Exactly what the title says. ABUSE. I'm in the mood to hear of other's pain becuase I'm feeling so much of it right now. Check it out.
Choices
1*Physical abuse. I want to know how your dad or mom *not bf or gf* beats you.
2*Verbal abuse. I want to know how your mom, dad, bf, gf, or ANYONE verbally abuses. Tells you you're a piece of shit, puts you down, makes you feel like dying.
3*Bullying. I want to know how bad your bully makes you feel. How you want to shoot the whole school. How people make you feel like shit and you're at the edge and can't take it anymore.
4*Your conscience..how your innerself puts you down. How YOU put you down. What does it make you feel? What does it make you do?
5*You're the abuser for any of the above choices.
Rules
1*Cuss is aloud.
2*I want to feel what it is you feel in the poem. I want to feel hurt like you feel it.
3*No StIcKy caps.
4*Capatilise needed words and spell words correctly please.
5*Can only enter a maximum of three.
6*Go crazy.
Victims, aren't we all?-The Crow
Choices
1*Physical abuse. I want to know how your dad or mom *not bf or gf* beats you.
2*Verbal abuse. I want to know how your mom, dad, bf, gf, or ANYONE verbally abuses. Tells you you're a piece of shit, puts you down, makes you feel like dying.
3*Bullying. I want to know how bad your bully makes you feel. How you want to shoot the whole school. How people make you feel like shit and you're at the edge and can't take it anymore.
4*Your conscience..how your innerself puts you down. How YOU put you down. What does it make you feel? What does it make you do?
5*You're the abuser for any of the above choices.
Rules
1*Cuss is aloud.
2*I want to feel what it is you feel in the poem. I want to feel hurt like you feel it.
3*No StIcKy caps.
4*Capatilise needed words and spell words correctly please.
5*Can only enter a maximum of three.
6*Go crazy.
Victims, aren't we all?-The Crow
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on July 19, 2005
- Rewards: Gold: 380
- Final notes:
Entries [13]
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She blocks out this memory
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If death could only come sooner...
please oh shining star...• Commented on by judge. -
Watch my eyes
they tell a story• Commented on by judge. -
This poem is very hateful. It's really kinda scarey. It scared me when i wrote it.by eternalsuicide 31 lines, 3 comments, on Feb 11 12:55 AM 2005. In Dark• Commented on by judge.
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So in a daze,
Pulled many ways,by missimorticia 17 lines, 2 comments, on May 24 9:56 PM 2005. In Angst• Commented on by judge. -
It's getting harder to breathe,
There's no feeling left inside of me,by missimorticia 9 lines, 2 comments, on May 24 9:58 PM 2005. In Sad• Commented on by judge. -
Sweaty hands of a maniac upon me,
Strangling hands around my throat,by missimorticia 13 lines, 4 comments, on May 24 9:59 PM 2005. In Abuse• Commented on by judge. -
Years are lost, taken from me
stolen in waves of angry fists.• Commented on by judge. -
Clinging on to bitter truth
In hopes it’s just a lieby Dark Phoenix 39 lines, 2 comments, on Jun 12 12:58 AM 2005. In Personal, Dark, Angst
Gold trophy winner
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Look in the mirror, I can see my ribs
Still it's too fat, for you• Commented on by judge.
Silver trophy winner
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wow...thats alot of poems to judge. lol, have fun!
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Hi, I noticed you haven't even read my 2 submissions yet. Any idea how long this will take for you to judge it? La x
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I really don't appreciate being questioned. I read each poem thoroughly and give it thought, I do have a life other than AP and it's not too peachy so I have to deal with that. Your patience is appreciated and so if you could kindly just hold your horses, I will edit this contest and make it worth more than it is now. Fair enough?
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I wouldn't ever complain about a contest taking a while to judge if I am assured the judge reads everything and takes the time to comment on entries (if nothing more than to say thanks for entering- but I'd prefer an actual critique).
I'm wondering why your name didn't show up on my list of readers for my entries. You're not a paid member so you couldn't have viewed them from the judging page.
Were you perhaps not signed in? If so, you wouldn't have been able to view them anyways since adult items require being signed in. You are listed on your author's page as adult so you shouldn't have been blocked from reading them. Or perhaps you read them as soon as they were entered- I think the Latest Views list only goes back 2 weeks. I'm just not sure you read them because there's no comments on them at all.
Please understand that I am not questioning you because I didn't win. Trophies and points are nice, but my purpose in entering contests is to get constructive criticism on my work.
I know the subject matter is personal for you, so perhaps you were overwhelmed by things but I'd like you to know if you do need someone to talk to, I am always willing to lend an ear. There are also lots of groups on here for people who've been abused.
Anyways I would appreciate it if someone could read and critique my entries because I really do want to become a better writer. Sympathy and empathy is welcome, too, of course, but I didn't write for pity- I wrote to purge my feelings.
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I give my apologies. I have been so busy with family problems and my problems..I didn't judge my contest, the moderators did and I was fined two hundred points for not doing so. I did read your poetry and truthfully youre a wonderful writer. I will critique your poetry asap. I got on just to see if my friend had written me because I haven't heard from her in a while. I promise I will give you a critique that will help you with your writing rather than 'this is good' and what not. So please accept my apologies.
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My apologies as well... I thought that they now indicated in the final notes if a moderator judged (I've seen that a couple times recently). Take your time and thanks again for offering constructive criticism.
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