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It was another day. April hit her alarm clock and sat up. April yawned. She glanced at the clock and saw it was 6:30. She stood up and walked off to the bathroom. April Began to undress and got in the shower. The warm water ran down her body. She grabed her sponge and the bar of ZEST soap. She lathered up. April finally finished her shower. She Placed her hand on the HOT water knob and turned it slowly. As she grabed her towle she stepped out of the shower. Cold chills ran down her body because the house was so much cooler than her warm shower. April wraped her towel around her and walked into her bed room. April sat on her bed and pluged her blowdrier up and turned on her strating iron on. April begain to blowdry her hair.Aprils long blond hair was always in her face. Her mother hated that. She placed the blow drier down on the floor when she finished drying her hair. She held a long sleek strand out as she stratin' ironed it. And there it was. She heard the yelling of her step father and mother once more. She slowly shook her head. Her feet sunk into the carpet as she stood up once more to do over to her dresser. She walked oer to her dresser and grabbed her back eye shadow.She heavaly put it onto her eye lid. April so despretly wanted to die her light blond hair black. But her mother didnt want that. April grabed a pair of jeans and a black "Slip knot" tee shirt and put it on. She ran down the stairs of her houes. "Good morining April." April mom said. "Sup" April said.
"April honey don't you think you need to where some color"? Her mother asked.
"MOm she's a gothic freak..." Beth her sister said.
"Shut up you preppy cheerleating snob!" April said.
"ENOUGH!" Their mom said."Go to school" She said takng a long sip of her coffe.
"Bye mom" BEth said
"Bye" April said.
"How the Fuc* coould you let them argue like that?" Their step dad said
"Oh Moris!" Come on! Moris (there step dad)stood up. Aprils eyes widen. He walked over to there mother and grabed her face.
"Moris" Their mother strained to say. Her slaped her and she fell to the ground.Aprils mouth opened and as she ran up to her room.
Now YOU have to finish it!!
* rules *
Not to much cussing, I can understand a little. (please use stars so it wont be BUNNY, i hate that!! lol)
No sticky caps
And coment on the other work!
Prizes
1st Gold,300 points, 4 coments and 2 applauds
2ed Silver, 50 points,3 coments and 2 applauds
3rd Bronz,25 points, 2 coments and 1 applaud
Much love
Jessica
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** The storey
It was another day. April hit her alarm clock and sat up. April yawned. She glanced at the clock and saw it was 6:30. She stood up and walked off to the bathroom. April Began to undress and got in the shower. The warm water ran down her body. She grabed her sponge and the bar of ZEST soap. She lathered up. April finally finished her shower. She Placed her hand on the HOT water knob and turned it slowly. As she grabed her towle she stepped out of the shower. Cold chills ran down her body because the house was so much cooler than her warm shower. April wraped her towel around her and walked into her bed room. April sat on her bed and pluged her blowdrier up and turned on her strating iron on. April begain to blowdry her hair.Aprils long blond hair was always in her face. Her mother hated that. She placed the blow drier down on the floor when she finished drying her hair. She held a long sleek strand out as she stratin' ironed it. And there it was. She heard the yelling of her step father and mother once more. She slowly shook her head. Her feet sunk into the carpet as she stood up once more to do over to her dresser. She walked oer to her dresser and grabbed her back eye shadow.She heavaly put it onto her eye lid. April so despretly wanted to die her light blond hair black. But her mother didnt want that. April grabed a pair of jeans and a black "Slip knot" tee shirt and put it on. She ran down the stairs of her houes. "Good morining April." April mom said. "Sup" April said.
"April honey don't you think you need to where some color"? Her mother asked.
"MOm she's a gothic freak..." Beth her sister said.
"Shut up you preppy cheerleating snob!" April said.
"ENOUGH!" Their mom said."Go to school" She said takng a long sip of her coffe.
"Bye mom" BEth said
"Bye" April said.
"How the Fuc* coould you let them argue like that?" Their step dad said
"Oh Moris!" Come on! Moris (there step dad)stood up. Aprils eyes widen. He walked over to there mother and grabed her face.
"Moris" Their mother strained to say. Her slaped her and she fell to the ground.Aprils mouth opened and as she ran up to her room.
Now YOU have to finish it!!
* rules *
Not to much cussing, I can understand a little. (please use stars so it wont be BUNNY, i hate that!! lol)
No sticky caps
And coment on the other work!
Prizes
1st Gold,300 points, 4 coments and 2 applauds
2ed Silver, 50 points,3 coments and 2 applauds
3rd Bronz,25 points, 2 coments and 1 applaud
Much love Jessica
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on July 25, 2005
- Rewards: Gold: 300
- Final notes:
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this is april and her life.... hope u like• Commented on by judge.
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I lub it
This sound like a great contest...Good LLuck everone!!
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sorry!
hey i would add i just dont have the time to think of anything im sorry! ill be ready for your next one though! i promise!
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Hey sorry, but I'm not iterested. But as a Tip, your story has many errors. When someone talks, there's a new line for each person speaking. And I've noticed that you've used April way too much. You repeatedly said "April, blah-de-blah" and "April, blah-de-blum" several times you did that, and I'm not telling you this to get you angry or anything. I mean this completely as kindness and honesty and as a friendly person. I just think that when the writer states the character's name too many times in one sitting, that the story will lose it's self and be too involved int the word. Not who the word is, or what it is, or what it means... just too involved in the word. People attend to do that alot with the word "and" aswell. And as a tip, there is a spell check you can do before you post your work, you should use it more often because it can save you froom having to go back every other word when you're reading it and it becomes a hastle... the spell check can become your best friend. Sorry, I just like to write. I don't have much on this site, but I have like 5 different novels started and I'm very well at what I do, I think so and so do many others. But I'm a guy, and I don't completely understand the way a female works, and what they like, or whatever. So if you ever need some writing tips, Kai (Klown Soldier) is very good at explaning things. I'm not that good at it... lol I'm just good at sounding good. lol. but anyways, other than that, your idea is very interestiong and I would of loved to finish your story but I really haven't the time and I'm not much of a short story writer, because I am a long writer because of I like detail. A short stary has alot of lack of details... so, sorry. Maybe next time
Good Luck with your contest...
-C.L.
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