Neuf-Onzan(Modern)
With many thank yous to Mystic Enchantress, who so gracefully came up with the name, I will now show you the modern version along with the format how it would look.
The modern version of this form is similar with the traditional-- only difference of that is the stanza line per stanza goes like this: seven, three, six, and three. In other words your stanzas will appear like this with the syllabic count remaining the same
>>>Traditional guidelines: Syllabic count is enneasyllabic or nine syllables per line with incorporating syllabic count of hendecasyllabic or eleven. Traditional poem requires end rhyming with matching end consonant and/or vowel but line four of the stanza DOES NOT need a matching end consonant and/or vowel and line six of simply rhymes With alternating stanzas of six, seven, and three (stanza length is three for traditional whereas modern stanza length is up to you)
Moreover, the theme usually deals with society but necessarily doesn’t have to.
Format
A->9
B->11
C>9
C>9
B>11
A>11
B->9
2nd stanza:
Line 1(repeats line B2)
Line 2(refrains syllabic count of A2)
Line 3 (repeats line B3)
D>9
E>9
F>11
F>11
D>9
E>11
4th stanza:
Line 1(repeats line F1)
Line 2(refrains syllabic count of E2)
Line 3 (repeats line D1)
Example using this poem(also this can be located on my page)
On The Scene
Wistfully the grandeur of concrete
Paled to comparison from their eyes wishing
And thoughts of reappearance secrete
Puddles of idolized minute turns
Momentum stood non-withstanding listing
Everything iced over held indiscrete
From stoned mannequins, lies existing
Momentum stood non-withstanding listing
Beliefs faltered to recesses of man’s minds
From stoned mannequins, lies existing
Unknown faces recognized no smiles
While sidewalks began that idle talk--
Graffiti glared closely… concentration
Autistic movements sought out salvation
Insertions opened twice under wiles
Now here they lay in midst of palpitations
Graffiti glared closely…concentration
Half emptied dreams although narrowly closed words
Unknown faces recognized no smiles
By: MeThis is also an original creation but its the second version of Neuf-Onzan
Neuf-Onzan(Modern)
With many thank yous to Mystic Enchantress, who so gracefully came up with the name, I will now show you the modern version along with the
With many thank yous to Mystic Enchantress, who so gracefully came up with the name, I will now show you the modern version along with the
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Its knowing that you're having a blast learning something new
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Rae: I have to bookmark this and come to it after the contest. I still have five more forms to write to end the contest and I promised myslef that I would try to learn all the forms that were entered. It is quite the challenge but I am having fun doing it so I will go and finish judging and writing and come back later and try this one.
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ty and thats the thing.....
I can't find sorrowfull moon's poem. In any cases thereof, i look forward to reading yours as well -
yay for the neuf-onzan!
This is very informative and I am interested in trying this myself, after reading Sorrowful Moon's poem. I have been experimenting with form poetry and I could not resist taking a look at this. Thank you for explaining things clearly, and providing an example for us to look at. -
let me know once you've written it! i want to see!! send me the link after you're done
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It is an amazing and a well crafted format. I did worked on it and will be posting it. I am glad I checked on the columns and opened this one. The name of the format caught my eye and well then the format itself. Congratulations for coming up with this amazing form, I am sure I will be working with it a lot, since I enjoyed writing my first one. I would love for you to take a look at it and give me any pointers or see if I did it right.
Love & Light
Sorrowful Moon
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WOW! A wonderful form indeed with a beautiful name. Congratulations on the creation of this.
Charishma
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hey even i scare myself whenever my brain decides to work
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let me know the link after youve given it a shot
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nahhh more like a whisper in the wind
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My head hurts. Because really , By almost all means , I am no good at forms. I must say though....It's intriguing to read.
I want to critique your poem so bad...
I can't help myself. My eye reads things so closely. But the reason I will refrain is because I know shit about the idea itself and might end up critiquing something that had to stay.
Good luck though...Really hope you have fun with this.
All the best ,
James
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Hi, all the best with your comp ,interesting but I don't think it's for me,as I am a narrative writer basicly I find I'm no good at abstract and obscure, wish you well with your comp, Di
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This is totally awesome! I'll have to try it! Thanks for this and for helping teach others, this is a very cool and unique poetry format!
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WOW Rae I am truly honored that you chanced on the name I gave your poetry format... I was thinking about your format last night and today and certainly would love to give it a try and see how it comes out. Thank you for sharing such wonderful format with us and for the wonderful gift of your creative pen. Blessings, Nena
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It does make it easier to visualize when there is an example to follow. So many new forms have been created on AP - here is your new poetic form. You will go down in history!
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It is all in the form.
Excellent the way you venture into new Poetic forms.Almost like Muscians.Well done and look forward to reading Poems using this form.Congratulations.Elizabeth.
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