I want comments on my story, "Too Good To Be True" My Vampire and his assistant are going into a spiritual struggle. I want comments on the direction the story is going.
Can a Vampire change?
Can a Vampire become good?
Can a Vampire be forgiven?
I have taken on a collaborator on these stories, and I would like your opinion. The book is nearing completion.
storywrite.com/Story/1562784 Is the link.
I will comment on all stories submitted from authors who comment on my story. One story limit per writer.
Points will and mention will be awarded to those stories which impress me.
Andy
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on October 20, 2005
- Rewards: Gold: 300
- Final notes: There were few entries and the decision was relatively easy. The entry by Artemis Gem was quite good, but was a chapter rather than a story. Apparently my rules were not clear, and for this I apologize.
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vampires suck... right?
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God bless you, me and all A LOT
I sure hope vampires can change and be good. Let us pray. -
Mine does much more than suck and he is becoming very spiritual and phiosophical. Check in my list, "A Hedonistic Vampire" Horror/erotica. The last four chapter are very intellectual.
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Too Good To Be True
Sounds like it was too good to be true since vampster
is out on the prowl with "Another Taste" which, by the way, I'm NOT reading. Grrr 
I was hoping this vampster was on the wagon not out pulling up his old habits from storing on a lagan.
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SEA, there is no erotica in this. I don't care whether you read it or not. Your beliefs are more fragile than mine, I think. The next chapters have some erotica, but they are better intellectually and spiritually. You have to sugar coat your beliefs to shove them down people's throats. People like erotica better than anything else I write.
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Too Good To Be True
Sugar coat?
Ouch! Are you talking about me. You. Or in general.
"Andy Stephenson:
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ok I think that it is possible to change but not possible to forget I think others could forgive him but if he changes completely he might not be able to forgive himself I think he could become good but becoming good could destroy him because being good he would realize he had the potential to be good before and he wasn't thus he could eternally or temporarily be overwhelmed by guilt I don't know the character to well you know him better obviously but that would be my best guess
Two sides to every coin
Nice contest
T
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Very good point, Flip. Would he feel guilt and how would it affect him? I will try to take that into consideration.
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Hi andy stephenson I have a question regarding the entry for this contest.
Did you want a sort of; other people's adaption following your
"To good to be true" story?
Or we can put in our own stories regarding,
Can a Vampire change?
Can a Vampire become good?
Can a Vampire be forgiven?
Although it is getting close to that time that this contest will end, I don't know if you will be able to answer this question if you are signed in at certain times.
I have a story called "A Vampire's Last breath"
But I am not sure if it's under the category or idea you are looking for. Let me know, if not don't worry about it, like I said it is close to that time the contest will end.
I bookmarked this page so I can read your story "Too Good To Be True"
I am always looking to read writes and stories of vampires. It is however my cup of tea
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I just want you to read the story and then tell me if you think my vampire can be saved, change, and become good. You can enter any kind of story.
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ok thank you andy
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cool
I like your charecter in the story. Everything can change, including Vampires. Wheather a Vampire can be forgiven or not depends of who is forgiving them. As to weather a Vampire can become good, I ask you What is goodness? Who defines it? And were vampires ever truelly bad? They do what they have to to survive, same as humans so who are we to judge? -
Let's say that society defines good, or lawful. There is a range of what fits into good. Victor has been doing as he felt he should as a vampire, but he is developing a social conscience. I don't know what the result will be.
You had the best comment, but you didn't enter the contest? -
Thanx!
I really appreciate it!
Gem -
thanks a bunch for the gold
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Flip, you put in the most effort. Your welcome.
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