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Dasyure - A New Poetry Form

This is a new form I created which I think many will enjoy writing in. All feedback welcome.
The "Dasyure" (pronounced Dass-ee-yur) is a small marsupial mouse native to Australia and Papua New Guinea, in some areas it is also called a "Quoll".

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The above image is a Richard Lydekker painting of the Spotted-tailed Dasyure. Richard Lydekker (1848-1945) was an English born Naturalist / Artist and a foremost authority in his time on mammals of the world, in particular game animals.

Okay so now we have all been educated a little, this is
how I hope to create beauty in poetry of a similarly short stature.

Stanza 1: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme a,b,a,b,c

Stanza 2: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme d,c,d,e,e

Stanza 3: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme a,b,a,b,c

Stanza 4: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme d,c,d,e,e

example poems by me:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3333352
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3334906

Other Poets who have attempted this form:

Passions Promise
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3487214
The poem above has been deleted for some reason - apologies.

Griswold
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3488754

Laura Lamarca
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3518036
The poem above has been deleted for some reason - apologies.

Amera
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3519412

poet2angels
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3559873

Sandygram
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4342955

malmadre
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4346113

xJustifiablyMex
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4740405

I wish much enjoyment to those that decide to try this form out. All feedback will be greatly welcomed.

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  • jasminerose gold member
    September 22
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    Oh I will have to give this one a go.. hmmm after I write my round entry
    Looks challenging and fun too!
    Thanks for sharing your creativeness with us all!!
    Jazzy

  • The Third Eye
    August 29
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    interesting, and pretty hard as well with all the rhymes. but one major thing this form accomplishes is the swift flow due to the syllable count and the repeating rhyme scheme. i just commented on poet2angels' poem through the link that you've provided. It's beautiful.

    I'm a free verse poet, but if I ever feel like rhyming, I'll be sure to try this form out. Thanks for letting me know.

  • Griswold silver member
    October 9, 2007
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    Here is my attempt, Since my sweetheart did one, I had to try it ...Scott
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3488754

  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 9, 2007
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    HEY I think I like this one.. I am going to work on one here in a bit
    WOOHOO You go with your bad self...
    Willbe back to see what you think if you dont mind
    Tory

    • Errant Panther silver member
      October 9, 2007
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      Glad you attempted it and you seem as though you will have fun with this form, send me links anytime and I will read them.

  • Fearylynn
    October 9, 2007
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    i'll have to try it someday.

    • Errant Panther silver member
      October 9, 2007
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      thanks for your comment, send me the link if you do, I'll be glad to read it.

  • LadyLeviathan silver member
    September 5, 2007
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    i love this! i am going to try it!

  • Poet Brokenheart
    September 4, 2007
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    I don't follow forms of poetry much, even though I do try to, very creative and unique style. I'll try it out sometime

    • Errant Panther silver member
      October 9, 2007
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      thanks for your comment, send me the link if you do, I'll be glad to read it.

  • Matt Holck
    September 4, 2007
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    I like the approach and retreat of the line lengths
    I sort of climax effect

  • crimsetssorrow
    September 4, 2007
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    Form limits the creativity that can be expressed by a poet. Btw Akashic Archangel (which the name doesnt make sense.... red shic Archangel... unless you delve in blood) said that it becomes mediocre... NEVER it shows work and effort. I would much rather see that a poem has content and tropes rather than form (although it can add) and since you have done both... congratz keep writing.

  • darkknight marellus
    September 3, 2007
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    You know, I don't really enjoy writing in form so much, because it seems like a huge effort for something that will come out mediocre, at best. This "Dasyure" form, though, looks cool...The fact that the animal is kinda cute helps, too. Great job. You came up with this yourself? Great job!


  • Midnight Raeven silver member
    September 3, 2007
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    I don't think that I write in forms much, but I am willing to try this one out. Thanks for making a new one for all of us to enjoy.

    You really know your stuff!

  • catz Moderators member
    September 3, 2007
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    An interesting looking form, I think I'll give it a try

    Dee

  • elemental angel
    August 24, 2007
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    I'll have to have a go at this. Bookmarked and Bravo you.

  • DolphinLass silver member
    August 22, 2007
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    good luck and well done son but I have not yet tried to write special types of verse with counted syllables, I just write. Thanks for the education too as I hadn't heard of this creature or seen even a picture of one before, I guess this proves you learn something new everyday as I did today, lol

  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    August 22, 2007
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    This is similar to the Tanka form, 5 lines per stanza with a similar syllable count; but this has the added structure of a disciplined end-line rhyming pattern and a continuation of form through 4 stanzas whereas the Tanka has only one. This is a very interesting form indeed that should catch on quick around AP. I've bookmarked this and shall be back to see an example of it. I also shall try this myself soon. Thank you for sharing this and good luck with it! La x

  • Amera gold member
    August 22, 2007
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    Interesting! It reminds me of a rhyming haiku. Please let me know when you post the example.
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