, Bronze: 50, Honorable mention: 7 people
- Final notes: Thank you all for your wonderful entries. They were all well written and conveyed a truth with emotion that flowed from the lines. As usual I chose by how they spoke to me, but each one was deserving of recognition. Thank you for taking the time to pen words of meaning on our world of today. Hugs, Bunny
Contest Winners
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Society ain't nothin' but a bitch
pimpin' us all.by Sacrificial Love 64 lines, 15 comments, on Feb 24 2:26 PM 2007. In Society, Weird, Thoughts
Gold trophy winner
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by -Ink Artist- 41 lines, 72 comments, on Nov 9 3:33 PM 2006. In Contemporary free verse, Humanity, Society, Thoughts
Silver trophy winner
• Commented on by judge. Prewrite [remove] - Error: Unable to find finalist item 2750392, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
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He watched the images on his screen
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Little Lamb, little Lamb
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Concrete rivers form endless grids
glass canopy's tower high above.by light insight 20 lines, 11 comments, on Jun 30 1:04 PM 2006. In Personal, Society
Honorable mention
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We are a nation of cowards,
A collection of hypocrites.• Commented on by judge. [remove] - Error: Unable to find finalist item 2750672, it seems to have been deleted :( [remove]
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Melting ice caps,
Too slow for the naked eye,by Random Thoughts 9 lines, 9 comments, on Mar 2 11:46 PM 2007• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
Nobody stopped to help, they walked on by.
Silently hostile and disapproving.by BruiserMadden 50 lines, 34 comments, on Nov 23 6:09 PM 2006. In Sad, Other, Hope, Society, Nature, Contemporary, Life, Inspirational• Commented on by judge. Prewrite -
If you cant handle the truth DON'T READ THIS!by badddgirl 18 lines, 4 comments, on Jan 27 3:47 AM 2007• Commented on by judge. Prewrite
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Comments
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Hit home very hard
The example poem you have here has brought tears to my eyes as it floods me with vivid images of what happened to me as a child at the hands of an old bearded man. So many similarities it's almost as if you extracted it from my psyche. I wasn't prostituted but sometimes feels that way when money for christmas or birthday present feels tainted like hush money. -
I feel this is what you are talking about.
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Thanks for the Silver!
Very much appreciated recognition! Congrats to the other winners!
~Lori
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