The speculated “troubles” of families, television, and influences on them goes without saying that in today’s society that there’s the lack of stimulating activities for children and adults of what they either are too afraid to try/attempt OR simply aren’t motivated enough to move away) for several hours) from that sofa and/or wherever they sit on to watch the TV.
However, the factors lie (and there are many) fall basically upon what can be done—even by perchance provided to activate the mind’s imagination to exhibit a more productive life while showing an extreme method(s) exerting from productivity compared to doing absolutely nothing. Without being so [contrite] overly expressive, many more families are drawn to show less interaction of involvement toward things such as:
• Corporate meetings
• Classrooms
• Sporting event[s]
• Other interactive activities
In contrast to everything else, those who fully embraces the idyllic grandeur of turning off the TV are prone to realize that life isn’t what is based on television, or that that it’s seen as ‘going through one door’ and automatically, you’re in another room/building AND/OR city/state/country {or wherever} but at the same time, acknowledges that the real world is waiting to be explored once more.
As an end result, families who adopt the idea of turning off the TV verses households that don’t, are at greater advantages at achieving a higher understandment and/or grasp of paying more attention about things in comparison of families that view life beyond the front door as a television show, furthering dislodging themselves as a world of non-existent reality.Know right off the bat that this is my English assignment based on what influence(s) affects families about television. SO if feature, I ask that you give a more in-depth commentary about this as well as the critique and not some two-worded line just to get my hard earned points.
The title of which this assignment was based upon is called, The Quiet Hour by Robert Mayer. Sadly, I'm unable to find the article/story over the net and if someone does, please let me know the link.
The speculated “troubles” of families, television, and influences on them goes without saying that in today’s society that there’s the lack of stimulating activ
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it was late when i had written this (pulling an all nighter to get it done) but at least i know what needs to be edited and such. thanks for commenting
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I agree whole heartedly with your premise here. I personally gave up watching TV in 1995, I've barely watched it since then and even then only at the prompting of a guest in my home...I did turn it on one night to watch Princess Di's funeral....
I think TV has become too much of a desensitizer on our children and too much of an influence. My own children are long grown up and old enough that TV was not the main attraction of life for them. But I look around and see our youth's minds wasted on a square box with pictures and their bodies nearly wasted on doing not much more than sitting in front of it, becoming weak, overweight and undernourished as they munch away on junk food..
Oh darn... I never should have gotten started.... I'll shut up now about that.
Your column is sound and pertinent to todays lifestyles and problems. I agree with some of the others above, though. It needs editing for grammar, punctuation and overall presentation. With that done, it could become an even more impressive write.
I'm glad I stopped in to read this
Dee
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Great Job!
Thanks for not using a lot of complicated words lol. I could understand what u where saying
You did a wonderful job...the thing is tho if we are going to take the TV away shouldn't we take the net away to?
Awesome write huney,
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Well, to begin with, this is a very timely subject. You have stated your beliefs and passions. As I am not sure how long this was to be, I cannot do much with content, but I would suggest a longer piece and some sources to back up what you say. Facts are always more convincing than opinions.
You do need to proofread this. You have several grammatical errors:
1. Your first paragraph is too long. If you could break it up into two or more sentences, it would read smoother. You have introduced too many thoughts for one sentence. Also, when you read it closer, it loses its impact due to sentence formatting.
2. I am not sure what you are trying to say with most of your sentences. Again, breaking them up is an answer.
3. Your use of some words is improper. Contrite means remorseful or apologetic, where I believe the word you want is trite, meaning stale, old or overused. And, you have said (sic) contrite and then used the phrase overly expressive. I am not really sure what you want to say here.
Overall, the idea has merits, but the delivery needs work. I see from your bio that you are in college now, so I have to assume that this if for a college course. Unless the professor wants just a blurb from the top of your head, this really does need more in-depth writing.
I hope that this is not too harsh. I gathered that you wanted something more than "I agree", which I do. I also wanted to note that I do know who you are, since you were kind enough to put it on your bio page. As an English major in HS and having taken class in college, I feel I do know somewhat what needs work.
I also feel that I can speak about the tv. We gave it up almost three years ago. Do I miss it? Oh, yeah, very much. However, I found that it was sucking the life from me. I was taping two shows at night and watching a third. I planned all my social events around tv shows. We even turned down things to do because they would interfere with our tv watching. Christmas of 2003, I got bronchitis so bad I thought I was dying. One night, I sat down at the computer and started writing. It was a silly fanfiction, but I finished it. Soon I was writing short stories and poetry. Suddenly, I decided I did not need tv to escape from life. And, I rediscovered living. Now, I accept social doings, we go where we want and do what we want. There are no more constraints on my time (other than work and the kids). And, the kids have not suffered any. So, if you are contemplating giving up tv, I strongly recommend it. We spend our teen years complaining about controlling parents, then give our lives over to a box spouting garbage and crap. Well, we might as well go watch the toilet, for all the redeeming qualities television has.
Thank you for writing this. I hope you do well with it. -
ahhhh i see i see....yeah definitely ill change that part you mentioned.
This is what i get for pulling an all-nighter on college homework thats due tues and math due wednesday lol. whispersm "brain fart" in any case, thank you so much for dropping by and commenting and critiquing my assignment
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thought provoking
This is very true. My family usually do watch telivision in the evening, but mainly intelligent and thought provoking things. If the tv is not being watched it is always off.
This is an interesting piece, and I hope people will remember it when they sit down to watch the telivision.
Much love
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You've made an excellent point here. Television is taking over our society. Children grow up believing they need to look just like the actors and artists, or else something is wrong with them. So many people that I know look at a good book and say: "Naw, I'm too lazy to read. I'll wait until the movie comes out" which is really a shame, as they are missing so much of the magic within the pages of the books they deny to spend hours and hours watching television.
I was babysitting for five children this past summer, and each day they were supposed to have a half hour of reading time because their mother doesn't want them watching television all the time. One day I had one of the twins remark to me as I turned off Spongebob, "Hey! I've only seen that episode four times!!! Can't I read during the commercials?" Is that what our life has come to... living during the commercials? How pathetic! And after reading time the seperate children would branch off into different rooms to watch television again... most of them watching the same channel but not wanting to be with the others. Very sad.
As an assignment, this feels like it gets a little wordy in places, as if you were putting in words just to take up space. granted, I'm guilty of the same (I actually took out the word "flood" in one of my papers and replaced it with a twenty word or so description of "flood" so I could fill in more space. I was thoroughly amused, but the teacher didn't like it much). An example of where you do this is: "you’re in another room/building AND/OR city/state/country {or wherever}" when you could say something more like "you're transported to another place." It rolls off the tongue better, and doesn't distract the reader so much. -
thanks Lane
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Unfortunately, we don't live in the days of Ozzie and Harriet anymore, when Mom's stayed home and made after school snacks and Dad's played catch in the front yard with the kids. Television is the babysitter, the lover, the friend, the DISTRACTION from what is beyond the front door, unfortunately.
Your article is well written, informative, and stays on course, which is hard to do when writing on contracting views. I give this a B+
Love,
Lane -
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exelent
i think that you have to also take into consideration that a lot of families live the *fast life* rushing here there and everywhere chitter chatter work work work adults and children alike are under more and more pressures now and so it is lovely most evenings when they are able to stop, to sit down, turn on the tv and turn off life..tv is not the demon some would have it be,it is also not a *conversation stopper* as some would have us beleive either in fact it is one of the most talked about things ! even between strangers such as you and i
how often have we got involved in conversations with people we would probably never speak to when there has been something extra dramatic or shocking on the tv the night before..
even families that do not *get on* so well will often be found all together when a fav soap is on tv and they will share the laughter or sorrows from the screen ..either way they are comunicating and thats all that counts to keep that *family bond* sometimes..ooh i have rambled on a bit
sorry..
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this is very good and I agree with the content. you did a good job of relating the problems facing the youth of today, and the influence of television on their lives. and yes television does promote a "false image" of reality often leaving the child with an idea that their reality is wrong since it does not match those shown on television.
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