Write a poem based on a classic poem you love.
HINTS: I prefer humour, not THAT keen on love poems unless very good, I like animal poems. However what I consider to be the best poem, whatever the genre, will win.
Ist will get 300
2nd 100
3rd 50
RULES: (There are a lot of these because I am fussy!)
Unfortunately you cannot write the original on this page as it is then registered with AP as your poem automatically I think - so please provide a link to the poem you have used as your inspiration, as I do not know every classic poem!! Thanks.
Try to make the subject of your poem fit with the form. (If the original was a rollicking yarn in rhyming couplets, do not give me a stilted love poem...)
Please check the rhymes, rhythms, line lengths etc match the original - READ IT OUT.
Please check spelling, grammar, punctuation. If you use spellcheck, use a dictionary to make sure the spellchecker has not substituted the wrong word - i.e. I've seen 'sole' instead of 'soul' several times on these pages.
I particularly loathe reversal of the order of words to fit a rhyming scheme. Poetry should always be as spoken except in very few circumstances. If you cannot find a rhyme, find another way of saying it, or change what you are saying. ONLY YOU WILL KNOW YOU"VE DONE THIS.
Do not use archaic words (thee, thou etc) we are living in 2006.
No capitals in the middle of words please.
Please use a legible colour on a suitable ground colour - if I can't read it I won't.
One entry per person.
Pre-writes are fine as long as they confom to the above rules!
I will comment on them all. If anyone is brave enough to enter!!!!!!!!
I will now write out 'Tarantella' by Hilaire Belloc, and following that my version, to give you the idea of what I want.
Tarantella, by Hilaire Belloc
Do you remember an Inn,
Miranda,
Do you remember an Inn?
And the tedding and the bedding
Of the straw for a bedding,
And the fleas that tease in the high Pyrenees,
And the wine that tasted of tar?
And the cheers and the jeers of the young muleteers
(under the vine of the dark verandah?)
Do you remember an Inn, Miranda,
Do you remember an Inn?
And the cheers and the jeers of the young muleteers
Who hadn't got a penny
And weren't paying any,
And the hammer at the door and the din?
And the hip! hop! hap!
Of the clap
Of the hands to the swirl and the twirl
Of the girl gone chancing,
Glancing,
Dancing,
Backing and advancing,
Snapping of the clapper to the spin
Out and In -
And the ting, tong, tang of the guitar!
Do you remember an Inn,
Miranda?
Do you remember an Inn?
Never more;
Miranda,
Never more.
Only the high peaks hoar;
And Aragon a torrent at the door.
No sound
In the walls of the halls where falls
The tread
Of the feet of the dead to the ground,
No sound:
But the boom
Of the far waterfall like doom.
HINTS: I prefer humour, not THAT keen on love poems unless very good, I like animal poems. However what I consider to be the best poem, whatever the genre, will win.
Ist will get 300
2nd 100
3rd 50
RULES: (There are a lot of these because I am fussy!)
Unfortunately you cannot write the original on this page as it is then registered with AP as your poem automatically I think - so please provide a link to the poem you have used as your inspiration, as I do not know every classic poem!! Thanks.
Try to make the subject of your poem fit with the form. (If the original was a rollicking yarn in rhyming couplets, do not give me a stilted love poem...)
Please check the rhymes, rhythms, line lengths etc match the original - READ IT OUT.
Please check spelling, grammar, punctuation. If you use spellcheck, use a dictionary to make sure the spellchecker has not substituted the wrong word - i.e. I've seen 'sole' instead of 'soul' several times on these pages.
I particularly loathe reversal of the order of words to fit a rhyming scheme. Poetry should always be as spoken except in very few circumstances. If you cannot find a rhyme, find another way of saying it, or change what you are saying. ONLY YOU WILL KNOW YOU"VE DONE THIS.
Do not use archaic words (thee, thou etc) we are living in 2006.
No capitals in the middle of words please.
Please use a legible colour on a suitable ground colour - if I can't read it I won't.
One entry per person.
Pre-writes are fine as long as they confom to the above rules!
I will comment on them all. If anyone is brave enough to enter!!!!!!!!
I will now write out 'Tarantella' by Hilaire Belloc, and following that my version, to give you the idea of what I want.
Tarantella, by Hilaire Belloc
Do you remember an Inn,
Miranda,
Do you remember an Inn?
And the tedding and the bedding
Of the straw for a bedding,
And the fleas that tease in the high Pyrenees,
And the wine that tasted of tar?
And the cheers and the jeers of the young muleteers
(under the vine of the dark verandah?)
Do you remember an Inn, Miranda,
Do you remember an Inn?
And the cheers and the jeers of the young muleteers
Who hadn't got a penny
And weren't paying any,
And the hammer at the door and the din?
And the hip! hop! hap!
Of the clap
Of the hands to the swirl and the twirl
Of the girl gone chancing,
Glancing,
Dancing,
Backing and advancing,
Snapping of the clapper to the spin
Out and In -
And the ting, tong, tang of the guitar!
Do you remember an Inn,
Miranda?
Do you remember an Inn?
Never more;
Miranda,
Never more.
Only the high peaks hoar;
And Aragon a torrent at the door.
No sound
In the walls of the halls where falls
The tread
Of the feet of the dead to the ground,
No sound:
But the boom
Of the far waterfall like doom.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on July 5, 2006
- Rewards: Gold: 300
- Final notes: I found this so hard to judge. I-Like -Rhymes topped because his poem ticked all my boxes- it is brilliant, it is in exactly the same style etc as the original, inspired by it's rhythms but a completely different subject, AND it was funny. The entry which came second also ticked all the boxes for exactly the same reasons, but didn't make me laugh quite so much -however it is also brilliant and will receive an extra 150 to give 300 as well. The bronze entry by Night Pheonix made me laugh and is a very appropriate subject. Of 24 entries, only 7 people had read the rules. Of the 17 which did not comply (and I have to presume perhaps my rules were not clearly stated enough) I have chosen 5 for Special Honourable Mentions, as they were all fantastic poems. They will all receive 25 points. Thank you for entering everyone, I've really enjoyed this.
Entries [14]
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For there in Second Life I know, I feel
Your love for me will remain strong as steel.by VF Evangelista 27 lines, 6 comments, on Mar 9 9:13 PM 2005. In Love• Commented on by judge. -
On woodland moss I oft would walk,
When fickle spring kissed blossomed bough,• Commented on by judge. -
I met a man who knew rivers
rivers seeded along shores in young dawns• Commented on by judge. -
My dear good Sir I find amusing
Your desperate plea to love me until morning• Commented on by judge. -
RISING FROM A HAMMOCK ON WILLIAM DUFFY'S FARM
(INSPIRED BY THE JAMES WRIGHT POEM)• Commented on by judge. -
My cheeks are too fat, as are my hips
To wide is the width of my stomachby half-interested 15 lines, 5 comments, on Jun 7 2:22 PM 2006. In Personal• Commented on by judge. -
Little Boy Blue
by Eugene Field (1850-1895)by GiveMeMyWings 31 lines, 5 comments, on Jun 20 7:26 AM 2006. In Childrens• Commented on by judge. -
Listen to the Mustn'ts, by Shel Silverstein
Listen to the MUSTN'TS child,by Archer Bowman 19 lines, 2 comments, on Jun 20 1:26 PM 2006. In Childrens• Commented on by judge. -
Dictionaries to the right of them,
Dictionaries to the left of them,• Commented on by judge. -
The gator is like a crocodile,
Except, for the way it smiles.by The tie guy 7 lines, 4 comments, on Jun 22 5:57 PM 2006. In Humor• Commented on by judge. -
this is my first poem when i was only 7 years oldby butterflydoll 5 lines, 5 comments, on Jun 29 12:16 PM 2006. In Other• Commented on by judge.
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Goodbye lover! Not a lover?
Perhaps only a seedy cover?• Commented on by judge. -
I am not standing there
For I do Not weep• Commented on by judge.
Silver trophy winner
Gold trophy winner
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Hi, nice idea for a comp, can we give you a link to original poem instead of typing it out? all the best with the comp, hugs Di
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amazing
Very unique idea for a contest. This is interesting... I will admit. I don't know that I have the creativity to base an original poem off of another write from someone else, especially using the same form. I will try to come up with something in the time that I have. I'll see what I can do, but no promises, dear Funpum.
Anyway, once again, wonderful idea. I look forward to reading all your entries, and possibly entering myself.
Much love, as always,
Bubbles -
i have an adult pardoy version of wordsworth's written in march poem i will have to go and get the orginal version unless i still have it in my file with the poem. spill ink and twist me into the shape of love...
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Good Idea.
I hope you get something as good as this pair
Original Clancy of the Overflow oldpoetry.com/opoem/5334
Parody --- Banjo of the Overflow oldpoetry.com/opoem/59745
Good Luck.
Jim -
hmm's... the only thing i that can say that really inspires me to write something for this is E A Poe's THe Raven... but that's really long, so im not sure if you'd let me cut it down or not(?)... but this is a really cool idea!
-alex -
Dear Funpum,
You've come up with quite a contest - Great Idea - not to search the archives of poetry.
Wish me happy hunting.
Tang -
This is a comment by funpum to everyone -I-Like-Rhymes's message to me reminded me of one of my favourite take-offs - Read Bill Greenwell's take on 'Hiawatha'. It always makes me unable to breathe for some time.
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Congratulations to all winners.
~Sonja~ -
good contest and great winning choices, Funpum! it was a fun contest to read the entries. I have the book you suggested on order at the bookstore and can't wait until it comes in.
CONGRATULATIONS TO ALL THE WINNERS!
Jo -
Thanks for the trophy and the inspiration for my poem. Without the impetus I would not have found the muse for that particular effort to express my feelings.
Thanks also for the contest which enabled me to read so many fine poems both by the competitors and their own poetic inspirations.
I shall be ensuring as many as possible grace OLDPOETRY soon if they are not already listed.
To you and all the other entrants thanks for an enjoyable afternoon reading everything here.
Jim
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