The Sick Rose by William Blake
O Rose, thou art sick!
The invisible worm
That flies in the night
In the howling storm:
Has found out thy bed
Of crimson joy:
And his dark secret love
Does thy life destroy.
There is another sky by Emily Dickinson
There is another sky,
Ever serene and fair,
And there is another sunshine,
Though it be darkness there;
Never mind faded forests, Austin,
Never mind silent fields -
Here is a little forest,
Whose leaf is ever green;
Here is a brighter garden,
Where not a frost has been;
In its unfading flowers
I hear the bright bee hum:
Prithee, my brother,
Into my garden come!
102. Cleansing with Hail and Storm [Reply to H.H. Mohammad Bin Rashid’s ‘Cleanse With Hail’] By Crimson Rose
Hail is not enough to cleanse ‘Lover’s Heart’
—for storm is needed to slash sensation, and bard;
frozen eyelids buried in dried residual tears;
feverous heart awaken to accursed ailment’s leers;
doe embracing kohl-delineated eyes, comparing that to Queen Nile’s;
sleeplessness, who becomes man takes leave, and loses to Denial.
What do all these three poems, have in common, besides being short and direct to some point?
they have been framed in two sentences or less. The definition of a sentence, is where not only the thought trail ends, but where '.' '!' '?' is found.
Go through them again, and you will notice this.
I had first noticed this with William blake during a lecture on the possible meaning this poem had, but many of us students failed because we had not noted the grammatical beauty of it, being it two sentences. Emily dickinson, had odd punctuation style, and strange Cpitalizations, but she had short sentences as well.
So Here are the Rules;
1. Write me a poem in four sentences or less, ending with '.' '!' or '?'[If you do it in one or two, you have my ultimate respect!!]
2. No sticky caps.
3. Doesn't really have to rhyme, so free verse is okay.
4. If you can make it sound old, like old Shakespearean English, that would be amazing.
5. Theme: Nothing in particular.
6. 'Emo,' 'Dark' is okay as long as you make it sound good.
7. Love is acceptable, as long as you make it sound new refreshed and no cliche!
8. Don't bash, be nice.
9. Most important one of all: ENJOY.
lol, another example, for those who love Sonnets;
Sonnet 14 - If thou must love me, let it be for nought by Elizabeth Barrett Browning
If thou must love me, let it be for nought
Except for love's sake only. Do not say
'I love her for her smile—her look—her way
Of speaking gently,—for a trick of thought
That falls in well with mine, and certes brought
A sense of pleasant ease on such a day'—
For these things in themselves, Beloved, may
Be changed, or change for thee,—and love, so wrought,
May be unwrought so. Neither love me for
Thine own dear pity's wiping my cheeks dry,—
A creature might forget to weep, who bore
Thy comfort long, and lose thy love thereby!
But love me for love's sake, that evermore
Thou mayst love on, through love's eternity.
O Rose, thou art sick!
The invisible worm
That flies in the night
In the howling storm:
Has found out thy bed
Of crimson joy:
And his dark secret love
Does thy life destroy.
There is another sky by Emily Dickinson
There is another sky,
Ever serene and fair,
And there is another sunshine,
Though it be darkness there;
Never mind faded forests, Austin,
Never mind silent fields -
Here is a little forest,
Whose leaf is ever green;
Here is a brighter garden,
Where not a frost has been;
In its unfading flowers
I hear the bright bee hum:
Prithee, my brother,
Into my garden come!
102. Cleansing with Hail and Storm [Reply to H.H. Mohammad Bin Rashid’s ‘Cleanse With Hail’] By Crimson Rose
Hail is not enough to cleanse ‘Lover’s Heart’
—for storm is needed to slash sensation, and bard;
frozen eyelids buried in dried residual tears;
feverous heart awaken to accursed ailment’s leers;
doe embracing kohl-delineated eyes, comparing that to Queen Nile’s;
sleeplessness, who becomes man takes leave, and loses to Denial.
What do all these three poems, have in common, besides being short and direct to some point?
they have been framed in two sentences or less. The definition of a sentence, is where not only the thought trail ends, but where '.' '!' '?' is found.
Go through them again, and you will notice this.
I had first noticed this with William blake during a lecture on the possible meaning this poem had, but many of us students failed because we had not noted the grammatical beauty of it, being it two sentences. Emily dickinson, had odd punctuation style, and strange Cpitalizations, but she had short sentences as well.
So Here are the Rules;
1. Write me a poem in four sentences or less, ending with '.' '!' or '?'[If you do it in one or two, you have my ultimate respect!!]
2. No sticky caps.
3. Doesn't really have to rhyme, so free verse is okay.
4. If you can make it sound old, like old Shakespearean English, that would be amazing.
5. Theme: Nothing in particular.
6. 'Emo,' 'Dark' is okay as long as you make it sound good.
7. Love is acceptable, as long as you make it sound new refreshed and no cliche!
8. Don't bash, be nice.
9. Most important one of all: ENJOY.
lol, another example, for those who love Sonnets;
Sonnet 14 - If thou must love me, let it be for nought by Elizabeth Barrett Browning
If thou must love me, let it be for nought
Except for love's sake only. Do not say
'I love her for her smile—her look—her way
Of speaking gently,—for a trick of thought
That falls in well with mine, and certes brought
A sense of pleasant ease on such a day'—
For these things in themselves, Beloved, may
Be changed, or change for thee,—and love, so wrought,
May be unwrought so. Neither love me for
Thine own dear pity's wiping my cheeks dry,—
A creature might forget to weep, who bore
Thy comfort long, and lose thy love thereby!
But love me for love's sake, that evermore
Thou mayst love on, through love's eternity.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on February 7, 2007
- Rewards: Gold: 300, Silver: 150, Bronze: 50, Honorable mention: 1 people
- Final notes: The contest is over,
Thank you all for entering and participating and impressing me with your talent.
Here are the Winners
Gold: Welcome My Friend; loved the juxtapose, the irony and the use of English lang in both old and new!
2 sentences
Silver: Willow; timeless peice with great meaning and pictorial in the words, and within the lines.
2 sentences
Bronze: Vacation's Last Night, very 'Easter Wings' loved the structure and alignment, added to the poem, it looked like a wine glass, it plays with the mind.
2 sentences
H.M. Daphne; very historical, very Greek, and something magical a story with passion and romance, hindering in the midst of the lines of the poem.
3 sentences
For the rest of you, thank you for making this contest a very difficult task to judge because of your wonderful submissions, wish you all to participate in more future contests of mine.
Contest Winners
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Daphne from fair Phobos did fly;
The west wind most sweetly did blow in her face-• Commented on by judge. [remove] -
Profound profanity
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Waste not want ~ for haste of read,• Commented on by judge. [remove]
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Bronze trophy winner
Honorable mention
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wow, this sounds like a great contest, and certainly sounds like a challenge. (especially for someone wordy like me!) but I'll bookmark this and see what I can come up with!
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YAY
I am glad I saw this in time. You have one of my very favorite poems here by my favorite poet EBB....I shall be back!
Lynda
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Thanks
so much for the award and the challenge. It was a very good exercise for me as I'm here to learn and ecpand my craft. Congrats to the winners and all who streached to meet the challenge.
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